Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ содержит много повторений и некоторые грамматические ошибки, что снижает естественность речи. Рекомендуется использовать более простые и чёткие предложения, избегать излишних повторов и улучшить грамматическую точность.

例: I used to write a lot during my school and college years because I had to write essays and take notes. However, now that I work mostly on a computer, I rarely write by hand.

提案: Ответ не полностью ясен и содержит грамматические ошибки и неполные предложения. Рекомендуется строить предложения более логично, использовать связующие слова и конкретизировать, что именно нравится писать и почему.

例: I like writing notes for my classes because I can organize them neatly and use colors to make them more attractive and easier to remember.

提案: Ответ очень неясен и содержит множество ошибок, что затрудняет понимание. Рекомендуется использовать простые и чёткие предложения, избегать лишних слов и грамматических ошибок, а также логично развивать мысль.

例: I think the things I write will change because I am going to university soon, so I will write more academic papers and essays.

提案: Ответ содержит много грамматических ошибок и неясных выражений. Рекомендуется использовать простые предложения, чётко выражать предпочтения и объяснять причины с помощью связующих слов.

例: I was taught to write by hand all my life, but over time I have started to prefer typing because typed text is clearer and easier to read.

× I used to write a lot and I was in my schooling years while in school and college because I had to write many essays and take notes from a classes.

✓ I used to write a lot during my schooling years in school and college because I had to write many essays and take notes from classes.

The phrase 'I was in my schooling years while in school and college' is awkward and redundant. It is better to say 'during my schooling years in school and college'. Also, 'a classes' is incorrect because 'classes' is plural and does not need an article 'a'. Ошибка связана с неправильным использованием времени и артикля. Следует использовать past tense 'used to write' и убрать лишний артикль перед множественным числом.

× I had to write many essays and take notes from a classes.

✓ I had to write many essays and take notes from classes.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the plural noun 'classes'. Plural nouns do not take the indefinite article 'a'. Ошибка в использовании предлога и артикля перед множественным числом. Необходимо убрать 'a' перед 'classes'.

× However, now when I'm working I rarely write by hand since most of my work is done on the computer.

✓ However, now that I'm working, I rarely write by hand since most of my work is done on the computer.

The phrase 'now when I'm working' is awkward; 'now that I'm working' is more appropriate to indicate the current situation. Ошибка в использовании времени и конструкции предложения. Следует использовать 'now that' для обозначения текущей ситуации.

× To be honest, I really enjoyed the writing notes for my classes before that because I could make them look presentable and very nice with some colors and the.

✓ To be honest, I really enjoyed writing notes for my classes before because I could make them look presentable and very nice with some colors and the tablets.

The phrase 'the writing notes' is incorrect; it should be 'writing notes'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'and the.' which seems incomplete; assuming 'tablets' is intended. Ошибка в использовании местоимений и структуры предложения. Следует убрать артикль 'the' перед 'writing notes' и завершить предложение корректно.

× And I really hope things are right would change soon because I'm enrolling into university and help soon I'll be writing a lot of face and not for my glasses.

✓ And I really hope things will change soon because I'm enrolling into university and soon I'll be writing a lot of essays and not just for my classes.

The phrase 'things are right would change' is incorrect; it should be 'things will change'. 'Help' is likely a typo for 'hope'. 'Writing a lot of face and not for my glasses' is nonsensical; likely intended 'writing a lot of essays and not just for my classes'. Ошибка в использовании модальных глаголов и местоимений, а также опечатки. Следует использовать 'will' для будущего времени и исправить слова для ясности.

× I'm enrolling into university

✓ I'm enrolling in university

The correct preposition with 'enroll' is 'in' rather than 'into' when referring to institutions. Ошибка в использовании предлога. Следует использовать 'in' с глаголом 'enroll'.

× Besides, not just writing at all.

✓ Besides, I will not just be writing at all.

The sentence fragment lacks a subject and verb; it should be a complete sentence. Ошибка в структуре предложения. Необходимо добавить подлежащее и сказуемое.

× All my life had been taught to hand write to be honest, but with years my handwriting.

✓ All my life I have been taught to handwrite, to be honest, but over the years my handwriting...

The phrase 'had been taught' is past perfect and not appropriate here; present perfect 'have been taught' fits better. 'Hand write' should be 'handwrite' as one word. The sentence is incomplete. Ошибка в использовании времени и написании слова. Следует использовать present perfect и слитное написание 'handwrite'.

× but with years my handwriting. Developed into typing more because milers look like from a computer and I like it more that way because I can easily understand whatever writing always.

✓ but over the years my handwriting developed into typing more because my letters look like they are from a computer and I like it more that way because I can easily understand whatever I write.

The sentence is fragmented and contains unclear phrases like 'milers look like from a computer'. It should be 'my letters look like they are from a computer'. Also, 'whatever writing always' is unclear; corrected to 'whatever I write'. Ошибка в структуре предложения и использовании местоимений. Необходимо исправить фразы для ясности и связности.