Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response and explain briefly why you don't write much, using correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases.

例: No, I don't write a lot because I find it time-consuming and prefer other ways to express myself.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but is repetitive and slightly unclear. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and avoid repeating words unnecessarily. Also, clarify your feelings about writing a diary.

例: If I have to write something, I usually write a diary because it helps me record my daily life, and I feel it preserves my memories.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas and express your opinion clearly and accurately.

例: Yes, I believe the things I write will change over time because my thoughts and opinions evolve as I gain new experiences.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has repetition and unclear expressions. Try to organise your ideas logically using linking words and explain your preference clearly with specific reasons.

例: I prefer typing because it saves time and makes it easier to store and find my work later, unlike handwriting which can be difficult to organise.

× I think it is suit I consumed time consuming too, right?

✓ I think it is suitable; I find it time-consuming too, right?

The phrase 'it is suit' is incorrect; the adjective 'suitable' should be used. Also, 'time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as an adjective. The verb 'consumed' is incorrectly used here; the correct form is 'time-consuming' to describe the activity.

× If I have to write something, I will write a diary because it can, it could, it can record my my life and that will make me feel like a being recorded.

✓ If I have to write something, I will write a diary because it can record my life and that will make me feel like I am being recorded.

The modal verbs 'can' and 'could' are incorrectly repeated and unnecessary here; only 'can' is appropriate. Also, 'like a being recorded' is incorrect; it should be 'like I am being recorded' to express the feeling properly.

× Yes, I think the things I write will change because like our thought different like from time to time.

✓ Yes, I think the things I write will change because our thoughts are different from time to time.

The phrase 'our thought different like from time to time' is grammatically incorrect. 'Thought' should be plural 'thoughts', and the verb 'are' is needed to link the subject and adjective. The word 'like' is unnecessary and should be removed.

× So I I'm definitely sure that my fault, my thought will be different from before.

✓ So I'm definitely sure that my thoughts will be different from before.

The phrase 'my fault, my thought' is confusing and likely a mistake; 'my thoughts' is appropriate here. Also, the contraction 'I I'm' is redundant; only 'I'm' is needed.

× I would prefer typing because when typing something on the on the on the computer, then I can archive a four or five hour long time.

✓ I would prefer typing because when typing something on the computer, I can achieve four or five hours of work.

The phrase 'archive a four or five hour long time' is incorrect. 'Archive' is the wrong verb; 'achieve' or 'get' is more appropriate. Also, 'four or five hour long time' should be 'four or five hours of work' for clarity and correctness. The repeated 'on the' is redundant and should be removed.

× But if I have to hand write it, I have to store it in the on the shelf, then I couldn't find it afterward.

✓ But if I have to handwrite it, I have to store it on the shelf, and then I can't find it afterward.

The phrase 'store it in the on the shelf' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on the shelf'. Also, 'hand write' should be one word 'handwrite'. The phrase 'couldn't find it afterward' should be 'can't find it afterward' to maintain present tense consistency.