Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise, and avoid redundancy. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'and'.

例: Yes, I love flowers because their beautiful colours and pleasant scents help me relax. For instance, I often choose body creams with floral fragrances.

提案: Your answer has some repetition and grammatical mistakes. Try to structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, my mother loves flowers, especially roses. Our house is surrounded by a rose garden, which makes her very happy.

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but could be more coherent and natural. Use linking words like 'and' or 'especially' properly, and avoid repetition. Also, be specific about the occasions when flowers are popular.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. We have local plants and several flower shops. Especially during occasions like Christmas and Mother's Day, many people buy flowers.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains some awkward phrasing and grammar errors. Try to use clear and natural sentences, and link your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I often take photos of beautiful flowers when I go for walks. If I take a nice picture, I usually set it as my phone wallpaper.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Also, be specific about the types of flowers or occasions.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers. For example, on Mother's Day, we usually give carnations to mothers. Flowers are also common gifts on birthdays and Christmas.

× Yes I do especially I watch beautiful flowers mysterious release and also the smell of them makes me relax so I tend to choose flowers smelled body cream if I.

✓ Yes, I do. Especially, I watch beautiful flowers mysteriously release and also the smell of them makes me relax, so I tend to choose flower-scented body cream.

The phrase 'mysterious release' is incorrect because 'mysterious' is an adjective, but here an adverb is needed to describe the verb 'release'. The correct adverb form is 'mysteriously'. Also, 'flowers smelled body cream' is incorrect; it should be 'flower-scented body cream' to correctly describe the cream's scent.

× Yes I do especially I watch beautiful flowers mysterious release and also the smell of them makes me relax so I tend to choose flowers smelled body cream if I.

✓ Yes, I do. Especially, I watch beautiful flowers mysteriously release and also the smell of them makes me relax, so I tend to choose flower-scented body cream.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper punctuation, making it hard to understand. Breaking it into shorter sentences and adding commas improves clarity and readability.

× Yes I do, for example my mother she loves roses and we leave my house is surrounded by rose park so this made made her her happy as well.

✓ Yes, I do. For example, my mother loves roses and the area around my house is surrounded by a rose park, so this makes her happy as well.

The original sentence has redundant pronouns ('my mother she'), repeated words ('made made her her'), and awkward phrasing ('we leave my house is surrounded'). Correcting these improves sentence clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes there are. We have some local plants as well and also a lot of flower florists and flower shop in my area.

✓ Yes, there are. We have some local plants as well and also a lot of flower florists and flower shops in my area.

The phrase 'flower shop' should be plural 'flower shops' to agree with 'a lot of', which implies multiple shops. Similarly, 'flower florists' is acceptable as plural.

× So especially Christmas type Mother's Day, lots of people are are there to buy them.

✓ So especially on Christmas and Mother's Day, lots of people are there to buy them.

The phrase 'Christmas type Mother's Day' is unclear and incorrect. It should be 'on Christmas and Mother's Day' to indicate the occasions. Also, the repeated 'are are' is a typo and should be corrected to a single 'are'.

× Then if I could take beautifully, I said them to my wallpaper of my phone.

✓ Then if I could take beautiful photos, I set them as the wallpaper on my phone.

The phrase 'take beautifully' is incorrect; 'beautifully' is an adverb but here a noun 'beautiful photos' is needed. Also, 'said them to my wallpaper' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'set them as the wallpaper'. The preposition 'on' is used with 'wallpaper'.

× Then if I could take beautifully, I said them to my wallpaper of my phone.

✓ Then if I could take beautiful photos, I set them as the wallpaper on my phone.

The preposition 'of' in 'wallpaper of my phone' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on' when referring to setting wallpaper on a device.

× Especially in Mother's Day we send the specific type of flower to mother.

✓ Especially on Mother's Day, we send a specific type of flower to mothers.

The phrase 'in Mother's Day' should be 'on Mother's Day' because we use 'on' with days. Also, 'the specific type of flower' is too definite; 'a specific type of flower' is more appropriate. 'To mother' should be 'to mothers' to generalise the statement.