Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は肯定しているが、文法や語彙の誤用が多く、意味が取りにくいです。まずはシンプルな主文（I do / I love）を使い、その後に具体的な理由を2つ程度、明確な語彙で述べましょう。接続詞（because, and, also, furthermore）を使って論理的につなげ、語順と冠詞（a/the）に注意してください。また、曖昧な表現（Loma, refract）を避け、適切な形容詞（relaxed, calming）を使いましょう。短めの文（最大5文）でまとめる練習をしてください。

例: Yes, I do. I love flowers because their colors and shapes are very beautiful, and they make me feel calm. Also, many flowers have pleasant scents that can quickly improve my mood. For example, smelling roses or lavender helps me relax after a busy day.

提案: 意図は伝わるが繰り返しや冗長な表現がある（"my one of my friends", 重複する 'university'）。また、名詞句の表現（"flower faculty"）や過去の説明はより自然な語順で述べる必要があります。重要な点は具体性を加えること（友人がどのような研究をしたか、どんな成果があったかなど）。接続詞（because, so, and）や関係代名詞を使って文を滑らかに繋げてください。

例: Yes, one of my friends loves flowers. She studied horticulture at university and did research on how different scents and colors affect people's mood. For instance, she found that lavender scent can reduce stress in many people.

提案: 要点は伝わるが、文法ミス（"overpopulated with", "less space", "Imperial press"）や語順の問題が目立ちます。まず主文で簡潔に答え、その後に理由と例を述べるとよいです。具体例（公園の名前、季節に咲く花の種類）を挙げると答えが説得力を増します。語彙は 'overcrowded', 'limited space', 'parks', 'imperial palace' など正しい単語を使ってください。

例: Not really, there are not many flowers in central Tokyo because the city is very overcrowded with buildings. However, you can find flowers in certain places like parks and around the Imperial Palace, where a variety of seasonal flowers bloom.

提案: 回答は肯定的だが、文法（時制、冠詞、複数形）、語順、意味不明なフレーズ（"to remember a chair, my friends"）が混在しています。理由を2つ程度に絞り、具体的な状況（どんなときに撮るか、何に使うか）を述べましょう。過去形・現在形の使い分けにも注意してください。接続語（because, so, when）を使い文を論理的に繋げてください。

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers because I find them beautiful and unique. When I see an unusual shape or color, I take a picture to remember it and to share with my friends. Later I sometimes look back at the photos for inspiration or relaxation.

提案: 回答は文化の紹介を試みているが、多くの誤訳や不自然な表現（"culture to share flowers with plants for neighborhoods", "in the food", "Pressed flour"）があり意味が不明瞭です。まず一般的な慣習（お祝い、弔事、訪問時に花を贈る）を簡潔に述べ、その後に具体例（生花、アレンジメント、プリザーブドフラワー）を挙げてください。専門用語は正しい表現（preserved flowers, dried flowers）を使いましょう。

例: Yes, sending flowers is common in Japan for occasions like birthdays, funerals, or when visiting someone's home. Many people also give preserved or dried flowers as gifts because they last longer than fresh ones.

× Yes, I do forest collaborating of kinds of colors and shapes and it provides me more refract relaxed feeling to meet.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy the variety of colors and shapes of flowers, and they make me feel relaxed.

The original sentence has multiple structural problems: missing punctuation, incorrect word choices (forest collaborating, refract), and unclear syntax. Break into two sentences: affirmative response 'Yes, I do.' then state preference 'I enjoy the variety of colors and shapes of flowers' and effect 'they make me feel relaxed'. Use simple vocabulary and clear subject-verb relationships.

× Besides, it has very good smells so it changes my mood like a Loma and I often rely on it.

✓ Besides, they have a very pleasant smell, which changes my mood and I often rely on them.

Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'flowers' and correct adjective 'pleasant' for smell. Use relative clause 'which changes my mood' and plural object 'them'. Avoid unknown word 'Loma'. Ensure pronoun agreement.

× Yes, my one of my friends likes to like flowers.

✓ Yes, one of my friends likes flowers.

Remove redundant 'my' and unnecessary 'to like'. Use correct phrase 'one of my friends'. Keep verb simple present 'likes' for third person singular.

× She was in the flower faculty of university when she was in university and she researched the effect of smell and the color of.

✓ She studied in the floriculture department at university and researched the effects of smell and color.

Simplify and correct noun phrases: 'flower faculty' -> 'floriculture department' or 'flower-related faculty'; 'of university' -> 'at university'. Remove repetition 'when she was in university'. Use plural 'effects' and place noun 'color' correctly. Complete object 'of' removed and sentence made concise.

× Not so much in Tokyo.

✓ Not so much in Tokyo.

This short answer is acceptable, no change needed. It correctly expresses quantity in context.

× There are overpopulated with many buildings and people, so there are less space to plant flowers around the city, but limited areas such as Garden or Imperial press.

✓ The city is overcrowded with buildings and people, so there is less space to plant flowers, except in limited areas such as gardens or the Imperial Palace grounds.

Use correct subject-verb structure 'The city is overcrowded' rather than 'There are overpopulated'. 'Less space' requires singular 'space' with 'there is'. Use plural 'gardens' and correct proper noun 'Imperial Palace grounds'. Ensure prepositions and articles are correct.

× They are a variety of flowers.

✓ There are a variety of flowers there.

Use existential 'there are' to state existence. Original word order is incorrect. Alternatively 'There is a variety of flowers' or 'There are various flowers'. Maintain subject-verb agreement.

× Yes I do, I often take photos of flowers because it's very beautiful and if I found the flower with unique shape I will take photo to remember a chair, my friends, how the shape was and I often reflect.

✓ Yes, I do. I often take photos of flowers because they are very beautiful, and if I find a flower with a unique shape I will take a photo to remember it and to show my friends.

Split into sentences and correct tense and pronouns: use 'they are' for plural 'flowers', present tense 'find' for condition with 'will'. Use articles 'a photo' and correct object 'it' (the flower). Remove unclear phrase 'a chair' and replace with coherent purpose 'to show my friends'.

× Yes we do.

✓ Yes, we do.

Add comma for clarity. Present simple is appropriate to answer the question.

× In Japan there are culture to share flowers with plants for neighborhoods each other, especially in the food.

✓ In Japan there is a culture of sharing flowers and plants with neighbors, especially during certain festivals or occasions.

Use singular 'there is a culture' and correct prepositions 'of sharing ... with neighbors'. Replace 'for neighborhoods each other' with 'with neighbors'. Clarify 'in the food' to a meaningful phrase such as 'during certain festivals or occasions'.

× Pressed flour is very common in gift because it can preserve for a long time.

✓ Pressed flowers are a very common gift because they can be preserved for a long time.

Correct the noun 'flour' to 'flowers' and use plural 'pressed flowers' as a common gift. Use passive 'can be preserved' for correct verb form and article 'a' removed before 'gift' or use 'a very common gift'.