Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I find flowers very beautiful" instead of "I find the flower was very very beautiful." Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, and keep sentences concise.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they are very beautiful and having them in my room makes me feel relaxed and happy. For instance, I often buy fresh flowers to decorate my room, which brightens up the space.

提案: Focus on correct verb tenses and sentence structure. Use linking words like "and" or "so" to connect ideas. Be specific and clear in your descriptions.

例: Yes, my sister loves flowers a lot. She often buys fresh flowers to decorate her room, which makes the space feel more welcoming. Whenever I visit her, I can always smell the lovely scent of the flowers.

提案: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use plural forms correctly and link ideas logically. Provide specific examples and explain their impact.

例: Yes, there are many kinds of flowers in my community, such as roses and tulips. I believe the council arranges the flowers well, which helps to keep the area colourful and attractive.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural by improving phrasing and grammar. Use linking words to explain reasons smoothly.

例: To be honest, I don't often take photos of flowers because I usually have to go to class and don't have enough time to stop and take pictures.

提案: Clarify your ideas and use appropriate vocabulary. Explain cultural reasons clearly and use linking words to contrast ideas.

例: In my country, people don't usually send flowers to each other because flowers often symbolize love. However, couples often give flowers on special occasions like birthdays and anniversaries.

× I find the flower was very very beautiful and I enjoy having them around my room.

✓ I find the flowers are very beautiful and I enjoy having them around my room.

The original sentence incorrectly mixes singular 'flower' with plural 'them'. Since 'them' refers to multiple flowers, 'flower' should be plural 'flowers'. Also, 'was' should be 'are' to match the present tense context.

× For example, I like to buy some flowers to dedicate my room and which made me feel more relaxed and happy.

✓ For example, I like to buy some flowers to decorate my room, which makes me feel more relaxed and happy.

The verb 'dedicate' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'decorate' to mean making the room look nicer. Also, 'which made me' should be 'which makes me' to maintain present tense consistency.

× Yes, my sister loved flower lot, she often buying fresh flower to dedicating standing room which makes the space feel more welcoming and whenever I visit her room I can always smell the lovely scent of flowers.

✓ Yes, my sister loves flowers a lot; she often buys fresh flowers to decorate her standing room, which makes the space feel more welcoming, and whenever I visit her room, I can always smell the lovely scent of flowers.

'Loved' should be 'loves' to match present tense. 'Flower lot' should be 'flowers a lot' for correct plural and expression. 'Buying' should be 'buys' for subject-verb agreement. 'Fresh flower' should be 'fresh flowers' for plural. 'To dedicating' should be 'to decorate' for correct verb form. 'Standing room' is unclear but kept as is assuming it means a specific room.

× Yes, them and many kind of flowers in my community such as rose and tulips.

✓ Yes, there are many kinds of flowers in my community such as roses and tulips.

'Them' is incorrect here; 'there are' is the correct phrase to indicate existence. 'Many kind' should be 'many kinds' to match plural. 'Rose' should be plural 'roses' to match 'tulips'.

× I believe the council arranged the flower very well and which helped me to keep the air colorful and attractive.

✓ I believe the council arranges the flowers very well, which helps to keep the area colourful and attractive.

'Arranged' should be 'arranges' to match present tense. 'Flower' should be plural 'flowers'. 'Which helped me to keep the air colorful' is incorrect; 'which helps to keep the area colourful' is clearer and grammatically correct. 'Air colorful' is unnatural; 'area colourful' is better.

× To be honest, I don't really take photos of flowers because I need to go to the class sometime so I don't have enough time to stop and take photos.

✓ To be honest, I don't really take photos of flowers because I sometimes need to go to class, so I don't have enough time to stop and take photos.

'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Go to the class' should be 'go to class' as 'class' is uncountable here.

× In my country, people don't send flowers to each other usually because flowers usually sympathize the love soul.

✓ In my country, people don't usually send flowers to each other because flowers usually symbolize love and affection.

'Usually' should come before the verb 'send'. 'Sympathize the love soul' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'symbolize love and affection'.

× But couples frequently give flowers on special occasions such as birthdays, anniversaries.

✓ However, couples frequently give flowers on special occasions such as birthdays and anniversaries.

Starting a sentence with 'But' is informal; 'However' is more appropriate. Also, 'birthdays, anniversaries' should be connected with 'and' for proper listing.