Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good but could be improved by correcting grammar and making sentences more natural. For example, instead of 'so that it pleasant and refreshing atmosphere', say 'because they create a pleasant and refreshing atmosphere'. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they add beauty and colour to any environment. For instance, having fresh flowers at home creates a pleasant and refreshing atmosphere. Moreover, their lovely fragrance often uplifts my mood.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use complete sentences and clarify your ideas. For example, say 'My aunt is a patient gardener who spends a lot of time cultivating different types of flowers in her garden because she finds it relaxing and joyful.' Avoid fragmented sentences and repetition.

例: Yes, I know someone who loves flowers. My aunt is a patient gardener who spends a lot of time cultivating different types of flowers in her garden because she finds it relaxing and joyful. The beauty they bring to her home is truly wonderful.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. For example, say 'especially in public parks and residential gardens' and 'I enjoy seeing these flowers because they add beauty and a refreshing atmosphere to the area.' Also, try to use linking words like 'for instance' or 'such as' to improve coherence.

例: Yes, there are quite a lot of flowers where I live, especially in public parks and residential gardens. For instance, during spring, many people plant colourful flowers such as tulips and roses, which really brighten up the neighbourhood. I enjoy seeing these flowers because they add beauty and a refreshing atmosphere to the area.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and avoiding repetition. For example, say 'I often take photos of flowers in my daily life because I find their colours and shapes very beautiful.' Also, use linking words like 'for example' appropriately and ensure subject-verb agreement.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers in my daily life because I find their colours and shapes very beautiful. For example, when I visit a park or garden, I like to capture different kinds of flowers to share with my friends or keep as memories. This also helps me appreciate nature more.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use complete sentences and clarify your ideas. For example, say 'People in my country often send flowers to others on special occasions such as birthdays, weddings, and anniversaries. Flowers are seen as a thoughtful and beautiful way to express emotions like love.' Avoid unclear words like 'graduated' and improve sentence structure.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others on special occasions such as birthdays, weddings, and anniversaries. Flowers are seen as a thoughtful and beautiful way to express emotions like love. For example, it is common to send roses to loved ones on Valentine's Day.

× I enjoy having a fresh flower at home so that it pleasant and refreshing atmosphere.

✓ I enjoy having a fresh flower at home so that it creates a pleasant and refreshing atmosphere.

The original sentence lacks a verb to link the subject 'it' with the description 'pleasant and refreshing atmosphere'. Adding the verb 'creates' correctly forms the predicate, making the sentence grammatically complete and clear.

× Additionally, flowers often have lovely fragrance and that can uplift my mood.

✓ Additionally, flowers often have a lovely fragrance and that can uplift my mood.

The noun 'fragrance' is countable in this context and requires the article 'a' before it. Omitting the article leads to incorrect noun usage. Adding 'a' corrects the noun phrase.

× Yes, I do know someone who loves loving.

✓ Yes, I do know someone who loves flowers.

The word 'loving' is incorrect here; the intended noun is 'flowers'. Using 'loving' (a verb or adjective) instead of the noun 'flowers' causes confusion and grammatical error.

× She spent a lot of time cultivating different type of flower her garden because she find it relaxing and joy.

✓ She spent a lot of time cultivating different types of flowers in her garden because she finds it relaxing and joyful.

Several errors: 'type' should be plural 'types' to agree with 'different'; 'flower' should be plural 'flowers'; missing preposition 'in' before 'her garden'; 'find' should be 'finds' to agree with singular subject 'she'; 'joy' should be adjective 'joyful' to describe the feeling.

× Beauty. They bring to at home, they bring to at her home.

✓ They bring beauty to her home.

The original sentences are fragmented and contain unnecessary words 'to at'. Combining into one clear sentence with correct word order and prepositions improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, there are quite a lot of flowers where I live, especially in public park and residential gardens.

✓ Yes, there are quite a lot of flowers where I live, especially in public parks and residential gardens.

The noun 'park' should be plural 'parks' to match 'residential gardens' and to indicate multiple locations. This corrects the noun agreement and prepositional usage.

× I enjoy seeing this flower because they add a beauty and refreshing atmosphere to the area.

✓ I enjoy seeing these flowers because they add beauty and a refreshing atmosphere to the area.

'This flower' is singular but 'they' is plural; changing to 'these flowers' matches the plural pronoun. Also, 'a beauty' is incorrect; 'beauty' is uncountable here and should not have 'a'. Adding 'a' before 'refreshing atmosphere' is correct.

× Yes, I often take photo of flower in my daily life because I find their colors and shape very beautiful.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of flowers in my daily life because I find their colors and shapes very beautiful.

'Photo' and 'flower' should be plural to match 'their colors and shape'. Also, 'shape' should be plural 'shapes' to agree with 'colors' and plural 'flowers'.

× For example, when I visit a park or visit gardens, I like to capture different kind of flowers to share with my friends or keep as a memory.

✓ For example, when I visit a park or gardens, I like to capture different kinds of flowers to share with my friends or keep as a memory.

'Different kind' should be plural 'different kinds' to agree with 'flowers'. Also, 'visit a park or visit gardens' is redundant; 'visit a park or gardens' is sufficient.

× It also help me to appreciate nature.

✓ It also helps me to appreciate nature.

The verb 'help' should be in third person singular present tense 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'It'.

× Otherwise, such as birthday, weddings and anniversary, flowers are seem to be thoughtful and a beautiful way to express emotions like love graduated or something.

✓ On special occasions, such as birthdays, weddings, and anniversaries, flowers seem to be a thoughtful and beautiful way to express emotions like love, gratitude, or something similar.

'Otherwise' is incorrect here; 'On special occasions' is appropriate. 'Birthday' and 'anniversary' should be plural. 'Are seem' is incorrect; 'seem' alone is correct. 'A beautiful way' needs the article 'a'. 'Graduated' is incorrect; 'gratitude' is the correct word. Added commas for clarity.

× For example, it is common to send roses to love on the Valentine.

✓ For example, it is common to send roses to loved ones on Valentine's Day.

'To love' is incorrect; it should be 'to loved ones' to indicate recipients. 'The Valentine' should be 'Valentine's Day' to correctly name the holiday.