Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and lacks clarity. Try to use correct verb forms and complete sentences. Also, avoid redundancy and be more specific about your writing habits. For example, mention how often you write and what motivates you.

例: Yes, I write quite often because I want to become an author in the future. To improve my skills, I try to write at least one page every day.

提案: Your answer is fragmented and unclear. Use complete sentences and connect your ideas logically. Explain clearly what you like to write and why, using linking words to improve coherence.

例: I enjoy writing short stories because I want to become a novelist. I like reading various types of novels, which inspires me to create my own short novels.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and lacks coherence. Try to express your ideas in full sentences and use linking words to connect your thoughts. Be more specific about why you think your writing might or might not change.

例: I believe my writing style might change over time as I gain more experience. However, my enthusiasm for novels and short stories will remain the same, so I will continue writing in this way.

提案: Your answer has grammar errors and unclear phrases. Use complete sentences and clarify your reasons. Avoid vague expressions and explain why typing is preferable for you.

例: I prefer typing because my handwriting is difficult to read. Also, typing is faster and less tiring, especially when I write long stories.

× Yes, actually I used to writing a lot because I want to be an author in the future.

✓ Yes, actually I used to write a lot because I want to be an author in the future.

The phrase 'used to' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'used to writing' is incorrect; it should be 'used to write.'

× And rights is one page daily to enhance my writing skills.

✓ And I write one page daily to enhance my writing skills.

The word 'rights' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'write.' Also, the sentence lacked a subject 'I.' Correcting these makes the sentence grammatically correct and clear.

× Actually, I like to write some shorter stories because.

✓ Actually, I like to write some shorter stories because I enjoy storytelling.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'because' without completing the thought, which is a sentence structure error. Adding a reason completes the sentence logically.

× I really like to become novelist and I like.

✓ I really want to become a novelist and I like writing.

The sentence is incomplete and missing articles and objects. 'Become novelist' needs the article 'a,' and the second clause is incomplete; adding 'writing' clarifies the meaning.

× Various range of novels and because of that I was trying to write some short novels.

✓ I like a various range of novels, and because of that, I have been trying to write some short novels.

The phrase 'Various range' needs an article 'a' before it. Also, the tense is adjusted to present perfect continuous to indicate ongoing effort.

× Because of my persistence. Enthusiasm about novels and writing short stories.

✓ Because of my persistence and enthusiasm about novels and writing short stories,

The original is a sentence fragment. Combining the two parts into one complete sentence fragment improves clarity.

× I think I persist. I will persist this way.

✓ I think I will persist this way.

The sentence 'I think I persist' is awkward and redundant. Using 'I think I will persist' correctly expresses future intention.

× Actually I like to type because my handwriting is not legible and.

✓ Actually, I like to type because my handwriting is not legible.

The sentence ends with 'and' without continuation, making it incomplete. Removing 'and' completes the sentence properly.

× I think it's boring, especially when you want to write lying stories and also it is something hard for me physically.

✓ I think it's boring, especially when you want to write long stories, and also it is physically hard for me.

The word 'lying' is incorrect; the intended word is 'long.' Also, the sentence is restructured for clarity and correct word order.