Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by correcting grammar errors and avoiding redundancy. For example, instead of saying 'Who doesn't love flowers?', you can directly express your opinion. Also, use plural form 'flowers' consistently and avoid repeating similar ideas. Try to keep your answer concise and clear.

例: Yes, I love flowers because their vibrant colors and pleasant fragrance always lift my mood. For instance, I often keep fresh flowers at home to create a cheerful and welcoming atmosphere.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Please focus on subject-verb agreement and correct word forms. Also, avoid unnecessary words like 'absolutely' before 'loves'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Try to be more specific and clear in your description.

例: Yes, one of my close friends loves flowers. She enjoys gardening and often spends her weekends planting and caring for different types of flowers because she finds it relaxing and rewarding. For example, she recently grew a beautiful rose garden that brightens up her entire backyard.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward expressions. Please pay attention to article usage ('a public park'), plural forms, and sentence structure. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'especially' properly. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and ensure clarity.

例: Yes, there are quite a lot of flowers where I live, especially in public parks and residential gardens. For example, during spring, the streets are lined with colorful blossoms like roses and tulips, which really brighten up the neighbourhood. I think having many flowers around makes the environment more pleasant and inviting.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete sentences. Please focus on forming complete and coherent sentences. Avoid awkward phrases like 'I find it their color'. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, explain why you take photos and what you do with them clearly.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers in my daily life because I find their colors and shapes very captivating. For example, when I walk in the park or visit gardens, I capture the beauty of different flowers. I usually share these photos with my friends and keep them as memories.

提案: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and has grammatical errors. Please complete your sentences and use articles correctly ('a thoughtful and beautiful way'). Also, avoid ending sentences abruptly. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide clear examples.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others on various occasions such as birthdays, anniversaries, and festivals. Flowers are considered a thoughtful and beautiful way to express emotions like love, gratitude, or sympathy. I also send flowers to celebrate special moments with my loved ones.

× They are vibrant colors and pleasant fragrance always lift my mood and brighten up any space.

✓ They are vibrant colors and pleasant fragrances that always lift my mood and brighten up any space.

The sentence mixes plural 'colors' with singular 'fragrance'. Both should be plural to maintain parallel structure and agreement. Also, adding 'that' improves sentence clarity.

× I often keep fresh flower at home to create a cheerful and welcoming atmosphere.

✓ I often keep fresh flowers at home to create a cheerful and welcoming atmosphere.

'Flower' should be plural 'flowers' because it refers to multiple items generally kept at home, not just one.

× Yes, one of my close friend who is absolutely loves the flowers.

✓ Yes, one of my close friends who absolutely loves flowers.

'Friend' should be plural 'friends' because 'one of' refers to a member of a group. Also, 'absolutely loves the flowers' is corrected to 'absolutely loves flowers' to remove unnecessary article.

× She enjoys Georgia gardening and of often spends her weekends planting and caring for a different types of flower because she find this relaxing and rewarding.

✓ She enjoys gardening in Georgia and often spends her weekends planting and caring for different types of flowers because she finds this relaxing and rewarding.

'Of often' is incorrect; it should be 'often'. 'Different types of flower' should be plural 'flowers'. 'She find' should be 'she finds' to agree with third person singular subject.

× She enjoys Georgia gardening and of often spends her weekends planting and caring for a different types of flower because she find this relaxing and rewarding.

✓ She enjoys gardening in Georgia and often spends her weekends planting and caring for different types of flowers because she finds this relaxing and rewarding.

Corrected 'a different types of flower' to 'different types of flowers' to fix singular/plural mismatch.

× She recently grew a beautiful Rose Garden that brightens up her entire backyard.

✓ She recently grew a beautiful rose garden that brightens up her entire backyard.

'Rose Garden' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun; here it is a common noun phrase.

× Yes, of course there are quite a lot of flowers where I live, especially in a public parks and residential gardens.

✓ Yes, of course there are quite a lot of flowers where I live, especially in public parks and residential gardens.

'A public parks' is incorrect; 'parks' is plural and should not have 'a' before it.

× For instance, during some spring the streets are lined with the colorful blossom like roses and tulips which really brighten up the neighborhood.

✓ For instance, during spring the streets are lined with colorful blossoms like roses and tulips which really brighten up the neighborhood.

'Some spring' is incorrect; 'spring' is uncountable here. 'Blossom' should be plural 'blossoms' to match 'roses and tulips'.

× I think have many flowers around, makes the environment more pleasant and inviting.

✓ I think having many flowers around makes the environment more pleasant and inviting.

The original sentence lacks a subject for 'have' and has incorrect structure. Using 'having' as a gerund subject fixes the sentence.

× I often take photos of flowers in my daily life because I find it their color and shapes very captivating.

✓ I often take photos of flowers in my daily life because I find their colors and shapes very captivating.

'I find it their color and shapes' is incorrect pronoun usage. It should be 'I find their colors and shapes' to correctly refer to the flowers.

× For example, when I walk into the park or visit gardens, it simultaneously capture beauty of different flowers.

✓ For example, when I walk into the park or visit gardens, I simultaneously capture the beauty of different flowers.

The subject 'it' is incorrect here; it should be 'I' to match the speaker. Also, 'capture' should be 'capture' (present tense) with subject 'I'. Added 'the' before 'beauty'.

× Share with my friends, Keep as.

✓ I share them with my friends and keep them as memories.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks verbs and objects. The correction completes the sentence meaningfully.

× Yes, I think people in my country often send flowers to others on various occasions such as birthday, anniversary and festivals.

✓ Yes, I think people in my country often send flowers to others on various occasions such as birthdays, anniversaries, and festivals.

'Birthday' and 'anniversary' should be plural to match 'various occasions'. Added commas for clarity.

× Flowers are considered thoughtful and beautiful way to express emotions like love, gratitude or sympathy and I often celebrate with.

✓ Flowers are considered a thoughtful and beautiful way to express emotions like love, gratitude, or sympathy, and I often celebrate with them.

The sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'thoughtful and beautiful way'. Also, 'celebrate with' is incomplete; it should be 'celebrate with them' to refer to flowers.