Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use more natural and common English words like 'flowers' instead of 'blossoms' to sound more natural. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating 'number of' twice. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love flowers very much. At my home, we have many flowers in different colours such as yellow, red, and pink.

提案: Avoid repeating phrases like 'number of' and 'adore blossom' which sound unnatural. Use linking words like 'for example' to connect your ideas. Also, be more specific about how your sister loves flowers.

例: Yes, I know many people who love flowers. For example, my sister really enjoys them and has decorated her room with various kinds of flowers.

提案: There is a mistake in the word 'laws' which should be 'flowers'. Also, avoid repeating 'number of'. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. Be more specific about the types of flowers or their appearance.

例: Yes, I live in a small village surrounded by many flowers. My house is in the fields where vibrant and colourful flowers bloom.

提案: Use more natural phrases like 'I prefer to send pictures of flowers' instead of 'give more preference'. Also, explain why you like to take photos of flowers using linking words like 'because'.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers because they look very vibrant and beautiful. I like to share these pictures with my friends on Snapchat.

提案: There are errors like 'plots' instead of 'flowers' and 'use shoes' which is unclear. Make sure to use correct vocabulary and be specific. Use linking words to list occasions clearly.

例: Yes, flowers are highly valued in my country. People often send flowers to others on occasions such as birthdays, weddings, anniversaries, and retirement parties.

× There are number of flowers available in my house in different types of colors like yellow, red, pink et cetera.

✓ There are a number of flowers available in my house in different types of colors like yellow, red, pink et cetera.

The phrase 'number of' requires the article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct. Without 'a', the sentence is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'a number of' when referring to several items.

× Yes, I know number of people who adore blossom a lot.

✓ Yes, I know a number of people who adore blossoms a lot.

Similar to the previous sentence, 'a number of' needs the article 'a'. Also, 'blossom' should be plural 'blossoms' to match the plural subject 'people' who adore them.

× My sister is one of them. She has decorated her room with different types of flowers.

✓ My sister is one of them. She has decorated her room with different types of flowers.

This sentence is correct and does not contain any grammar mistakes related to the provided list.

× Yes, I belong to a small village and there are number of laws where I live.

✓ Yes, I belong to a small village and there are a number of flowers where I live.

The phrase 'a number of' requires the article 'a'. Also, 'laws' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'flowers' to match the topic of the conversation.

× My house is located in fields and there are vibrant blossoms available there.

✓ My house is located in the fields and there are vibrant blossoms available there.

The noun 'fields' here is specific, so it requires the definite article 'the' before it.

× Yes, I am a Snapchatter and while I am sending snap I give more preference to send the picture of blossoms because they look very vibrant.

✓ Yes, I am a Snapchatter and while I am sending snaps I give more preference to sending pictures of blossoms because they look very vibrant.

The verb 'send' after 'preference to' should be in the '-ing' form 'sending'. Also, 'snap' should be plural 'snaps' and 'the picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match the context.

× Yes, plots are highly valued in my country and people use shoes and flowers to others on different types of occasions like birthday party, marriage, anniversary, retirement party.

✓ Yes, flowers are highly valued in my country and people send flowers to others on different types of occasions like birthday parties, marriages, anniversaries, and retirement parties.

'Plots' and 'shoes' are incorrect words here; it should be 'flowers'. The verb 'use' is incorrect; it should be 'send'. Also, the occasions should be plural to match the context, and the conjunction 'and' is added before the last item in the list for clarity.