Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by avoiding unnecessary articles and improving sentence structure. Also, provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they are very beautiful. Moreover, flowers often help people feel happy and keep smiling.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve grammar by using correct verb forms. Use linking words to connect ideas and make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, my younger brother loves flowers. He always takes care of them, especially in his free time.

提案: Make your answer more concise and clear by avoiding redundancy. Use linking words properly and improve sentence flow.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live because my neighbors love flowers and enjoy a pleasant atmosphere.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid awkward phrasing.

例: No, I don't usually take photos of flowers because I am busy with my studies. However, I take photos during special occasions and in my free time.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence flow by using appropriate linking words. Make your answer more specific and natural.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others, especially during special occasions, events, and parties, as it is a comfortable way to express their feelings.

× Yes, I love the flowers because it is very beautiful and mostly flowers helps the individuals keep smiling.

✓ Yes, I love flowers because they are very beautiful and mostly flowers help individuals keep smiling.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'flowers' when speaking generally. Also, 'it is' should be 'they are' to agree with the plural noun 'flowers'. 'Helps' should be 'help' to agree with plural subject 'flowers'. Use 'individuals' without 'the' as it is general.

× Yes I know my younger brother loves the flowers and he always take care of flowers as well as in free time he take care of flowers.

✓ Yes, I know my younger brother loves flowers and he always takes care of flowers, and in his free time he takes care of flowers.

The verb 'take' should be 'takes' to agree with the third person singular subject 'he'. Also, 'the flowers' should be 'flowers' when speaking generally. Added commas and 'his' for clarity.

× Yes, there are a lot of flowers where I live because my neighbors love the flowers and as well as they love their atmosphere and most so that's why they mostly love the flowers.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of flowers where I live because my neighbors love flowers and also love their environment, so that's why they mostly love flowers.

'The flowers' should be 'flowers' when speaking generally. 'As well as' is incorrectly used; 'also' or 'and also' is better. 'Atmosphere' is better replaced with 'environment' for clarity. Sentence restructured for better flow.

× No, I don't take photos of flowers in daily life because I am very busy in my study. Mostly I take photos of large some special occasions and in my free time.

✓ No, I don't take photos of flowers in daily life because I am very busy with my studies. Mostly, I take photos on some special occasions and in my free time.

Use 'busy with' instead of 'busy in'. 'Study' should be plural 'studies' when referring to academic work. 'Of large some special occasions' is incorrect; corrected to 'on some special occasions'. Added commas for clarity.

× Yes, people in my country often send flowers to other because they feel comfortable to send flowers to others and they send flowers in special occasions and events as well as parties.

✓ Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others because they feel comfortable sending flowers to others, and they send flowers on special occasions, events, and parties.

'Other' should be 'others' as a pronoun. 'Feel comfortable to send' should be 'feel comfortable sending'. Preposition 'in' should be 'on' for occasions. Added commas for clarity.