Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific reasons with linking words. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. Use simple, clear vocabulary and correct sentence structure.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they help express feelings to loved ones. For example, I have a garden in front of my house where I grow various flowers. They also bring freshness and beauty to my surroundings, which makes me feel happy every morning.

提案: Your answer has good content but needs clearer structure and grammar. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also' to connect ideas. Avoid filler words like 'uh'. Be specific and concise.

例: Yes, many people I know love flowers. For example, my father enjoys gardening, and we both grow flowers in our garden. This not only beautifies our home but also freshens the air around us.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains some incorrect or unclear information. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Provide specific examples and link ideas logically. Avoid vague phrases like 'you know' and unclear terms like 'Lotto'.

例: I currently live in Canada, where there are many flowers, especially roses in different colours such as red, yellow, and white. Additionally, some flowers are used to make tea, which is quite popular here.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical errors. Use simple and clear sentences. Explain your habits directly and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like 'send stick'.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers and share them on social media platforms like Snapchat. This helps me express my feelings and stay connected with my friends and family.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors and confusing phrases like 'kitten canes' and 'flats'. Focus on giving a clear, direct answer with relevant examples. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Avoid unnecessary fillers.

例: Yes, in my country, people often send flowers to express love and good wishes on special occasions. For instance, flowers are commonly given during festivals, birthdays, and anniversaries to show affection.

× With the help of flowers, one can easily show their loves with their near and dear ones.

✓ With the help of flowers, one can easily show their love to their near and dear ones.

The pronoun 'their' is correctly used as a singular gender-neutral pronoun referring to 'one', but 'loves' is incorrect as 'love' is an uncountable noun here. Use 'love' instead of 'loves'.

× Moreover, flowers give a little bit freshness to the human beings.

✓ Moreover, flowers give a little bit of freshness to human beings.

The phrase 'a little bit freshness' is incorrect; it should be 'a little bit of freshness'. Also, 'the human beings' is incorrect here; 'human beings' without 'the' is appropriate when speaking generally.

× Actually, if I'm going from my personal point of view, I have flowers in front of my house, in the garden and whenever I am wake up in morning, I first.

✓ Actually, from my personal point of view, I have flowers in front of my house and in the garden, and whenever I wake up in the morning, I first...

The phrase 'if I'm going from my personal point of view' is incorrect; it should be 'from my personal point of view'. Also, 'whenever I am wake up' is incorrect; it should be 'whenever I wake up'. The sentence is incomplete and needs completion for clarity.

× Yeah, I know plethora of people in my life who know love flowers too much.

✓ Yeah, I know a plethora of people in my life who love flowers very much.

The phrase 'know plethora of people' is missing the article 'a' before 'plethora'. Also, 'know love flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'love flowers'. 'Too much' is better replaced with 'very much' for positive statements.

× my father also love flowers so much.

✓ my father also loves flowers so much.

The verb 'love' should be in third person singular form 'loves' to agree with the singular subject 'my father'.

× me and my, uh, father both are like to grow flowers in our garden and it gave a little bit freshness in the atmosphere in front of my house.

✓ My father and I both like to grow flowers in our garden, and it gives a little bit of freshness to the atmosphere in front of my house.

The pronoun 'me' is incorrect as a subject; it should be 'I'. Also, 'are like to grow' is incorrect; it should be 'like to grow'. 'Gave' should be 'gives' to match present tense. 'A little bit freshness' should be 'a little bit of freshness'. 'In the atmosphere' should be 'to the atmosphere'.

× Well, nowadays I live in Canada so there are ample number of flowers here and the most important and most you know flowers are roses.

✓ Well, nowadays I live in Canada, so there is an ample number of flowers here, and the most important and well-known flowers are roses.

'There are ample number' is incorrect; it should be 'there is an ample number' because 'number' is singular. 'Most you know flowers' is unclear; 'well-known flowers' is appropriate.

× There are ample number of roses here like red rose, yellow rose, blue rose.

✓ There are an ample number of roses here, like red roses, yellow roses, and blue roses.

'Ample number' requires the article 'an'. Also, the flower names should be plural to match 'roses'.

× Moreover there is Lotto.

✓ Moreover, there is Lotus.

'Lotto' seems to be a mispronunciation or misspelling; likely intended 'Lotus', which is a flower.

× It's also very quite popular here.

✓ It's also quite popular here.

The phrase 'very quite' is incorrect; 'quite' alone suffices to express the degree.

× A lot of people use lot of flowers to make their tea and other things.

✓ A lot of people use lots of flowers to make their tea and other things.

'Use lot of flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'use lots of flowers'.

× Yes, in this contemporary, everyone is gain bond with the technology.

✓ Yes, in this contemporary time, everyone is gaining bond with technology.

'In this contemporary' is incomplete; 'in this contemporary time' is better. 'Gain bond' is incorrect; 'gaining bond' is better but still awkward; 'connecting with technology' would be clearer.

× So I'm also one of that.

✓ So I'm also one of them.

The phrase 'one of that' is incorrect; it should be 'one of them' to refer to people.

× I clicked photos of the flowers uh in my daily life and posted them on my social media platform sometime uh, nowadays Snapchat is quite popular.

✓ I click photos of flowers in my daily life and post them on my social media platforms sometimes. Nowadays, Snapchat is quite popular.

The use of past tense 'clicked' and 'posted' is inconsistent with 'in my daily life' which implies habitual action; present simple tense 'click' and 'post' is appropriate.

× So with the help of that, I send stick to my near and dear ones to showing my love with them.

✓ So with the help of that, I send stickers to my near and dear ones to show my love to them.

'Send stick' is incorrect; it should be 'send stickers'. 'To showing' should be 'to show'. 'Show my love with them' should be 'show my love to them'.

× Yes, according to my reminder, with the help of flowers, one can easily show their love with their kitten canes.

✓ Yes, according to my memory, with the help of flowers, one can easily show their love to their close ones.

'According to my reminder' is incorrect; 'according to my memory' or 'as I remember' is better. 'Kitten canes' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation; 'close ones' or 'kin' is appropriate. 'Show love with' should be 'show love to'.

× Moreover, uh, nowadays uh flats is also very quite popular to showing their love with their girlfriend.

✓ Moreover, nowadays, flats are also quite popular for showing love to their girlfriends.

'Flats is' should be 'flats are' (plural). 'Very quite' is incorrect; 'quite' suffices. 'To showing' should be 'for showing'. 'Love with' should be 'love to'.

× And uh, I think so people every time an animal want to show their love and uh wish to anyone regarding any special thing, the old the flowers is the most priority thing which people kept with them.

✓ And I think people always want to show their love and wish someone on special occasions; flowers are the most important thing people keep with them.

'People every time an animal want' is incorrect; 'people always want' is correct. 'The old the flowers is' is incorrect; 'flowers are' is correct. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammar.