Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good but slightly long and a bit repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas. Also, use linking words to make your answer flow better.

例: Yes, I love flowers, especially sunflowers and other yellow ones. Besides, I enjoy tulips and dahlias, and recently, I've become quite fond of collecting bouquets.

提案: Your answer is a bit long and could be clearer. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repeating the same point. Also, try to be more specific about why your friend likes flowers.

例: Yes, my friend Srishti loves flowers because they brighten her mood. She often pairs bouquets with her floral dresses. In fact, many of my friends and I share this love for flowers.

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive with 'a lot of'. Try to use varied vocabulary and link your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid unnecessary details that do not add much to the answer.

例: Yes, my garden is full of flowers, especially sunflowers and tulips in the front yard. This abundance is one reason I enjoy flowers so much.

提案: There is a mistake in your answer ('sunglasses' instead of 'sunflowers'), and some hesitation ('uh'). Try to speak clearly and check your vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I often photograph flowers daily. For instance, in the morning, I capture sunflowers facing the sun, while in the evening, I prefer darker flowers like night lilies and roses.

提案: Your answer is good but a bit repetitive with 'I would'. Try to use varied sentence structures and linking words to make your answer more natural and fluent.

例: Yes, sending flowers on birthdays is quite common in my country. For example, when I was away and my friends were in Mumbai, I used online services to pre-order pink and white bouquets for them.

× I also like tulips and dahlias and I've been obsessed with getting bouquets.

✓ I also like tulips and dahlias and I've been obsessed with getting bouquets.

No correction needed here as the use of 'getting' after 'obsessed with' is correct.

× Me and my friends, we all love flowers.

✓ My friends and I all love flowers.

The phrase 'Me and my friends' is incorrect as 'me' should not be used as the subject. The correct subject pronoun is 'I'. Also, 'My friends and I' is the proper order when listing oneself with others.

× Downstairs I have a beautiful front yard which has a lot of sunflowers, a lot of tulips growing and that is also one of the reasons why I really like flowers.

✓ Downstairs, I have a beautiful front yard which has a lot of sunflowers and a lot of tulips growing, and that is also one of the reasons why I really like flowers.

A comma is needed after 'Downstairs' to separate the introductory phrase. Also, adding 'and' before 'a lot of tulips growing' improves sentence clarity.

× In the morning, I take, uh, the pictures of sunglasses when they're facing the sun.

✓ In the morning, I take, uh, pictures of sunflowers when they're facing the sun.

'Sunglasses' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'sunflowers'. Also, 'the pictures' is better as 'pictures' without 'the' in this context.

× So when I was in there and my friends were in Mumbai, I would send them flowers through online websites.

✓ So when I was there and my friends were in Mumbai, I would send them flowers through online websites.

The phrase 'in there' is incorrect; 'there' alone is sufficient to indicate location. 'In there' is used for specific enclosed spaces, which is not the case here.