Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific reasons or examples. Avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise.

例: I'm not very fond of flowers myself, but I sometimes buy them as gifts for friends who really appreciate them, especially on birthdays or anniversaries.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and unclear pronouns. Use correct tense and pronouns, and structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details.

例: Yes, my mother loves flowers. On Mother's Day, I usually buy flowers for her to show my gratitude for all the hard work and care she has given to our family.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some minor errors and repetition. Use correct grammar and avoid repeating words. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: There aren't many flowers around where I live because it's a very urban area with little green space. Therefore, I usually visit flower shops during special occasions or festivals.

提案: Your answer is quite good but has some awkward phrasing and minor grammar mistakes. Try to use simpler and clearer expressions, and link your ideas smoothly.

例: I don't usually take photos of flowers or other things because I prefer to enjoy the moment directly. For example, when I see something beautiful, I like to appreciate the atmosphere instead of focusing on taking pictures.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct sentence structures and linking words to improve clarity and coherence.

例: People in my country don't often send flowers casually, but on special occasions like Valentine's Day and Mother's Day, it is quite common to send flowers to express appreciation and gratitude.

× Well, I'm not particularly into flowers, but I know someone they I know somebody, they really appreciate using flowers.

✓ Well, I'm not particularly into flowers, but I know somebody who really appreciates flowers.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'someone they I know somebody, they' which is confusing and grammatically incorrect. The correct relative pronoun 'who' should be used to refer to 'somebody', and the verb should agree with the singular subject 'somebody' as 'appreciates'. Also, 'appreciate using flowers' is awkward; 'appreciates flowers' is clearer.

× So I occasionally choose it as a present to show my gratitude to them on a birthday or anniversary event such as.

✓ So I occasionally choose them as presents to show my gratitude on birthdays or anniversary events.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect because 'flowers' is plural, so 'them' should be used. Also, 'a birthday or anniversary event such as' is incomplete and awkward; rephrasing to 'on birthdays or anniversary events' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× So in Mother's Day I usually bought flowers to.

✓ So on Mother's Day I usually buy flowers.

The phrase 'in Mother's Day' should be 'on Mother's Day' (preposition correction). Also, 'usually bought' mixes past tense with a habitual action; 'usually buy' (present tense) is appropriate for habitual actions.

× I bought flowers to her to show my gratitude and appreciation for all the work he, ** *** done and the effort she put into our family.

✓ I buy flowers for her to show my gratitude and appreciation for all the work she has done and the effort she puts into our family.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrect when referring to 'my mother'; it should be 'she'. Also, 'bought' should be 'buy' to match habitual action. The phrase 'work he, ** *** done' is unclear and should be 'work she has done'. Preposition 'to' should be 'for' when giving something to someone.

× Well, they're not many flowers around the place I lived because it's quite an urban area and there is not much green space around my home.

✓ Well, there aren't many flowers around the place I live because it's quite an urban area and there is not much green space around my home.

'They're not many flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'there aren't many flowers' to correctly negate plural noun. Also, 'I lived' should be 'I live' to match present tense context.

× So when there are special occasions or festival, I have to visit visit the particular flower shops.

✓ So when there are special occasions or festivals, I have to visit particular flower shops.

'Festival' should be plural 'festivals' to match 'occasions'. The repeated word 'visit' is a typo and should be removed.

× Well, I don't be sure to take photos of flowers or other things around me because I prefer to enjoy the moment rather than preserve it.

✓ Well, I'm not sure if I take photos of flowers or other things around me because I prefer to enjoy the moment rather than preserve it.

'I don't be sure' is incorrect; the correct modal verb phrase is 'I'm not sure'. Also, 'to take photos' should be 'if I take photos' to express uncertainty.

× For example, when I saw some beautiful things, I would like to feel the atmosphere and appreciate directly instead of focusing on taking pictures.

✓ For example, when I see some beautiful things, I like to feel the atmosphere and appreciate it directly instead of focusing on taking pictures.

The sentence mixes past tense 'saw' with present habitual action; 'see' is better. 'Would like' implies conditional; 'like' expresses habitual preference. Also, 'appreciate directly' should be 'appreciate it directly' for clarity.

× Well, I would say it is not often it sends flowers to others, but in some occasions like Valentine's Day and Mother's Day, it is quite common for people to send flowers to show their appreciation and gratitude toward the receiver.

✓ Well, I would say it is not often that people send flowers to others, but on some occasions like Valentine's Day and Mother's Day, it is quite common for people to send flowers to show their appreciation and gratitude toward the receiver.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used to refer to people; 'people' should be used explicitly. Also, 'in some occasions' should be 'on some occasions' (preposition correction).