Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good but contains some grammatical errors and slight awkwardness. For example, 'they're vibrant color' should be 'their vibrant colours'. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly. Try to keep sentences concise and clear.

例: Yes, I really love flowers because their vibrant colours and fragrance can brighten up any room or garden. I often buy flowers to decorate my home, as they are a great way to express emotions and celebrate special occasions.

提案: Your answer is somewhat fragmented and lacks coherence. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid short, choppy sentences. Also, be careful with word choice, for example, 'which is fine' is vague and unnecessary here.

例: Yes, I have a friend who is absolutely passionate about flowers. She has a beautiful garden and puts a lot of effort into taking care of her plants. Gardening is definitely her favourite hobby because she finds it both relaxing and rewarding.

提案: Your answer is clear and well-structured, but you could improve coherence by using more linking words such as 'however' or 'therefore'. Also, try to vary your vocabulary a bit more to avoid repetition.

例: No, there aren't many flowers where I live because it's a busy urban area with limited green spaces, mostly trees and shrubs. Therefore, flowers are usually found only in private gardens or sold at local florists. However, efforts are being made to increase green spaces, but flowers remain quite limited.

提案: Your answer is good but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to combine ideas more effectively and use linking words to improve flow. Also, watch for small grammatical errors like 'photographing flowers to be' should be 'photographing flowers is'.

例: Yes, I love capturing the beauty of flowers because photographing them is a relaxing hobby. I usually share my photos on social media, which helps me improve my photography skills and appreciate nature's beauty.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you could improve it by using plural forms correctly ('anniversaries') and adding linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to avoid repeating the word 'flowers' too often by using synonyms.

例: Yes, sending flowers is quite common in my country, especially for special occasions such as birthdays, weddings, and anniversaries. For instance, many people send bouquets to express their love and appreciation. Moreover, with the growth of florists and delivery services, it has become very convenient to send floral gifts.

× Yes, I really love flowers because they're vibrant color and fragrance can brighten up any room or gardens.

✓ Yes, I really love flowers because their vibrant colours and fragrance can brighten up any room or garden.

The possessive pronoun 'their' should be used instead of 'they're' to indicate possession. 'Colour' should be pluralised to 'colours' to match 'fragrance' as two separate attributes. 'Gardens' should be singular 'garden' to parallel 'room' in the sentence.

× I usually buy flowers to decorate my home as they a great way to express emotions and celebrate special events or occasions.

✓ I usually buy flowers to decorate my home as they are a great way to express emotions and celebrate special events or occasions.

The verb 'are' is missing after 'they' to form the correct verb phrase 'they are'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue related to plural subject 'they'.

× She has a beautiful flower garden and puts a lot of effort in taking care of them, which is fine.

✓ She has a beautiful flower garden and puts a lot of effort into taking care of it, which is fine.

The preposition 'in' should be 'into' when used with 'put effort'. Also, 'them' refers to plural but 'flower garden' is singular, so 'it' is correct.

× Very relaxing and rewarding.

✓ It is very relaxing and rewarding.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. Adding 'It is' completes the sentence structure.

× Gardening.

✓ Gardening is definitely her favorite hobby.

This fragment lacks a verb and subject. Combining it with the next sentence or completing it provides clarity and correct sentence structure.

× Yes, sending flowers is quite common in my country, especially for special occasions such as birthdays, weddings, and anniversary.

✓ Yes, sending flowers is quite common in my country, especially for special occasions such as birthdays, weddings, and anniversaries.

The word 'anniversary' should be pluralised to 'anniversaries' to match the plural form of 'birthdays' and 'weddings'.