Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is enthusiastic but contains some unnatural phrasing and minor grammatical errors. For example, 'I'm renting flowers' is unclear and 'attached to beauty to any place' is awkward. Try to use clearer and more natural expressions, and keep your sentences concise and relevant.

例: Absolutely, I love flowers because their vibrant colours and sweet scents can brighten up any place. They often lift my mood and make me feel happier.

提案: Your answer is clear but contains a tense inconsistency ('can grow' should be 'could grow'). Also, adding linking words would improve coherence. Try to provide a bit more detail to enrich your answer.

例: My mother was really into flowers. She had a small garden in our backyard where she could grow various types of flowers. She always said that flowers brought her joy and peace because they made the garden a relaxing place.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'they bring they're beautiful'. Also, avoid mentioning that you don't know the flower's name; instead, focus on describing them. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: There are quite a few flowers in my neighbourhood, especially in spring. For example, white flowers bloom and their beauty really brightens up the area, making it more pleasant to walk around.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical mistakes such as 'when I came across' and 'when I during'. Also, 'relaxes me' should be 'relax me'. Try to use correct verb tenses and smoother sentence structures.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers when I come across particularly beautiful or vibrant ones during my daily walk. Taking photos helps me appreciate nature's beauty and relaxes me.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and correct plural forms, for example, 'on occasions' instead of 'in some occasions' and 'Valentine's Day' without 's'. Adding linking words would also help coherence.

例: Yes, most people in my country often send flowers to others, especially on occasions like weddings, parties, birthdays and Valentine's Day. Flowers are a great way to show love and appreciation.

× I'm renting flowers because they can be attached to beauty to any place.

✓ I'm arranging flowers because they can be attached to beautify any place.

The verb 'renting' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is likely 'arranging' or 'using' flowers. Also, 'attached to beauty to any place' is incorrect; it should be 'attached to beautify any place' to express the purpose of making a place beautiful.

× She had a small garden in our backyard where she can grow various flowers.

✓ She had a small garden in our backyard where she could grow various flowers.

The sentence refers to a past situation ('had'), so the modal verb 'can' should be in the past form 'could' to maintain tense consistency.

× For example, white flowers bloom, although I don't know their exact name, they bring they're beautiful and brighten up the area.

✓ For example, white flowers bloom, although I don't know their exact name, they are beautiful and brighten up the area.

The phrase 'they bring they're beautiful' is incorrect. 'They're' is a contraction of 'they are' and does not fit here. The correct phrase is 'they are beautiful'. Also, 'bring' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context.

× Yes, I often take photos of flowers when I came across particularly beautiful or vibrant ones when I during my daily walk.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of flowers when I come across particularly beautiful or vibrant ones during my daily walk.

The phrase 'when I came across' mixes past tense with present habitual action. Since the sentence describes a habitual action ('I often take photos'), the present tense 'come across' should be used. Also, 'when I during my daily walk' is incorrect; 'during my daily walk' suffices.

× Taking photos can help me appreciate nature's beauty and relaxes me.

✓ Taking photos can help me appreciate nature's beauty and relax me.

After 'can help me', the verb should be in the base form without 's'. 'Relaxes me' is incorrect; it should be 'relax me'.

× Yes, most people in my country often send flowers to others, especially in some occasions like weddings, parties, birthdays, Valentine's Days.

✓ Yes, most people in my country often send flowers to others, especially on occasions like weddings, parties, birthdays, and Valentine's Day.

The phrase 'in some occasions' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on occasions'. Also, 'Valentine's Days' should be singular 'Valentine's Day'. Adding 'and' before the last item in the list improves clarity.