Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains irrelevant or confusing information. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid unrelated phrases and keep your answer concise and coherent.

例: Yes, I write quite often because it helps me focus and remember important information. For example, I write notes during my studies to improve my understanding.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand and lacks clear structure. Try to directly answer the question with a topic sentence, then explain why you write, using simple and clear language. Avoid confusing or incomplete sentences.

例: I don't enjoy writing much, but I write notes for my exams to help me learn better. Writing helps me identify my weak points so I can improve.

提案: Your answer shows some understanding but is not very clear or well-structured. Use linking words to connect your ideas and explain clearly how writing helps you improve. Keep sentences concise and relevant.

例: Yes, writing helps me improve many things, especially my weak points. For example, I write answers in my notebook and then check if they are correct, which helps me learn better.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and contains unclear phrases. Try to clearly state your preference and give specific reasons using simple linking words. Avoid repetition and irrelevant details.

例: I prefer handwriting over typing because it helps me concentrate better. When I write by hand, I am less distracted by notifications on the computer.

× It helped me in learning the ocean an answer and I think writing gave us focus.

✓ It helped me in learning the ocean and answer, and I think writing gave us focus.

The sentence contains a past tense verb 'helped' which is correct, but the phrase 'the ocean an answer' seems to be a typographical error. Correcting it to 'the ocean and answer' makes the sentence meaningful. The past tense usage is appropriate here as the action happened in the past.

× Dad, we have a good store weekend, remember it well.

✓ Dad, we had a good store weekend; I remember it well.

The sentence lacks proper verb tense agreement and punctuation. 'Have' should be 'had' to indicate past tense, and a semicolon or period is needed to separate the two independent clauses. This correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I do not personally like to write, but due to my exam I have to learn many topics and many important area.

✓ I do not personally like to write, but due to my exam I have to learn many topics and many important areas.

The word 'area' should be plural 'areas' to agree with the quantifier 'many' which is used for countable nouns. This correction addresses the singular and plural agreement with quantifiers.

× So I have to notice with my weak point at help when I died I found always my mistake.

✓ So I have to notice my weak points to get help; when I did, I always found my mistakes.

The original sentence is confusing and grammatically incorrect. 'Died' is incorrect and should be 'did'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct verb usage, improving overall sentence structure.

× So I left. So there I right.

✓ So I left. So there I am right.

The sentence 'So there I right' is incomplete and lacks a verb. Adding 'am' completes the sentence and corrects the sentence structure.

× My weak point are improved by writing.

✓ My weak points are improved by writing.

The subject 'My weak point' is singular but the verb 'are' is plural. Changing 'point' to plural 'points' matches the plural verb 'are', correcting subject-verb agreement and pronoun usage.

× Then I matched the answer that they are right or not.

✓ Then I checked whether the answers were right or not.

The verb 'matched' is incorrectly used with 'the answer'. 'Checked' is more appropriate here. Also, 'that they are right or not' is corrected to 'whether the answers were right or not' for proper preposition and conjunction usage.

× I prefer writing Nora typewriting.

✓ I prefer writing, not typewriting.

The word 'Nora' seems to be a typographical error for 'not a'. Correcting it to 'not' clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun usage.

× I think handwriting is a best form.

✓ I think handwriting is the best form.

The article 'a' is incorrect before 'best' which is a superlative adjective. The correct article is 'the' before superlatives.

× Best phone to write anything because he did not get any destruction by typing.

✓ It is the best way to write anything because it does not get any distraction from typing.

'Best phone' is incorrect; it should be 'best way'. 'He' is incorrectly used for an object; 'it' is correct. 'Destruction' is incorrect; 'distraction' is the intended word. These corrections fix pronoun and word choice errors.

× I think we are not able to concentrate user notification writing is a basic form we learn from our childhood.

✓ I think we are not able to concentrate due to notifications; writing is a basic form we learn from our childhood.

'User notification' is incorrect; 'due to notifications' is appropriate. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct preposition usage.

× So I think I think the best option handwriting is the best option.

✓ So I think handwriting is the best option.

The sentence is repetitive and contains redundant phrases. Removing the repeated 'I think' and 'best option' improves sentence clarity and correctness.