Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and unclear pronoun use. Try to use correct pronouns and more natural phrasing. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they are very colorful and brighten up any room.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes and repetitions. Try to organize your ideas clearly, use correct verb forms, and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I know many people who love flowers, especially my grandparents. They enjoy growing various flowers in their backyard garden.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid unnecessary words and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live because there is a large park in front of my house that has a variety of flowers.

提案: Your answer has several hesitations and unclear phrases. Try to speak more fluently and use correct vocabulary. Also, organize your answer logically and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers when I visit the park or in my grandparents' garden, where many different types of flowers grow.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct plural forms and more natural expressions. Also, provide specific examples to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others on different occasions, such as birthdays and wedding anniversaries.

× Yes, I love her because they are very colorful and brighten in the room.

✓ Yes, I love them because they are very colourful and brighten the room.

The pronoun 'her' is incorrect when referring to flowers, which are plural and non-human; 'them' is appropriate. Also, 'brighten in the room' is incorrect; the verb 'brighten' should be followed directly by the object 'the room'. Additionally, 'colourful' is the Canadian English spelling.

× Yes I know many many persons who loves the flower because my mostly my grand near near me my grandparents loves the flower they grow grow up the flowers in them my back garden.

✓ Yes, I know many people who love flowers because mostly my grandparents near me love flowers; they grow flowers in my backyard.

The word 'persons' is less common and 'people' is preferred for plural. 'Who loves' should be 'who love' to agree with plural 'people'. 'The flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match context. 'My grand near near me my grandparents' is unclear and corrected to 'mostly my grandparents near me'. 'Grow grow up' is redundant; 'grow' suffices. 'Them my back garden' is incorrect; 'my backyard' is appropriate.

× Of course, yes, there are a lot of flowers where I am living because of there are really vast park front of my house.

✓ Of course, yes, there are a lot of flowers where I live because there is a really vast park in front of my house.

The phrase 'where I am living' is better as 'where I live' for habitual action. 'Because of there are' is incorrect; it should be 'because there is'. 'Vast park front of my house' needs the preposition 'in front of my house'.

× Yeah, because yes, I am taking a photo, uh, photo of a lover in my daily life when I even go to the park.

✓ Yeah, because yes, I take photos of flowers in my daily life when I go to the park.

'I am taking' is present continuous, but habitual actions use simple present 'I take'. 'Photo of a lover' is incorrect; it should be 'photos of flowers'. 'When I even go' is awkward; 'when I go' is correct.

× So sometime I'm taking a photo in my home garden.

✓ Sometimes I take photos in my home garden.

'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'I'm taking' (present continuous) is inappropriate for habitual action; use simple present 'I take'. 'Photo' pluralized to 'photos' for generality.

× So there are many types of flowers grow from my grandparents.

✓ So there are many types of flowers grown by my grandparents.

'Grow' should be in past participle form 'grown' to indicate flowers cultivated by grandparents. 'From my grandparents' is better expressed as 'by my grandparents' to indicate agency.

× Yes, certainly my peoples are sending a flower to the other so different occasions.

✓ Yes, certainly my people send flowers to others on different occasions.

'Peoples' is incorrect; 'people' is the plural of person. 'Are sending' (present continuous) is less appropriate for habitual action; simple present 'send' is better. 'A flower' should be plural 'flowers'. 'To the other' should be 'to others'. 'So different occasions' corrected to 'on different occasions'.

× So sometimes they are sending flowers on the birthday and marriage anniversaries.

✓ So sometimes they send flowers on birthdays and marriage anniversaries.

'Are sending' changed to simple present 'send' for habitual action. 'On the birthday' should be 'on birthdays' (plural, no article) to indicate general occasions.