Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences simpler and more direct. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. For example, say 'Yes, I love flowers because they make me feel relaxed and calm. I enjoy picking them up when I see colorful ones.'

例: Yes, I love flowers because they make me feel relaxed and calm. Whenever I see colorful flowers, I like to pick them up and enjoy their beauty.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using linking words. Also, correct the grammar such as 'good habits' should be 'a good habit'. For example, 'Yes, my brother loves flowers just like me. He often picks them and keeps them nearby because it helps him relax and feel calm, which is a good habit.'

例: Yes, my brother loves flowers just like me. He often picks them and keeps them nearby because it helps him relax and feel calm, which is a good habit.

提案: Your answer has good content but needs better sentence structure and linking words. Also, correct grammar like 'there is a lot of flowers' should be 'there are a lot of flowers'. For example, 'Yes, there are many beautiful and colorful flowers near my home in a garden. Whenever I feel stressed, I go there to relax and feel happy.'

例: Yes, there are many beautiful and colorful flowers near my home in a garden. Whenever I feel stressed, I go there to relax and feel happy.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to simplify and use linking words. For example, 'I don't take photos of flowers every day, but when I visit the garden, I enjoy photographing colorful flowers because it captures the happiness I feel.'

例: I don't take photos of flowers every day, but when I visit the garden, I enjoy photographing colorful flowers because it captures the happiness I feel.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer sentence structure and grammar. Avoid redundancy and use linking words. For example, 'Yes, in my country, people often send flowers to each other during festivals like Tihar. We use flowers to express happiness and celebrate.'

例: Yes, in my country, people often send flowers to each other during festivals like Tihar. We use flowers to express happiness and celebrate.

× I love flowers and my enraptures moment and when I see flowers I love to pick them up just to feel relaxed and calm myself when I see the colorful.

✓ I love flowers and my enraptured moments, and when I see flowers, I love to pick them up just to feel relaxed and calm myself when I see the colorful ones.

The phrase 'my enraptures moment' is incorrect. 'Enraptures' is a verb, but here an adjective or past participle is needed to describe 'moment'. The correct form is 'enraptured moments'. Also, 'the colorful' is incomplete; it should be 'the colorful ones' to refer to flowers. The sentence also needs commas for clarity.

× He's very fond of flowers. He wants to pick them up and keep them nearby just to relax and feel calm, which is very good habits.

✓ He's very fond of flowers. He wants to pick them up and keep them nearby just to relax and feel calm, which are very good habits.

The phrase 'which is very good habits' is incorrect because 'habits' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue related to quantifiers.

× Yes, there is a lot of flowers nearby my home, there is a garden, there are many beautiful flowers, colorful flowers, which gives me very calm.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of flowers near my home; there is a garden with many beautiful, colorful flowers, which makes me feel very calm.

'There is a lot of flowers' is incorrect because 'flowers' is plural, so 'there are' should be used. Also, 'nearby my home' should be 'near my home'. The phrase 'which gives me very calm' is incorrect; it should be 'which makes me feel very calm' for proper expression.

× When I get any stress over something I really love, go to go there and be happy.

✓ When I get stressed about something, I really love to go there and be happy.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. 'Get any stress over something' should be 'get stressed about something'. 'Go to go there' is redundant; it should be 'go there'. The sentence structure needs to be corrected for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Not in a daily life, but when I go to the garden, I really love taking photos of many colorful flowers because it's I feel like it captures the happiness when I see the flowers and the colorful of that flower.

✓ Not in daily life, but when I go to the garden, I really love taking photos of many colorful flowers because I feel like it captures the happiness when I see the flowers and the colors of those flowers.

'Not in a daily life' should be 'Not in daily life' as 'daily life' is uncountable. The phrase 'it's I feel like' is incorrect and should be 'I feel like'. 'The colorful of that flower' is incorrect; it should be 'the colors of those flowers' to correctly express the idea.

× Yes, in my country people often send flowers to each other and occasions like and a festival like the say Tihar, we love celebrating with flowers.

✓ Yes, in my country, people often send flowers to each other on occasions and festivals like Tihar; we love celebrating with flowers.

The phrase 'and occasions like and a festival like the say Tihar' is ungrammatical and confusing. It should be 'on occasions and festivals like Tihar'. Also, commas and semicolons are needed for clarity. The preposition 'on' is used with occasions and festivals.

× We really use that flowers as a happiness.

✓ We really use those flowers as a symbol of happiness.

'That flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'those flowers' to refer to plural items. Also, 'as a happiness' is incorrect; 'as a symbol of happiness' or 'to express happiness' is more appropriate. The quantifier and article usage need correction.