Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid hesitation and repetition, and structure your response clearly by stating your opinion first, then explaining it with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I don't particularly love flowers, but I appreciate receiving them as a token of gratitude because it shows that someone has put effort into expressing their feelings.

提案: Your answer has some unclear parts and unnecessary hesitation. Try to avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Also, ensure your supporting details are specific and relevant. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, my sister loves flowers. She has a backyard where she grows many different kinds of flowers and takes care of them every morning.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains some errors. Avoid vague statements and incomplete sentences. Be specific about the place you mention and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: No, there aren't many flowers where I live. However, about an hour's drive away, there is a famous flower market where people can find a wide variety of flowers to choose from.

提案: Try to avoid repetition and hesitation. Make your sentences clearer and more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific details about why you take photos and how you share them.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers in my sister's backyard because she grows many beautiful varieties. I usually share these pictures in my WhatsApp group to send greetings to my friends.

提案: Avoid hesitation and repetition to make your answer more fluent. Use clear and specific language to explain why people send flowers, and connect your ideas with linking words.

例: Yes, sending flowers is a common practice in my country. People often give flowers as a way to show gratitude and express their happiness during special occasions.

× someone give me a flower as a token of appreciation

✓ someone gives me a flower as a token of appreciation

The verb 'give' should be in the third person singular present tense 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'someone'. This is a subject-verb agreement rule in English.

× they put a lot of efforts

✓ they put a lot of effort

The noun 'effort' is uncountable and should not be pluralized as 'efforts' in this context. Use 'effort' to indicate the amount of work or energy put in.

× she has grown by herself

✓ she has grown them by herself

The verb 'grow' in present perfect requires an object here. Adding 'them' clarifies that she has grown the flowers herself.

× try to be voted to them every morning

✓ try to be devoted to them every morning

The phrase 'be voted to' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'be devoted to', meaning to dedicate time or care to something.

× there are lot of laws where I live

✓ there are lots of flowers where I live

The original sentence likely intended 'lots of flowers' but mistakenly wrote 'laws'. Also, 'lots of' is the correct quantifier for plural countable nouns like 'flowers'.

× It is approximately an hour drive from my home

✓ It is approximately an hour's drive from my home

The phrase 'an hour drive' should be possessive 'an hour's drive' to correctly express the duration of the drive.

× it is, I believe a hub of all the flowers you can you can get to choose your favorite ones

✓ it is, I believe, a hub for all the flowers where you can choose your favorite ones

The sentence has redundancy and awkward phrasing. Removing repeated words and restructuring improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I like to take picture of everyone of whichever I find beautiful

✓ I like to take pictures of every one that I find beautiful

'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' because multiple photos are taken. 'Everyone' should be 'every one' to refer to each flower individually, and 'whichever' is replaced with 'that' for clarity.

× I like to send it in my WhatsApp group as to, uh, send greeting

✓ I like to send them to my WhatsApp group as greetings

The preposition 'in' should be 'to' when sending something to a group. Also, 'send greeting' should be plural 'send greetings' for natural expression.

× whenever someone put a lot of thought and effort to greet others

✓ whenever someone puts a lot of thought and effort into greeting others

The verb 'put' should be in third person singular present tense 'puts' to agree with 'someone'. Also, the correct preposition is 'into' after 'effort' when followed by a gerund.