Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan jelas, serta hindari kalimat yang tidak lengkap atau membingungkan.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they have many colorful petals and pleasant fragrances. I also enjoy their natural beauty, which can make people feel happy and relaxed.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan ada pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas untuk menjelaskan teman Anda yang menyukai bunga dan mungkin berbisnis dengan bunga.

例: Yes, many of my friends love flowers. Some of them even grow flowers and sell them as a business.

提案: Jawaban Anda cukup baik tapi ada kesalahan tata bahasa dan penggunaan kata. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih tepat dan jelas untuk menjelaskan lokasi dan pengalaman Anda.

例: Not really. I live in a lowland area where there are few flowers, but I have visited highland places where many flowers grow, and I really enjoyed that.

提案: Jawaban Anda mengandung pengulangan dan kesalahan tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih singkat dan jelas dengan struktur yang benar.

例: Yes, I take a lot of photos of flowers because I love them. Whenever I see different kinds of flowers, I always take pictures of them.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan ada kesalahan penggunaan kata. Jelaskan dengan lebih tepat apakah orang sering mengirim bunga dan tentang bunga impor dan lokal.

例: No, people in my country don't often send flowers to others. We do import some flowers like tulips and peonies, but we also grow many flowers locally.

× I love it because of the so many colorful petals and the fragrances and also just enjoy the beauty of it.

✓ I love them because of the many colorful petals and the fragrances and also just enjoy their beauty.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used to refer to 'flowers' which is plural, so 'them' should be used instead. Also, 'the so many' is incorrect; it should be 'the many' or just 'many'. The phrase 'beauty of it' should be 'beauty of them' to match plural flowers.

× Make can make us and win from.

✓ They can make us happy and help us win.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It lacks a subject and proper verb structure. The correction provides a clear subject 'They' referring to flowers and a meaningful predicate.

× They even make they they even become flourish and selling flowers.

✓ They even make them flourish and sell flowers.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrectly repeated and used instead of 'them'. Also, 'become flourish' is incorrect; it should be 'flourish'. The verb 'selling' should be in base form 'sell' after 'make'.

× I live in quiet low places and I've been to higher places where flowers are grown so many and I enjoy this.

✓ I live in quite low places and I've been to higher places where many flowers are grown and I enjoy this.

'quiet' should be 'quite' as an adverb modifying 'low'. The phrase 'flowers are grown so many' is incorrect; it should be 'many flowers are grown'.

× I love flower that much that I every time I saw flowers, every time I see flowers, I took photos everywhere, every kind of flowers.

✓ I love flowers so much that every time I see flowers, I take photos of every kind of flower everywhere.

'flower' should be plural 'flowers'. The phrase 'every time I saw flowers' mixes past and present tense; it should be consistent in present tense 'every time I see flowers'. 'I took photos' should be 'I take photos' to match present tense. 'every kind of flowers' should be 'every kind of flower'.

× No, we don't. We don't already save flowers from other countries also, like tulips and ponies and so many others.

✓ No, we don't. We already import flowers from other countries, like tulips and peonies and many others.

'We don't already save' is incorrect; 'save' is not the correct verb here. The intended meaning is likely 'import'. Also, 'ponies' is a misspelling of 'peonies'.