Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“someone are allergic”应为“someone is allergic”，“appear at the water significant times”表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，避免冗长且不准确的表达，同时注意主谓一致。

例: Yes, I love flowers very much. Even people who are allergic to pollen usually appreciate flowers in their own way. Flowers often appear during important moments in our lives and symbolize hope and happiness.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如“has addicted to”应为“has been addicted to”，“she's a expert”应为“she's an expert”，“like the hay in garden”表达不准确。建议使用正确的时态和冠词，表达更准确自然。

例: Yes, I do. My husband's elder sister has been passionate about flowers for many years. She is an expert in flower arranging. Her balcony is full of various flowers, making it look like a beautiful garden.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如“hundreds kinds”应为“hundreds of kinds”，“the buildings surrounded”缺少谓语动词。建议注意名词复数和介词的正确使用，使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I live in a community called Polly Cheng Song. It is the most beautiful garden community in the area. There are hundreds of kinds of plants, and the buildings are surrounded by many flowers and trees.

提案: 回答中有重复和口语填充词，如“umm”“uh”，且表达不够连贯。建议减少口语填充词，使用连接词使句子更连贯，表达更简洁。

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers. When I go outside with my family and friends, we enjoy talking and taking many pictures together. Flowers are always an important part of our photos because we love their beauty and colors.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，如“maybe a few people sent”应为“maybe few people sent”，“not good at expression, their emotions”表达不自然。建议调整句子结构，使表达更清晰自然。

例: Yes, of course. In our parents' generation, few people sent flowers because they were not good at expressing their emotions. However, nowadays, people often send flowers on many occasions, such as graduations.

× I think no one will dislike flowers, even someone are allergic to the pollen.

✓ I think no one will dislike flowers, even if someone is allergic to the pollen.

这里的主语是单数someone，谓语动词应使用单数形式is，而不是are。

× flowers appear at the water significant times in our life

✓ flowers appear at the most significant times in our life

短语中water不合适，应使用most表示“最重要的”，water是错误的介词搭配。

× they are also symbolize hope and happiness.

✓ they also symbolize hope and happiness.

谓语动词symbolize前不需要are，去掉are使句子语法正确。

× She has addicted to flowers for many years

✓ She has been addicted to flowers for many years

动词短语“be addicted to”需要使用完成进行时态，表示持续的状态，应使用has been addicted。

× she's a expert of gathering.

✓ she's an expert of gathering.

expert以元音音素开头，前面冠词应使用an而不是a。

× There are various flowers have been planted on her balcony.

✓ Various flowers have been planted on her balcony.

句子中there are和have been重复，去掉there are使句子结构正确。

× It looks like the hay in garden.

✓ It looks like hay in the garden.

hay前不需要定冠词the，garden前需要加定冠词the。

× There are hundreds kinds of plants in the community, the buildings surrounded by a lot of flowers and trees.

✓ There are hundreds of kinds of plants in the community, and the buildings are surrounded by a lot of flowers and trees.

hundreds后应加of，buildings前缺少连词and，buildings后缺少be动词are。

× we take a lots, lot of photos together

✓ we take lots of photos together

lots是复数形式，不需要加a，a lot of是固定短语，不能写成a lots。

× and the flowers and also a part of the images.

✓ and the flowers are also a part of the images.

缺少谓语动词are，导致句子不完整。

× We love beautiful flowers and the colorful photo.

✓ We love beautiful flowers and colorful photos.

photo应使用复数形式photos，与flowers保持一致，且去掉定冠词the。

× maybe a few people sent flowers to each other in our parents generation because they were not good at expression, their emotions at that time.

✓ maybe a few people sent flowers to each other in our parents' generation because they were not good at expressing their emotions at that time.

parents应加所有格'，expression应改为动名词expressing，表示表达动作。

× people send flowers to others in many occasions like commencement.

✓ people send flowers to others on many occasions like commencements.

介词应为on，commencement应为复数commencements，表示多种场合。