Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và từ vựng chính xác hơn, ví dụ như sử dụng đúng động từ và danh từ số nhiều. Ngoài ra, nên tránh lặp từ và câu trả lời nên tự nhiên, mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they bring natural beauty to my home. I grow several types, such as sunflowers, roses, and lilies, and I often decorate my bedroom with them.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp, đặc biệt là chia động từ và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, nên sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lỗi chính tả như 'planning' thay vì 'planting'.

例: Definitely, my mother loves flowers. When I was a child, she taught me how to take care of them because planting is her hobby, and she wanted me to join her.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý đến số nhiều của danh từ và chia động từ cho đúng. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, có liên kết giữa các ý và tránh lỗi chính tả. Nên dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live, especially lilies, sunflowers, and roses. My mother often plants flowers when she has free time, and on weekends, I usually help her by walking through the garden.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu tự nhiên hơn và chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ như cách dùng 'reduce stress' và 'keep memories'. Nên dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers because I find them very beautiful, and it helps me reduce stress. Moreover, I like to keep memorable photos of flowers on my phone.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'send flowers to others' nên rõ ràng hơn. Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc mạch lạc, tránh lỗi chính tả và dùng từ phù hợp với ngữ cảnh.

例: In my opinion, people in Vietnam often send flowers to others because flowers bring natural beauty and are affordable. For example, on my birthday, my mother always gives me a rose because it is very beautiful.

× Absolutely, I enjoy flowers because it bring a beautiful natural in my house.

✓ Absolutely, I enjoy flowers because they bring a beautiful natural atmosphere to my house.

The subject 'flowers' is plural, so the verb should be 'bring' not 'brings'. Also, 'a beautiful natural' is incomplete; it should be 'a beautiful natural atmosphere'.

× I play a lot of flowers including sunflower, rose and Lily and I always decorate them in my bedroom.

✓ I have a lot of flowers including sunflowers, roses, and lilies, and I always decorate my bedroom with them.

The verb 'play' is incorrect here; it should be 'have'. Also, flower names should be plural when referring to multiple flowers. 'Decorate them in my bedroom' is awkward; better to say 'decorate my bedroom with them'.

× Definitely the people I know who love flowers is my mother because when I was a child my mother always taught me how to take care of flowers because planning is her hobby and she want me plenty with her.

✓ Definitely, the person I know who loves flowers is my mother because when I was a child, my mother always taught me how to take care of flowers because planting is her hobby and she wants me to plant with her.

'People' is plural but refers to one person, so use 'person'. 'Love' should be 'loves' for third person singular. 'Planning' should be 'planting'. 'She want me plenty with her' is incorrect; it should be 'she wants me to plant with her'.

× Yes, there are a lot of flower where I live, especially Lily, sunflower and rose, and my mother always plant flowers when she have a free time On the weekend, I often walk through the flowers to help my mother.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of flowers where I live, especially lilies, sunflowers, and roses, and my mother always plants flowers when she has free time. On the weekend, I often walk through the flowers to help my mother.

'Flower' should be plural 'flowers'. Flower names should be plural. 'Plant' should be 'plants' for third person singular. 'She have' should be 'she has'. Added missing period and corrected sentence structure.

× Absolutely, I always take photos of flowers in my daily life because I see it's very beautiful and it makes me reduce the stress.

✓ Absolutely, I always take photos of flowers in my daily life because I think they are very beautiful and they help me reduce stress.

'I see it's very beautiful' is awkward; better to say 'I think they are very beautiful'. 'It makes me reduce the stress' is incorrect; better to say 'they help me reduce stress'.

× On top of that, I want to keep memorable memory of flower in my phone.

✓ On top of that, I want to keep memorable memories of flowers on my phone.

'Memorable memory' is redundant; use 'memorable memories'. 'Flower' should be plural 'flowers'. 'In my phone' should be 'on my phone'.

× In my opinion, I think people in Vietnam often send flowers to other because the flowers bring a beautiful natural and it's very affordable.

✓ In my opinion, I think people in Vietnam often send flowers to others because flowers bring natural beauty and are very affordable.

'Other' should be 'others'. 'Bring a beautiful natural' is incomplete; better to say 'bring natural beauty'. 'It's' should be 'they are' to agree with plural 'flowers'.

× For example, on my birthday, my mother always gave me a rose because it's very beautiful.

✓ For example, on my birthday, my mother always gives me a rose because it is very beautiful.

The tense should be present 'gives' to match habitual action. 'It's' is acceptable but expanded to 'it is' for clarity.