Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more fluent and natural by avoiding filler words like 'uh'. Also, structure your response with a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details. For example, explain why the fragrance relaxes you or how flowers express feelings.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they are a beautiful way to express emotions. For instance, their fragrance helps me feel calm and relaxed after a busy day.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Avoid filler words and finish your sentences fully. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, be specific about the types of flowers or why your sister enjoys them.

例: Yes, my sister loves flowers because she enjoys their fragrance. She grows various types of flowers in jars in our backyard, which brightens up the space.

提案: Avoid repeating information from previous answers. Use clear and complete sentences with proper linking words. Also, be specific about the kinds of flowers or how they enhance your living environment.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live because my sister grows a variety of plants in pots on the balcony and in the backyard, which makes our home vibrant and welcoming.

提案: Try to avoid filler words and unclear phrases like 'explode the nature'. Use precise vocabulary and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Explain why taking photos elevates your mood.

例: I don't usually take photos of flowers daily, but when I go outdoors to enjoy nature, I like to photograph different flowers because it lifts my spirits.

提案: Make your answer more fluent by removing filler words and correcting grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples of occasions when flowers are sent.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers as a symbol of affection and love. For example, flowers are commonly given on birthdays, anniversaries, and special celebrations.

× I love flowers because, uh, with that we can show our love, uh, feelings and I like the fragrance of flowers which make me relaxed.

✓ I love flowers because, uh, with them we can show our love, uh, feelings and I like the fragrance of flowers which makes me relaxed.

The verb 'make' should be in the third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'fragrance'. Also, 'with that' is better replaced by 'with them' to correctly refer to 'flowers'.

× she, uh, also grows some, uh, different type of flowers in the BA back jars, uh, because it's.

✓ she, uh, also grows some, uh, different types of flowers in the backyard jars, uh, because it's.

The phrase 'different type of flowers' should be pluralized to 'different types of flowers' to match the plural noun 'flowers'. Also, 'BA back jars' seems to be a mishearing or typo; 'backyard jars' is more appropriate. Prepositions and noun forms need correction for clarity.

× So in our house there are lot of flats in the pots and also in the balcony.

✓ So in our house there are lots of plants in the pots and also on the balcony.

'Lot of flats' is incorrect; it should be 'lots of plants'. Also, the preposition 'in the balcony' should be 'on the balcony' because we stand or place things on a balcony, not in it.

× when I'm, uh, going to, to explode the nature that time I take the pictures of uh, different flowers which elevate my mood.

✓ when I'm, uh, going to explore nature, at that time I take pictures of, uh, different flowers which elevate my mood.

The verb 'explode' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'explore'. Also, 'the nature' should be 'nature' without 'the'. The phrase 'that time' is better expressed as 'at that time' for clarity.

× Just of course, because this is a These flowers are sign of showing affection and, uh, love.

✓ Just of course, because these flowers are a sign of showing affection and, uh, love.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'this is a These flowers'. It should be 'these flowers are a sign'. Also, 'sign' needs the article 'a' before it. The definite article usage is corrected for grammatical accuracy.