Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "enjoy of flowers" and "they have so good smell." Try to use correct prepositions and more natural expressions. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly and limit your answer to about 4-5 sentences.

例: Yes, I really enjoy flowers because they are beautiful and smell wonderful. I think decorating rooms or events with flowers is a great idea. Overall, flowers have a magical quality that brightens up any space.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes like "biggest lover of flowers" and "I am also flower lovers." Try to form complete sentences with correct subject-verb agreement. Also, provide more specific details and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, my mother loves flowers very much; she has a beautiful garden where she grows many different kinds. I also love flowers, and my biggest dream is to have a garden like hers one day.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains hesitations and some unclear vocabulary like "Whaley flowers." Try to speak more fluently and use precise vocabulary. Also, use linking words to organize your answer better and avoid filler words like "uh."

例: Yes, I live in the countryside where I have a big garden. There are many beautiful and different kinds of flowers, such as roses, lilies, and some wildflowers.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases like "photo Calorie" and "when they plum." Try to use correct verb tenses and vocabulary. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

例: Yes, I really enjoy taking photos of flowers. My photo gallery is full of flower pictures. One of my favorite flowers is the lily, and I always take pictures when they bloom.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like "Girlfriends in the mother says." Try to use correct sentence structures and clarify your ideas. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: Yes, sending flowers is common in my country, especially on birthdays and Valentine's Day. Also, boyfriends often give flowers to their girlfriends on ordinary days, and mothers receive flowers frequently as well.

× Yes, I really enjoy of flowers.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy flowers.

The verb 'enjoy' is directly followed by the object without a preposition. Using 'of' after 'enjoy' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'enjoy' + noun.

× They're so beautiful and they have so good smell.

✓ They're so beautiful and they have such a good smell.

The phrase 'so good smell' is incorrect because 'smell' is a noun and needs a determiner. 'Such a good smell' is the correct form to express this idea.

× It's so it's great idea to decorate rooms or some events with flowers.

✓ It's a great idea to decorate rooms or some events with flowers.

The sentence contains a repetition 'It's so it's' which is incorrect. Also, 'great idea' requires the article 'a' before it.

× So I think they're really magic.

✓ So I think they're really magical.

'Magic' is a noun here, but the intended meaning is an adjective describing the flowers. The correct adjective form is 'magical'.

× my mother is biggest lover of flowers,

✓ my mother is the biggest lover of flowers,

The superlative adjective 'biggest' requires the definite article 'the' before it.

× she has beautiful garden and planting so much flowers,

✓ she has a beautiful garden and plants so many flowers,

'Planting' is a gerund and does not fit here; the correct verb form is 'plants' to agree with the subject. Also, 'so much flowers' is incorrect; 'many' is used with countable nouns like 'flowers'. Additionally, 'a' is needed before 'beautiful garden'.

× I am also flower lovers and my biggest dream is to be.

✓ I am also a flower lover and my biggest dream is to be one.

'Lovers' is plural but the subject 'I' is singular, so it should be 'a flower lover'. The sentence is incomplete; adding 'one' clarifies the meaning.

× there's, there's, there are so many beautiful and different kind of flowers,

✓ there are so many beautiful and different kinds of flowers,

'There are' is correct for plural 'flowers'. 'Kind' should be plural 'kinds' because it refers to multiple types, and 'of' is needed after 'kinds'.

× there are so many beautiful and different kind of flowers,

✓ there are so many beautiful and different kinds of flowers,

When referring to multiple types, 'kinds' should be plural and followed by 'of'.

× some Whaley flowers.

✓ some valley flowers.

'Whaley' is likely a mispronunciation or misspelling; 'valley' is a common adjective for flowers found in valleys.

× Yes, I really enjoyed taking photos of flowers on my photo Calorie is really full with flower pictures.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking photos of flowers; my photo gallery is really full of flower pictures.

'Enjoyed' is past tense but the context suggests a habitual action, so present tense 'enjoy' is appropriate. 'Calorie' is a mishearing or typo for 'gallery'. 'Full with' should be 'full of'.

× One of my favorite flower is Lily

✓ One of my favorite flowers is the lily

'One of' is followed by a plural noun 'flowers'. Also, 'Lily' as a flower name should be preceded by 'the'.

× and when they plum I always taking pictures.

✓ and when they bloom I always take pictures.

'Plum' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'bloom'. Also, 'I always taking' is incorrect; it should be 'I always take'.

× especially in the birthdays or Valentine's Day.

✓ especially on birthdays or Valentine's Day.

'In the birthdays' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on' for days. Also, 'birthdays' is plural without 'the'.

× Also normal days of boyfriends gift flowers to their girlfriend.

✓ Also, on normal days, boyfriends give flowers to their girlfriends.

The sentence lacks prepositions and correct verb forms. 'Gift' should be 'give' as a verb. 'Girlfriend' should be plural to match 'boyfriends'.

× Girlfriends in the mother says this is really often.

✓ Girlfriends and mothers say this happens really often.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Correct pronouns and subjects are needed. 'In the mother' is incorrect; 'mothers' is likely intended.