Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Паспрабуйце зрабіць адказ больш сціснутым і натуральным, пазбягаючы паўтораў і лішніх слоў. Напрыклад, замест "I guess every girl likes receiving flowers if you're talking about like bouquet and romantic way" лепш сказаць прама і коратка.

例: Yes, I love flowers, especially sunflowers, tulips, and roses. I think many people enjoy receiving bouquets as a romantic gesture from someone they care about.

提案: Паспрабуйце выкарыстоўваць больш дакладныя і лагічныя злучальныя словы, каб зрабіць адказ больш звязным. Таксама ўдакладніце некаторыя факты, напрыклад, "pawns" магчыма памылка.

例: My aunt, who is my mother's sister, has her own house with a garden where she grows many flowers such as roses, tulips, and sunflowers.

提案: Пазбягайце паўтораў і граматычных памылак, выкарыстоўвайце злучальныя словы для лепшай лагічнай структуры. Напрыклад, "my hometown is Minsk, which is a clean city with many vibrant parks full of trees and flowers."

例: My hometown is Minsk, which is a clean city with many vibrant parks full of trees and flowers. Flowers grow along the roads and in the parks, making the city very beautiful.

提案: Старайцеся рабіць адказ больш сціснутым і пазбягаць паўтораў. Выкарыстоўвайце злучальныя словы для лагічнай сувязі і ўдакладняйце, напрыклад, "Although I don't take photos daily, I enjoy photographing beautiful flower beds or bouquets when I see them."

例: Although I don't take photos daily, I enjoy photographing beautiful flower beds or bouquets when I see them. I appreciate their beauty and often share these pictures on my social media.

提案: Пазбягайце граматычных памылак і няпоўных сказаў. Удакладняйце і структуруйце адказ, выкарыстоўваючы злучальныя словы. Напрыклад, "In our culture, it is common to give flowers on special occasions such as birthdays, anniversaries, and weddings."

例: In our culture, it is common to give flowers on special occasions such as birthdays, anniversaries, and especially weddings. For example, the bride usually receives bouquets from every guest as part of the tradition.

× My aunt is sister of my mom, she has her own house and her own garden where she grows flowers.

✓ My aunt is the sister of my mom; she has her own house and her own garden where she grows flowers.

The phrase 'sister of my mom' requires the definite article 'the' before 'sister' to specify which sister is being referred to. Also, the original sentence is a run-on; separating it with a semicolon improves clarity.

× She has many different for example roses, pawns, tulips.

✓ She has many different flowers, for example, roses, peonies, and tulips.

The original sentence is missing the noun 'flowers' after 'many different'. Also, 'pawns' is likely a misspelling of 'peonies', a type of flower. Including the noun clarifies what 'many different' refers to.

× Also I guess there was also sunflowers like I said that I like them.

✓ Also, I guess there are also sunflowers, like I said, that I like them.

The verb 'was' is singular past tense, but 'sunflowers' is plural and the context is present. Changing 'was' to 'are' corrects subject-verb agreement and tense.

× Yes, my hometown is Minsk and we our city is very clear and there are many parks, vibrant parks with a lot of trees and also many flowers.

✓ Yes, my hometown is Minsk, and our city is very clean; there are many vibrant parks with a lot of trees and also many flowers.

The phrase 'we our city' is incorrect; it should be 'our city'. Also, 'clear' is not the correct adjective for describing a city; 'clean' is appropriate here.

× We have flowers growing near the road in parks, how I said before and yes, it means there are many flowers.

✓ We have flowers growing near the roads in parks, as I said before, and yes, it means there are many flowers.

The phrase 'how I said before' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'as I said before'. Also, 'road' should be plural 'roads' to match the general statement.

× So then yes of course, because I really appreciate all this beauty in our world and I like taking aesthetic pictures and then I like post them on my social media like example.

✓ So then yes, of course, because I really appreciate all this beauty in our world, and I like taking aesthetic pictures and then I like to post them on my social media, for example.

The phrase 'like example' is incorrect; it should be 'for example'. Also, 'like post them' should be 'like to post them' to correctly use the verb after 'like'.

× On the wedding day bride receives book from every guest and it's our tradition.

✓ On the wedding day, the bride receives a bouquet from every guest, and it's our tradition.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'bride' and the indefinite article 'a' before 'book'. Also, 'book' is likely a typo for 'bouquet', which fits the context.

× Also it's very popular to get flowers from your friends and from your.

✓ Also, it's very popular to get flowers from your friends and family.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'from your.' It needs a noun to complete the phrase, such as 'family' or 'relatives', to make sense.