Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达不够清晰，语法和用词错误较多，导致意思难以理解。建议用简单明了的句子直接表达观点，并避免重复。

例: No, I don't love flowers because I find them less attractive. Also, they attract insects like bees, which I don't like.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和词汇使用不当，表达不够连贯。建议先用主题句回答问题，再用具体细节支持，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, my grandmother loves flowers. She has a garden full of them and decorates her home with flowers because she believes they symbolize love and warmth.

提案: 回答内容混乱，词汇错误严重，表达不清晰。建议用简单句子直接回答问题，并提供具体原因，避免使用错误词汇。

例: No, there are not many flowers where I live because I live in a city apartment with limited space. Also, maintaining flowers can be expensive.

提案: 回答中表达不自然且有语法错误。建议直接回答问题，说明原因，并用连词连接句子，使表达更流畅。

例: No, I don't take photos of flowers because I don't like them. Also, I don't think pictures of flowers are very interesting to me.

提案: 回答中有词汇错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议使用正确的词汇，清楚说明送花的场合，并用连接词使句子连贯。

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers. For example, men usually give flowers to their partners on anniversaries or birthdays. It is also common to give flowers to elders during Chinese New Year.

× No I don't find the skin beauty fine.

✓ No, I don't find skin beauty fine.

这里的'skin beauty'不需要加定冠词'the'，因为它是泛指皮肤美。

× A place I don't want them around flowers was sweet.

✓ I don't want flowers around me because they attract insects like bees.

原句结构混乱，意思不清晰。应调整句子结构，使表达更明确。

× Also attracted insects like bees.

✓ They also attract insects like bees.

缺少主语，且动词时态应与主语一致。

× I don't want them around because of their Stinger.

✓ I don't want them around because of their stingers.

'Stinger'应为复数形式'stingers'，因为指的是多只昆虫的刺。

× Yes, my grandmother is in two flowers.

✓ Yes, my grandmother loves flowers.

'is in two flowers'用法错误，应使用'loves flowers'表达喜欢花。

× She gets her whole garden, filled them, and even placed it in and around her home.

✓ She has her whole garden filled with them and even places them in and around her home.

'filled them'应为'filled with them'，'placed it'应为'places them'，保持主谓一致和正确搭配。

× Like the woman generation, she believes files represent familiarity and love, so she really adopted them.

✓ Like the older generation, she believes flowers represent familiarity and love, so she really loves them.

'woman generation'应为'older generation'，'files'应为'flowers'，'adopted'用法不当，应为'loves'。

× No, since I'm living in an apartment in the city, there is no enough space for followers.

✓ No, since I live in an apartment in the city, there is not enough space for flowers.

'followers'应为'flowers'，'no enough'应为'not enough'。

× The Greenland green general is glass and tree for shapes but not fire.

✓ The green land generally has grass and trees for shapes but not flowers.

原句词汇错误，'Greenland green general'应为'green land generally'，'glass'应为'grass'，'fire'应为'flowers'。

× Perhaps the upkeeping is so expensive.

✓ Perhaps the upkeep is too expensive.

'upkeeping'用法错误，应为名词'upkeep'，'so expensive'改为'too expensive'更合适。

× No, I'm a girl but I hate flowers.

✓ No, I'm a girl, but I hate flowers.

缺少逗号，连接两个独立分句。

× I don't see any point of having pictures of flowers and I think no one will be given words any time to read so I don't need to take a picture for remember.

✓ I don't see any point in having pictures of flowers, and I think no one will have time to look at them, so I don't need to take pictures to remember.

'point of'应为'point in'，'given words any time to read'表达不当，改为'have time to look at them'，'for remember'应为'to remember'。

× Yes, many people send flowers in my country.

✓ Yes, many people send flowers in my country.

此句无语法错误，保持原句。

× In Hong Kong, men often give their momentum palate files on anniversary or rioters.

✓ In Hong Kong, men often give flowers to their partners on anniversaries or birthdays.

'momentum palate files'应为'flowers to their partners'，'rioters'应为'birthdays'。

× It is common giving flowers to older people or Chinese New Year.

✓ It is common to give flowers to older people or during Chinese New Year.

'common giving'应为'common to give'，'or Chinese New Year'应为'during Chinese New Year'。