Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，且表达不够自然流畅。建议注意动词使用（如plumbing应为planting），避免重复表达，并且句子结构应更清晰。

例: Yes, I love flowers. Although I'm not good at planting them, I enjoy buying small bouquets from flower shops, especially on special occasions like my birthday or Mother's Day. They brighten up my room and make me feel happy.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，且句子不连贯。建议使用完整句子，避免语法错误，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, my mother is a big fan of planting flowers. She has transformed our balcony into a small flower garden where she grows many different kinds of flowers, such as sunflowers and lilies. It creates a beautiful and relaxing atmosphere.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，且句子结构不够清晰。建议注意时态和冠词使用，避免重复，并补充完整句子。

例: Yes, even though I live in the city center, there are still many places where I can see a variety of flowers, such as public parks and small green spaces around my apartment.

提案: 回答较好，但可以使用更多连接词使句子更连贯，同时注意主谓一致（photos brighten）。

例: Yes, I often take photos of beautiful flowers, especially after it rains. I think it's a great way to capture natural beauty in daily life, and looking at these photos always brightens my mood.

提案: 回答中有重复和语气词，表达不够简洁。建议减少填充词，使用更准确的表达，并注意句子结构。

例: Yes, sending flowers is a common way to express appreciation in my country. People usually send bouquets when visiting someone in the hospital or to say thank you.

× Pretty sure umm although I'm not good at plumbing them, I still like to buy some small bouquets in a flower shop, especially on some special occasions like my birthday or Mother's Day and it just makes just makes my room feel.

✓ Pretty sure, umm, although I'm not good at planting them, I still like to buy some small bouquets in a flower shop, especially on some special occasions like my birthday or Mother's Day, and it just makes my room feel nice.

原句中“plumbing”是“管道维修”的意思，应该用“planting”表示“种植”，这里用错了动词的现在分词形式。

× Hmm I think my mother's is a big fan of planting flowers. She transformed our balcony into a small umm flower garden and she where she plants a lot of diverse kinds of flowers like sunflowers. Lilith it creates.

✓ Hmm, I think my mother is a big fan of planting flowers. She transformed our balcony into a small flower garden where she plants a lot of diverse kinds of flowers like sunflowers and lilies.

原句中“my mother's”错误地使用了所有格形式，应该用主格“my mother”。另外，“she where she plants”结构重复且错误，应合并为“where she plants”。“Lilith it creates”不通顺，应改为“lilies”。

× Sure, although I'm I'm currently live in the city center, there's still some place where I can see a variety range of flowers like public park or some small greening space around my apartment. Also where?

✓ Sure, although I currently live in the city center, there are still some places where I can see a variety of flowers like public parks or some small green spaces around my apartment.

原句中“I'm I'm currently live”时态和结构错误，应为“I currently live”。“there's some place”主谓不一致，应为“there are some places”。“a variety range”搭配错误，应为“a variety of”。“public park”应为复数“public parks”，与前文复数保持一致。

× Sure, I will take a photo of a beautiful flower, especially after rain. I think it's a good way to capture this natural beauty in our daily life and looking at these photos brighten our mood.

✓ Sure, I will take a photo of a beautiful flower, especially after the rain. I think it's a good way to capture this natural beauty in our daily life, and looking at these photos brightens our mood.

“after rain”缺少定冠词，应为“after the rain”。“looking at these photos brighten”主谓不一致，动词应为第三人称单数“brightens”。

× Yes, umm, sending flowers to others is a good way to uh, express your appreciation to others. Like in my country people usually umm, send to others a bouquet when they have a hospital visit or just saying thank you.

✓ Yes, umm, sending flowers to others is a good way to express your appreciation. In my country, people usually send a bouquet to others when they visit someone in the hospital or just to say thank you.

“send to others a bouquet”语序不正确，应为“send a bouquet to others”。“when they have a hospital visit”表达不自然，应改为“when they visit someone in the hospital”。“just saying thank you”应改为“just to say thank you”，保持动词不定式形式。