Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は自然ですが、文法と語順に小さな誤りがあります。たとえば“when seasons turn to spring”は不自然なので“when spring comes”に直すと良いです。また“Especially I like sunflower and rose”は“Especially, I like sunflowers and roses”のように複数形とカンマを使って明確にしましょう。さらに話がまとまるようトピック文の後に短い理由や感情を一文加えると効果的です。

例: Yes, I love flowers. I often visit flower parks or botanical gardens when spring comes, because I enjoy the colors and scents. Especially, I like sunflowers and roses.

提案: 内容は伝わりますが、文法ミスと一貫性の欠如があります。主語と動詞の一致（"pets also loves"→"pets also love"）、代名詞の一致（"He like"→誰を指すか不明、犬なら"It likes"または"He likes"で性別明示）を直してください。冗長な"as well"が重複しているので省き、2〜3文で構成して明確に述べると良いです。

例: My mother loves flowers too, so she often invites me to visit flower parks with her. I also have a dog, and he seems to enjoy the flowers, often sniffing them for a long time.

提案: 意味が伝わりにくい部分があります（"they hear me a lot"は不自然）。代わりに“there are many flowers”や“I go there often”のように明確に表現しましょう。また、詳細を加えるためにどんな花が咲くかや行く頻度を述べると良いです。文は2〜3文にまとめ、無駄を避けてください。

例: Yes, there is a large park near my house that has many flowers. I often go there, especially in spring, and I can see tulips, cherry blossoms and roses.

提案: 全体の意味は良いですが表現を自然にするための調整が必要です。“When I reach forward parks”は不自然なので“when I visit parks”に直しましょう。また頻度を示す副詞や理由（好きだから、写真が好きだから）を一文加えると会話が豊かになります。

例: Yes, when I visit parks or botanical gardens I often take many photos of the flowers. I also photograph interesting blooms I see on the street and usually share them on my Instagram.

提案: 趣旨は分かりますが文法ミスと語彙の誤用があります（"sending fathers"は誤り）。おそらく"sending flowers"の誤りです。より明確にするために世代ごとの傾向を具体例で述べ、"for a couple's anniversary"や"on Mother's Day"のように前置詞や所有格を正しく使いましょう。

例: It depends on the generation. Older people rarely send flowers, but younger people often give flowers for a couple's anniversary or on Mother's Day.

× I do love flowers, so I often go to flower parks or botanical gardens when seasons turn to spring.

✓ I love flowers, so I often go to flower parks or botanical gardens when the seasons turn to spring.

'Do' as an auxiliary for emphasis is unnecessary here; simple present 'I love' is more natural. Also include the definite article before 'seasons' and add 'the' to form the common phrase 'when the seasons turn to spring'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual facts and include articles where required.

× Especially I like sunflower and rose.

✓ Especially, I like sunflowers and roses.

Countable nouns should be plural when speaking generally. Use 'sunflowers' and 'roses' to refer to those types in general. Also add a comma after 'Especially' for natural phrasing.

× My mother loves flowers as well so she often invites me to go to flower parks with my dog and my pets also loves flowers as well.

✓ My mother loves flowers as well, so she often invites me to go to flower parks with my dog, and my pets also love flowers.

Pronoun and subject agreement: 'pets' is plural, so the verb should be 'love' not 'loves'. Also remove the duplicated 'as well' and add commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with their plural subjects and avoid redundant phrases.

× He like to smell flowers for a long time.

✓ He likes to smell flowers for a long time.

For third person singular subjects ('He'), the simple present verb requires an 's' ending: 'likes'. Suggestion: add 's' for he/she/it in the simple present.

× There is a large park nearby my house.

✓ There is a large park near my house.

Use 'near my house' rather than 'nearby my house'; 'nearby' is an adverb or adjective and cannot directly modify 'my house' in this structure. Suggestion: use 'near' + noun phrase or rephrase as 'a large park nearby'.

× The place has many flowers and they hear me a lot when I go there every time.

✓ The place has many flowers, and they greet me a lot when I go there.

Original 'they hear me a lot' is incorrect: flowers do not 'hear' and context likely intended 'greet' or 'attract' attention. If the student meant 'people greet me', change subject accordingly. Also remove 'every time' as redundant with 'when I go there'. Suggestion: choose a verb that matches the intended meaning; if literal, revise to 'people there greet me'.

× When I reach forward parks or botanical gardens, I do take many photos of flowers.

✓ When I get to parks or botanical gardens, I take many photos of flowers.

Phrase 'reach forward parks' is ungrammatical. Use 'get to' or 'arrive at' for reaching a place. Also simple present 'I take' is appropriate for habitual actions; avoid unnecessary 'do'. Suggestion: use natural verbs for movement (get to/arrive at) and simple present for routines.

× Also when I find flowers on the road, I often take photos and share on my Instagram.

✓ Also, when I find flowers on the road, I often take photos and share them on my Instagram.

Include the object 'them' after 'share' and use 'share on my Instagram' is fine but needs the object. Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: remember transitive verbs require objects and add punctuation for readability.

× It actually depends on the generation.

✓ It actually depends on the generation.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Contextual note: you could say 'on the generation' or more naturally 'on the generation you ask' but the original is acceptable.

× I don't see many old people sending fathers to anyone.

✓ I don't see many older people sending flowers to anyone.

Likely typos: 'sending fathers' should be 'sending flowers', and 'old people' is better as 'older people' in comparative contexts. 'Sending flowers to anyone' expresses the intended meaning. Suggestion: check for typos and choose appropriate word ('flowers') and age description.

× However the younger generation often sends flowers for couples anniversary or Mother's Day.

✓ However, the younger generation often sends flowers for a couple's anniversary or Mother's Day.

Add comma after 'However'. Use possessive 'couple's anniversary' for a single couple, or 'couples' anniversaries' for plural. Also include the article 'a' before 'couple's anniversary'. Suggestion: use possessive form for events belonging to someone and add necessary articles and punctuation.