Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "Why I'm obsessed". Nên bắt đầu trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lặp từ như "the the". Ngoài ra, nên thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I love flowers very much. I enjoy decorating my room and office with them, especially bright-colored ones because they cheer me up.

提案: Câu trả lời nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "she's is" và dùng cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn. Nên sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý và làm câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, my coworker, who is a few years older than me, also loves flowers. She takes care of watering all the plants in our office and often brings fresh flowers to brighten the space.

提案: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ như "I'm not having a I'm not having a". Nên tránh dùng "although" và "but" cùng lúc. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và có liên từ phù hợp để kết nối ý.

例: Although I love flowers, they are hard to grow where I live, and I don't have a green thumb. Also, real flowers can be expensive, so I keep a fake rose and daisy on my desk for decoration.

提案: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như "a gardens", "snap some short", "No, it's just lighten your mood". Nên dùng từ đúng và câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I do. Whenever I see a beautiful bouquet or garden, I take out my phone to snap some photos and post them on Instagram because they lighten my mood and make me feel happy.

提案: Câu trả lời nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "send roses together", "graduations is", và dùng liên từ phù hợp để câu mạch lạc hơn. Nên dùng từ chính xác và câu hoàn chỉnh.

例: Yes, people often send flowers on special occasions. For example, lovers usually send roses on Valentine's Day or anniversaries, and flowers are also common gifts for graduations. So, it depends on the occasion.

× Why I'm obsessed with flowers.

✓ Because I'm obsessed with flowers.

The original sentence is a fragment and lacks proper sentence structure. Starting with 'Why' without a main clause makes it incomplete. Using 'Because' introduces a reason and completes the sentence.

× I prefer the the bright colored ones to be specific.

✓ I prefer the bright-colored ones, to be specific.

There is a repeated article 'the the' which is incorrect. Also, 'bright colored' should be hyphenated as 'bright-colored' when used as an adjective before a noun.

× she's is also obsessed with flowers.

✓ she's also obsessed with flowers.

The phrase 'she's is' is redundant and incorrect. 'She's' is a contraction of 'she is', so adding 'is' again is a mistake.

× She's the one that in charge of watering all the plants and all the flowers in my office and from time to time she brings flowers.

✓ She's the one who is in charge of watering all the plants and flowers in my office, and from time to time, she brings flowers.

The phrase 'that in charge' is missing the verb 'is'. Also, 'that' should be 'who' when referring to a person. Commas are added for clarity.

× Although I love flowers but they are hard to grow and I'm not having a I'm not having a green thumb either and they are also expensive.

✓ Although I love flowers, they are hard to grow, and I don't have a green thumb either. They are also expensive.

Using both 'Although' and 'but' together is redundant. The phrase 'I'm not having a' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I don't have a'. The sentence is long and run-on; splitting improves clarity.

× But I do have a fake rose and Daisy in my desk just to look at.

✓ But I do have a fake rose and a daisy on my desk just to look at.

'Daisy' is a singular noun and needs an article 'a'. Also, the preposition 'in' is incorrect for 'desk'; 'on' is appropriate.

× Whenever I bump into a beautiful bouquet of flowers or a gardens, I would take my phone out and snap some short and post it on my Instagram.

✓ Whenever I come across a beautiful bouquet of flowers or a garden, I take my phone out, snap some shots, and post them on my Instagram.

'Bump into' is usually used for people, not objects. 'Gardens' should be singular to match 'a'. 'Snap some short' is incorrect; it should be 'snap some shots'. Also, 'would' is unnecessary here; present tense fits better.

× No, it's just lighten your mood and make you feel great.

✓ No, it just lightens your mood and makes you feel great.

The verb forms 'lighten' and 'make' need to agree with the singular subject 'it', so they should be 'lightens' and 'makes'.

× Well, I know that lovers would usually send roses together on special occasions like Valentine's or anniversary and for other I think graduations is also an event that people used to send flowers together.

✓ Well, I know that lovers usually send roses on special occasions like Valentine's Day or anniversaries, and for others, I think graduations are also events when people send flowers.

'Valentine's' should be 'Valentine's Day'. 'Anniversary' should be plural 'anniversaries' to match 'occasions'. 'For other' should be 'for others'. 'Graduations is' should be 'graduations are' to agree in number. 'Used to send' is incorrect here; 'send' is appropriate.

× So yeah, it depends on occasion.

✓ So yeah, it depends on the occasion.

The phrase 'on occasion' needs the definite article 'the' to specify a particular occasion.