Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more coherent and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they are vibrant and romantic. For example, having roses or lilies at home not only beautifies the environment but also helps me relax after a long day. Moreover, flowers can brighten a room and create a positive atmosphere.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, my grandma loves flowers very much. She often spends time in her garden planting different kinds of flowers, such as sunflowers. She takes great care of them because she finds the process very relaxing and satisfying.

提案: Your answer contains several grammar and vocabulary errors. Pay attention to correct word forms and sentence structure. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, there are many flowers in the city where I live. I live in Guangzhou, which is located in the southern part of China. Because the climate is warm and there is adequate rainfall and sunshine, many flowers can grow successfully throughout the year. Therefore, the city is also well known as the flower city.

提案: Your answer has unclear and incorrect phrases. Focus on clear sentence structure and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers because their blooming period is very short, and I want to capture their beauty before they fade. In China, there are many different kinds of flowers, which make the scenery even more colorful. Taking interesting photos helps me preserve these beautiful moments and keep great memories of my daily life.

提案: Your answer contains several grammar mistakes and unclear words. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and concise.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others, especially on special occasions like birthdays and graduations. For example, when I graduated from high school, my mom gave me a beautiful bouquet of flowers because some flowers symbolize happiness and positivity. She wanted to express her best wishes for my future success and happiness.

× For example, printing flowers I roses or lilies at home not only beautiful's the environment but also help me relax and reduce Addressed after a long day a dictionary flowers can also brighten our room and create a positive environment.

✓ For example, planting flowers like roses or lilies at home not only beautifies the environment but also helps me relax and reduce stress after a long day. Additionally, flowers can also brighten our room and create a positive environment.

The original sentence contains incorrect word choices and forms such as 'printing' instead of 'planting', 'beautiful's' instead of 'beautifies', and 'reduce Addressed' which is unclear and likely meant to be 'reduce stress'. Also, the sentence structure is confusing and needs to be split for clarity. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Yes, yes, my grandma love flowers very much.

✓ Yes, yes, my grandma loves flowers very much.

The subject 'grandma' is singular, so the verb should be 'loves' to agree in number. Using 'love' is incorrect for third person singular subjects.

× She take great care of them because refined the process very relaxing and satisfying.

✓ She takes great care of them because she finds the process very relaxing and satisfying.

The verb 'take' should be 'takes' to agree with the singular subject 'She'. Also, the phrase 'refined the process' is incorrect; it should be 'finds the process' to express her feeling about the activity.

× Yes, there are lot of flowers in the city where I live.

✓ Yes, there are lots of flowers in the city where I live.

The phrase 'lot of' should be 'lots of' or 'a lot of' when used with plural countable nouns. 'Lot of' without 'a' is incorrect.

× I live in Guangzhou which is located in the softening of China.

✓ I live in Guangzhou which is located in the southern part of China.

The word 'softening' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'southern'. Also, 'in the southern part of China' is the correct prepositional phrase to describe location.

× Because of the climate is warm and there is and equate rainfall in sunshine, many flowers can grew successfully throughout the year.

✓ Because the climate is warm and there is adequate rainfall and sunshine, many flowers can grow successfully throughout the year.

The sentence has structural issues: 'Because of the climate is warm' should be 'Because the climate is warm'. 'and equate rainfall in sunshine' is incorrect; it should be 'adequate rainfall and sunshine'. Also, 'can grew' is incorrect; it should be 'can grow'.

× So the city also well known as the flower city.

✓ So the city is also well known as the Flower City.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is'. Also, 'Flower City' is a proper noun and should be capitalized. The definite article 'the' is correctly used here.

× Yes, I often take photos of flowers because they are blooming period is very short and I want to capture their beauty before they fade.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of flowers because their blooming period is very short and I want to capture their beauty before they fade.

The phrase 'they are blooming period' is incorrect; it should be 'their blooming period' to correctly use the possessive pronoun.

× Pruning the other which make the sense where even more colorful.

✓ Putting the flowers together makes the scene even more colorful.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect word choices like 'Pruning the other' and 'make the sense where'. The corrected sentence conveys the intended meaning clearly and grammatically.

× An interesting taken photo help me preserve this beautiful moment and keep great memory of my daily life.

✓ An interesting photo helps me preserve this beautiful moment and keep great memories of my daily life.

The phrase 'interesting taken photo' is incorrect; it should be 'interesting photo'. The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'photo'. Also, 'keep great memory' should be 'keep great memories'.

× Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others especially on special occasion like birthday graduate Ann face throw.

✓ Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others especially on special occasions like birthdays, graduations, and festivals.

The phrase 'special occasion' should be plural 'special occasions'. Also, 'birthday graduate Ann face throw' is incorrect and likely meant to be 'birthdays, graduations, and festivals' or similar events.

× She want to express her great wish for my future success and happy.

✓ She wants to express her great wish for my future success and happiness.

The verb 'want' should be 'wants' to agree with singular subject 'She'. Also, 'happy' should be the noun 'happiness' to match 'success' in the sentence.