Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“they are fragrance”应为“they have fragrance”或“they are fragrant”。建议注意英语表达的准确性和自然性，同时避免冗长和重复。

例: No, not really. Although many people love flowers because of their fragrance, shapes, and colors, I only like certain types. Some flowers have a strong smell and dazzling colors that make me feel dizzy, so I prefer those with a milder scent.

提案: 回答结构较好，但句子衔接略显生硬。建议使用更多连接词使表达更连贯自然，例如使用“and”、“so”连接句子。

例: Yes, my mom is really passionate about flowers. Although she doesn't talk about it much, she enjoys gardening a lot and often spends her spare time taking care of her plants because she finds it very relaxing and rewarding. Also, whenever someone sends her flowers, she always appears delighted.

提案: 回答中出现了数字“4”错误，且表达不够简洁自然。建议避免无关内容，注意句子完整性和逻辑性。

例: Yes, fortunately, my neighborhood is full of greenery with fragrant flowers blooming throughout the four seasons. For example, there is a large garden near my home filled with a variety of beautiful flowers. Flowers always lift up our moods like little spirits of the world.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复表达，如“will be I would be stuck”。建议注意语法准确性，避免重复，并使表达更流畅。

例: Definitely. I often photograph flowers because their vibrant colors and delicate shapes always captivate me. When I was younger, I thought taking pictures of flowers was a bit embarrassing, but now, whenever I walk in a park or garden, I can't help but stop to admire the blooming flowers.

提案: 回答内容较好，但最后一句表达不够自然，“have magic ways to brightening”应改为“have a magical way of brightening”。建议注意固定搭配和表达自然性。

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers on special occasions such as birthdays, weddings, and anniversaries. Flowers are universally cherished because they symbolize good wishes and affection. They have a magical way of brightening our moods.

× No, not really, although many people love flowers because they are fragrance and the shape and colors can improve their mood.

✓ No, not really, although many people love flowers because they have fragrance and the shape and colors can improve their mood.

这里“fragrance”是名词，不能直接用作形容词修饰“flowers”，应使用动词短语“have fragrance”来表达“有香味”。

× Some flowers have strong smell and dazzling colors will make me feel dizzy, so I prefer milder sense.

✓ Some flowers have a strong smell and dazzling colors that will make me feel dizzy, so I prefer a milder scent.

“smell”作为名词前应加冠词“a”，且“sense”用来表示气味不准确，应改为“scent”。此外，句子结构需调整，加入关系代词“that”使句子更通顺。

× Also, whenever someone sent her flowers, she will always appear delighted.

✓ Also, whenever someone sends her flowers, she always appears delighted.

“whenever”表示习惯性动作，谓语动词应使用一般现在时，不能用过去时“sent”，且“will”不适用于习惯性动作，应改为一般现在时。

× Yes, fortunately my neighborhood is full of greenery with fragrant flowers blooming throughout The Four Seasons.

✓ Yes, fortunately my neighborhood is full of greenery with fragrant flowers blooming throughout the four seasons.

“The Four Seasons”中的“The”不应大写，且季节名词一般不需要大写，除非是专有名词。

× For example, there is a large garden near my home which is 4 filled with a variety of favorite flowers.

✓ For example, there is a large garden near my home which is filled with a variety of favorite flowers.

句中“4”是多余的，应删除。

× Definitely. I often photograph flowers in my daily life because they are vibrant colors and delicate shapes always captivate me.

✓ Definitely. I often photograph flowers in my daily life because their vibrant colors and delicate shapes always captivate me.

“they are vibrant colors”结构不正确，应改为“their vibrant colors”表示“它们的鲜艳颜色”。

× When I was younger, I thought taking pictures of flowers was a bit embarrassing, but now whenever I walk in a park or a garden, I will be I would be stuck by the blooming flowers.

✓ When I was younger, I thought taking pictures of flowers was a bit embarrassing, but now whenever I walk in a park or a garden, I am always struck by the blooming flowers.

“stuck”用错，应为“struck”表示被吸引或打动；“I will be I would be”重复且不合适，应简化为“I am always”。

× Flowers are universally cherished because their symbolism lies on conveying good wishes and affection.

✓ Flowers are universally cherished because their symbolism lies in conveying good wishes and affection.

介词“lies on”用错，应为“lies in”表示“在于”。

× Flowers always have magic ways to brightening our moods.

✓ Flowers always have magical ways to brighten our moods.

“magic”应改为形容词“magical”修饰“ways”，“to brightening”应改为不定式“to brighten”。