Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat banyak kesalahan tata bahasa serta penggunaan kata yang tidak tepat. Cobalah untuk memberikan jawaban yang lebih terstruktur dan jelas, serta hindari pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu. Gunakan kalimat yang sederhana namun efektif untuk menyampaikan maksud Anda.

例: Yes, I write quite often. For example, I like to write recipes and send text messages on my phone.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang lengkap dan tidak jelas. Anda perlu memberikan alasan yang lebih spesifik dan menghubungkan ide dengan kata penghubung agar jawaban lebih koheren. Perhatikan juga tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar lebih natural.

例: I like writing because it helps me stay organized and remember important things. Also, it allows me to express my thoughts clearly.

提案: Jawaban Anda tidak jelas dan sulit dipahami. Cobalah untuk menjawab langsung dengan kalimat yang lengkap dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk menjelaskan alasan Anda. Hindari penggunaan kata yang tidak tepat atau tidak relevan.

例: Yes, I think what I write can change depending on the topic and my purpose for writing.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang terstruktur dan terdapat kesalahan tata bahasa. Sebaiknya jelaskan preferensi Anda dengan kalimat yang jelas dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide. Hindari pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu.

例: I like both typing and handwriting. I usually type when sending messages, but I prefer handwriting when writing recipes in my notebook.

× I like to writing because it makes me more organized.

✓ I like writing because it makes me more organized.

The verb 'like' is followed by the gerund form 'writing' without 'to'. Using 'to writing' is incorrect; it should be either 'like to write' or 'like writing'. Here, 'like writing' is more natural.

× An I can remember. Anything.

✓ And I can remember anything.

The sentence is fragmented and incorrectly punctuated. 'An' should be 'And', and the sentence should be combined to form a complete sentence.

× Also it can be. More.

✓ Also, it can be more.

The sentence is fragmented and incorrectly punctuated. It should be combined into a complete sentence with proper punctuation.

× I think so that things would change an.

✓ I think that things would change.

The sentence has unnecessary words and an incomplete ending. 'So' and 'an' are unnecessary and should be removed for clarity.

× It depends on. What are you writing? Anne what? Aim.

✓ It depends on what you are writing and what I am aiming for.

The sentence is fragmented and contains unclear words 'Anne' and 'Aim'. It should be restructured into a coherent sentence.

× I like to writing because it makes me more organized.

✓ I like writing because it makes me more organized.

Repeated for clarity: 'like' should be followed by gerund 'writing' not 'to writing'.

× For typing I usually type. For texting in message anhang writing I usually writing.

✓ For typing, I usually type. For texting in messages and handwriting, I usually write.

Incorrect use of 'writing' as a noun and verb form. 'Writing' should be 'write' as the verb. Also, 'anhang' is likely a typo for 'and handwriting' and 'texting in message' should be 'texting in messages'.