Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but contains grammatical errors and some unclear phrases. Try to use simpler, clearer sentences and avoid repetition. For example, say "I love flowers because their romantic scent refreshes and relaxes me. I also enjoy growing flowers on my balcony and seeing them every morning."

例: Yes, I love flowers because their romantic scent refreshes and relaxes me. I also enjoy growing flowers on my balcony and seeing them every morning.

提案: Your answer is quite long and has some grammar mistakes. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise. Use linking words like "because" and "so" properly. For example, "My parents and parents-in-law love flowers because they enjoy growing and caring for them. Watching the flowers bloom brings them joy and relaxation."

例: My parents and parents-in-law love flowers because they enjoy growing and caring for them. Watching the flowers bloom brings them joy and relaxation.

提案: Your answer has some grammar and clarity issues. Try to use present tense and clearer expressions. For example, "Yes, there are many flowers in my compound. When I walk to work, I see many flowers and their romantic scent inspires me and puts me in a positive mood."

例: Yes, there are many flowers in my compound. When I walk to work, I see many flowers and their romantic scent inspires me and puts me in a positive mood.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use simple, clear sentences and correct verb forms. For example, "Yes, I love taking photos of cherry blossoms because of their amazing pink petals. I share these photos with my friends on WeChat, and they always cheer me up."

例: Yes, I love taking photos of cherry blossoms because of their amazing pink petals. I share these photos with my friends on WeChat, and they always cheer me up.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains errors. Try to answer directly and clearly. For example, "People in my country often send flowers on special occasions like birthdays and holidays. Giving flowers shows love and strengthens relationships in Chinese culture."

例: People in my country often send flowers on special occasions like birthdays and holidays. Giving flowers shows love and strengthens relationships in Chinese culture.

× I was I was also love graying flowers in my house on the balcony to see them every day is morning.

✓ I also love growing flowers in my house on the balcony to see them every morning.

The verb 'love' should be followed by the gerund form 'growing' to indicate the activity enjoyed. 'Graying' is incorrect here as it means becoming gray. Also, 'is morning' should be 'every morning' to indicate the time correctly.

× My parents and my parent in law, they love flowers very much because they would like to grow the flowers, water them, take good care of them, see them growing and have the blossom is a kind of experience filled with joy and pleasure and relaxation.

✓ My parents and my parent-in-law love flowers very much because they like to grow flowers, water them, take good care of them, see them growing, and have the blossoms. It is a kind of experience filled with joy, pleasure, and relaxation.

The phrase 'parent in law' should be hyphenated as 'parent-in-law'. 'Would like to grow the flowers' is better as 'like to grow flowers' for habitual action. 'Have the blossom is' is incorrect; it should be 'have the blossoms. It is' to separate the ideas and use plural 'blossoms' to match the context.

× Yes, I there was a great deal of flowers in my compound.

✓ Yes, there are a great deal of flowers in my compound.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'I there was'. The correct structure is 'there are' to indicate existence in present tense. Also, 'a great deal of' is usually used with uncountable nouns; 'a lot of' or 'many' is better for countable nouns like 'flowers'.

× Once I'm heading for my words, I would see so many flowers and feel this romantic scent that's really inspired me and have a good attitude, a positive attitude towards today.

✓ When I head towards my work, I see so many flowers and feel this romantic scent that really inspires me and gives me a good, positive attitude towards today.

'Once I'm heading' is awkward; 'When I head' is better for habitual action. 'Would see' should be 'see' for present habitual action. 'That's really inspired me' should be 'that really inspires me' to match present tense. 'Have a good attitude' should be 'gives me a good attitude' for correct verb usage.

× Yes, I do loves taking photos of cherry blossoms, they are amazing pink as well as its petals.

✓ Yes, I do love taking photos of cherry blossoms; they are amazingly pink as well as their petals.

'I do loves' is incorrect; 'I do love' is correct because 'I' takes base verb form. 'Amazing pink' should be 'amazingly pink' to use an adverb modifying the adjective. 'Its petals' should be 'their petals' because 'cherry blossoms' is plural.

× I would like to share them with my friends on my WeChat post and keeping these moments would really cheer me up and bring my face brings my smile.

✓ I would like to share them with my friends on my WeChat post, and keeping these moments really cheers me up and brings a smile to my face.

The phrase 'bring my face brings my smile' is incorrect and redundant. It should be 'brings a smile to my face' to express the intended meaning. Also, 'keeping these moments would really cheer me up' is better as 'really cheers me up' to maintain present tense consistency.

× It depends on the situation, volunteer stays and birthdays on such a situation.

✓ It depends on the situation, such as volunteer stays and birthdays.

The phrase 'on such a situation' is awkward and incorrect here. 'Such as' is the correct preposition phrase to introduce examples. Also, 'volunteer stays' is unclear; if it means volunteering events, it should be clarified.

× On such occasions, people would like to give flowers to show their love as well as a strong relationship of each others in Chinese culture now.

✓ On such occasions, people like to give flowers to show their love as well as the strong relationships among each other in Chinese culture.

'Each others' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'each other' without 's'. Also, 'a strong relationship' should be plural 'strong relationships' to match 'people'. 'Would like to' is better as 'like to' for habitual action.