Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami serta singkat. Hindari pengulangan dan gunakan kata sambung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

例: Yes, I love flowers because there are many different types, and I find them all beautiful. I enjoy looking at them since they are some of the most beautiful things on earth.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan ejaan, serta buat kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur. Jelaskan contoh bunga dengan spesifik dan gunakan kata sambung untuk menghubungkan ide.

例: My mom loves flowers. She has a small garden in front of our house with many different types, such as tulips, roses, and other colorful flowers.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kata sambung yang tepat. Gunakan kosakata yang lebih tepat dan hindari pengulangan kata yang sama.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live, especially along the roadside. They add vibrant colors and bring life to the neighborhood, which makes daily walks more enjoyable.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami. Jelaskan alasan dengan lebih jelas dan gunakan kata sambung untuk menghubungkan ide.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers in my daily life. I enjoy looking at these photos later because they are very refreshing to my eyes.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat. Gunakan kata sambung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren dan jelaskan dengan contoh yang lebih spesifik.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to each other on special occasions, such as graduations or celebrations. Flowers have become one of the most popular gifts.

× Of course I love flowers because flowers has a various type and it's all beautiful for me.

✓ Of course I love flowers because flowers have various types and they're all beautiful to me.

The noun 'flowers' is plural, so the verb should be 'have' instead of 'has'. Also, 'a various type' is incorrect; it should be 'various types' to match plural form. 'It's all beautiful for me' should be 'they're all beautiful to me' to agree with plural subject and correct preposition usage.

× My mom My mom love flower.

✓ My mom loves flowers.

The subject 'My mom' is singular, so the verb should be 'loves' (third person singular). Also, 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' to indicate general love for flowers.

× She had a mini curtain in front of our house and she has many different type of flowers.

✓ She has a mini curtain in front of our house and she has many different types of flowers.

The phrase 'many different type' should be 'many different types' because 'many' requires plural noun. Also, 'had' should be 'has' to maintain present tense consistency.

× For example we have the Tulip, 1 roses and book and film.

✓ For example, we have tulips, roses, books, and films.

The nouns should be plural to indicate multiple items. Also, '1 roses' is incorrect; it should be 'roses' or 'one rose' if singular. The sentence also needs commas for clarity.

× Yes, there are a lot of flower where I live, especially along the side of the road.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of flowers where I live, especially along the side of the road.

'A lot of' should be followed by a plural noun 'flowers' instead of singular 'flower'.

× I find it very refreshing to look at them because they add more color and vibrant and bring life to the neighborhood, making daily walks more enjoyable.

✓ I find it very refreshing to look at them because they add more color and vibrancy and bring life to the neighborhood, making daily walks more enjoyable.

'Vibrant' is an adjective and cannot be used in this context; the noun form 'vibrancy' is appropriate here to parallel 'color'.

× but I can show you now because my phone is recently got reset.

✓ but I can't show you now because my phone was recently reset.

'Can' should be negated to 'can't' to match the intended meaning. 'Is recently got reset' is incorrect; the correct past tense passive form is 'was recently reset'.

× I love taking photo for flowers because when I want to see I just crawl through my gallery.

✓ I love taking photos of flowers because when I want to see them I just scroll through my gallery.

'Photo' should be plural 'photos' to indicate multiple pictures. The preposition 'for' should be 'of'. 'Crawl' is incorrect verb here; 'scroll' is appropriate for navigating a gallery. Also, 'see' should be followed by 'them' to refer to photos.

× Just like someone who recently got graduate or they're celebrate something.

✓ Just like someone who recently graduated or is celebrating something.

'Got graduate' is incorrect; the correct past tense verb is 'graduated'. 'They're celebrate' is incorrect; it should be 'is celebrating' to agree with singular subject 'someone'.

× Flowers has become one of the top of the list gifts that we can get from someone.

✓ Flowers have become one of the top gifts on the list that we can get from someone.

'Flowers' is plural, so the verb should be 'have' instead of 'has'. The phrase 'top of the list gifts' is awkward; 'top gifts on the list' is more natural.