Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了对花的喜爱，但语言不够自然且有语法错误，句子结构混乱，影响理解。建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和表达方式，并避免重复。

例: Yes, I love flowers because they are beautiful and colorful. Whenever I see them, I feel happy and relaxed. For example, roses always brighten my mood and make me forget my worries.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，如“she's in heat”不合适。建议使用正确的表达方式，清晰描述原因，并注意句子连贯。

例: My sister really loves flowers because they are beautiful and can brighten up her room. She often buys many flowers and places them on the table to enjoy their colors and fragrance.

提案: 回答表达了主要意思，但语法和句子结构有误，影响流畅度。建议使用正确的句型，简洁明了地说明原因。

例: There are not many flowers where I live because I stay in a small dormitory on campus. Since I share the room with roommates, we don't have enough space to keep or plant flowers.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，如“not of many florists”。建议使用正确的词汇和句式，表达更自然。

例: To be honest, I don't usually take photos of flowers because I live on campus where there are not many flowers around.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用正确的句子结构，清楚表达不同关系的人送花的习惯。

例: In my country, people often send flowers to their loved ones, like couples, to express love. However, friends rarely send flowers to each other because it feels awkward.

× Yeah, I said no flowers because it is very beautiful and colorful.

✓ Yeah, I said flowers are very beautiful and colorful.

这里的主语是复数flowers，谓语动词和代词也应使用复数形式，因此应使用are和they而不是is。

× Whenever I see them, I will feel very happy and enjoy it.

✓ Whenever I see them, I will feel very happy and enjoy them.

前文提到的flowers是复数，代词it应改为them以保持一致。

× For example, when I say the Rose summer feel very happy and the sad things is gone.

✓ For example, when I see the rose in summer, I feel very happy and the sad things are gone.

原句中'say'应为'see'，'Rose'应小写且前面加冠词'the'，'feel'应与主语一致，'sad things is'应改为'sad things are'。

× My sister really love flowers because she's in heat, is very beautiful and can bring up her room so she often buy a lot of flowers, play there on the table at home to enjoy their color and fragrance.

✓ My sister really loves flowers because she's in heat, they are very beautiful and can brighten up her room, so she often buys a lot of flowers and places them on the table at home to enjoy their color and fragrance.

主语My sister是第三人称单数，谓语动词应加-s；'in heat'用法不当，应改为描述花的美丽；'bring up her room'应为'brighten up her room'；'buy'和'play'应改为第三人称单数形式'buy'->'buys'，'play'应改为'places'以符合语境。

× He not many flowers will I leave because I live in the campus and I live in the dormitory.

✓ There are not many flowers where I live because I live on campus and in the dormitory.

原句结构混乱，'He not many flowers will I leave'无意义，应改为正确的there be句型表达存在关系；'in the campus'应为'on campus'。

× I live in the campus and I live in the dormitory.

✓ I live on campus and in the dormitory.

英语中通常说'on campus'而不是'in the campus'。

× we don't have the enough space to place the flowers, so we can't plant flowers in dormitory.

✓ we don't have enough space to place the flowers, so we can't plant flowers in the dormitory.

'the enough space'中the不应与enough连用，应去掉；'in dormitory'前应加定冠词the。

× To be honest, I don't take photos of flowers in my daily life because I live in the schools.

✓ To be honest, I don't take photos of flowers in my daily life because I live at school.

'live in the schools'不合适，通常说'live at school'表示在学校生活。

× There are not of many florists in schools, so I can't take photos of flowers.

✓ There are not many flowers in school, so I can't take photos of flowers.

'not of many'错误，应为'not many'；'florists'指花商，不符合语境，应为'flowers'。

× In my country people often send flowers even though their relationship.

✓ In my country, people often send flowers to each other in their relationships.

原句中'even though their relationship'表达不清，应改为'in their relationships'，并补充' to each other'使句子完整。

× For example, couple of us and flowers each other to express their love.

✓ For example, couples send flowers to each other to express their love.

'couple of us and flowers each other'语法错误，应改为'couples send flowers to each other'。

× But friendly hardly send flowers to each other because it is awkward.

✓ But friends hardly send flowers to each other because it is awkward.

'friendly'用作形容词，不可作名词，改为'friends'；'hardly send'主语为复数，谓语应为'send'。