Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is quite natural and clear, but it can be more effective by avoiding redundancy and structuring your response better. Try to start with a direct answer, then add specific details using linking words to make it coherent and concise.

例: I don't usually buy flowers for myself, but I appreciate receiving them as gifts. For example, I especially like lilies and sunflowers because of their vibrant colours and pleasant fragrance.

提案: Your answer is relevant but somewhat repetitive and incomplete. To improve, avoid repeating phrases like 'a lot', complete your sentences fully, and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Many people enjoy flowers because they brighten up a home. For instance, my mother loves flowers, so my father often brings her fresh bouquets to make her happy.

提案: Your answer contains some repetition and minor grammatical errors. To improve, avoid repeating phrases like 'in general', use correct grammar, and organise your ideas clearly with linking words.

例: There are many plants in my house that bloom flowers, which I can see from my window. However, in the surrounding area, there are mostly green trees and fewer flowers.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be clearer and more fluent. Avoid awkward phrases like 'surely good looking flower' and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I don't often take photos of flowers daily, but if I see a beautiful flower with a nice background, I enjoy trying photography to capture the moment.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by making it more concise and using linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid unnecessary words like 'just is'.

例: Yes, in India, people often send flowers on special occasions such as birthdays and anniversaries because flowers symbolize health, beauty, and new beginnings.

× I do like when somebody might get me flowers, but I'm not the one to buy it on my own for myself.

✓ I do like it when somebody might get me flowers, but I'm not the one to buy them on my own for myself.

The sentence is missing the preposition 'it' after 'like' to correctly introduce the clause. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to 'flowers' which is plural. This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I know that my mom loves flowers a lot so my dad usually tries to bring a new bunch every.

✓ I know that my mom loves flowers a lot so my dad usually tries to bring a new bunch every time.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'every' which is incomplete. Adding 'time' completes the phrase 'every time'. This correction addresses the incomplete phrase and clarifies the meaning.

× We have a lot of plants in our house and they do draw a lot of flowers so I can see it right outside my window.

✓ We have a lot of plants in our house and they do produce a lot of flowers so I can see them right outside my window.

The verb 'draw' is incorrectly used here; 'produce' is more appropriate when referring to plants and flowers. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to 'flowers' which is plural. This correction improves verb usage and pronoun agreement.

× But in generally in general there are not a lot of flowers in the surrounding.

✓ But generally, there are not a lot of flowers in the surroundings.

The phrase 'in generally in general' is redundant and incorrect. 'Generally' alone suffices. Also, 'surrounding' should be plural 'surroundings' to refer to the area around. This correction improves preposition and word choice.

× I do not usually take photos of flowers in my daily life, but if I am somewhere and there is a surely good looking flower and the scenery behind all the supports the view then I do like to try my hand at photography.

✓ I do not usually take photos of flowers in my daily life, but if I am somewhere and there is a surely good-looking flower and the scenery behind also supports the view, then I do like to try my hand at photography.

The phrase 'all the supports the view' is incorrect; it should be 'also supports the view'. Also, 'good looking' should be hyphenated as 'good-looking' when used as an adjective before a noun. This correction improves clarity and adjective usage.