Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repeating words and make your sentences clearer. Also, give a complete reason why you like roses, not just that they are beautiful. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they bring joy whenever I see them bloom. For example, I especially like roses because they are not only beautiful but also have a pleasant fragrance that brightens my day.

提案: Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Be specific about what kinds of exotic flowers your dad plants. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, my dad loves flowers. He enjoys planting various kinds, especially exotic flowers like orchids and hibiscus, which he finds fascinating because of their unique colors and shapes.

提案: Be careful with word choice and sentence completion. Instead of 'process', you might mean 'roses'. Also, complete your sentences and give specific examples of exotic flowers. Use linking words to organize your ideas.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. We have roses, hibiscus, and other fragrant flowers. Additionally, we have exotic flowers like orchids, which are quite popular in our area.

提案: Try to avoid repeating words and clarify your ideas. Use linking words to connect your sentences and explain when you take photos more clearly.

例: Not really, because I have a busy schedule and don't have time to take pictures of flowers every day. However, when I am off duty, I usually take the opportunity to photograph flowers during my free time.

提案: Complete your sentences and avoid repetition. Be more specific about occasions when people send flowers. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers, especially lovers who want to express their affection. Besides romantic occasions, flowers are also sent during celebrations like birthdays and anniversaries.

× And one of it, one of them is my dad.

✓ And one of them is my dad.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect here because it refers to a singular noun, but 'one of them' refers to a plural group. The correct pronoun is 'them' to match the plural antecedent.

× and also other people want to express their love to their.

✓ and also other people want to express their love to others.

The sentence ends with 'their' which is a possessive pronoun and requires a noun to complete the phrase. Replacing 'their' with 'others' correctly completes the sentence meaning.

× I don't have time taking pictures of flowers every day

✓ I don't have time to take pictures of flowers every day

After 'have time', the correct structure is 'to' + base verb, not the gerund form. Therefore, 'to take' is correct instead of 'taking'.

× I like the Rose flower because aside from from it's from it's beautiful.

✓ I like the rose flower because aside from its beauty.

The phrase 'aside from from it's from it's beautiful' is incorrect and redundant. 'Aside from its beauty' is a clearer and grammatically correct expression. Also, 'it's' (it is) is incorrect here; the possessive pronoun 'its' is needed.

× he's really into planting the exotic ones and I don't know what.

✓ he's really into planting the exotic ones and I don't know what they are.

The phrase 'I don't know what' is incomplete. Adding 'they are' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.