Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为自然，但表达略显冗长且有语法错误，如“flowers are of various types”应简化为“there are many types of flowers”。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并注意语法准确性。

例: Yes, I love flowers because there are many types, and they always make me happy. For example, when I was a child, my mom and I often visited parks to see flower exhibitions.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如“helps”应为“help”，“had a really good memories”应为“have really good memories”。句子结构不够连贯，建议使用连接词并注意时态一致。

例: My mom loves flowers and always plants many in our garden. When I was young, I sometimes helped her with gardening, and I have really good memories of those times.

提案: 回答内容具体且连贯，但“and so on”较口语化且不够正式，建议用更具体的词汇替代。句子可更简洁自然。

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live because our neighborhood has several parks. These parks have various flowers such as roses and tulips, and my parents and I often visit them on weekends.

提案: 回答表达较为自然，但句子较长且有语法错误，如“take the bus everyday”应为“take the bus every day”，“flowers and special”应为“flowers that are special”。建议简化句子并注意语法。

例: Sometimes I take photos of flowers, but I am usually busy studying. I take the bus to school every day and don't see many flowers on my way home. However, if I see beautiful or unique flowers, I take pictures of them.

提案: 回答中存在语法和表达不清的问题，如“have a representative of love”应为“represent love”，句子结构重复且不够流畅。建议使用更准确的表达并避免重复。

例: People in my country often give flowers during festivals such as Mother's Day, Father's Day, and Valentine's Day. For example, roses represent love, and other flowers have special meanings, so people send them on these occasions.

× I think flowers are of various types and they can also always make me happy.

✓ I think flowers are of various types and they can always make me happy.

句中“also always”词序不正确，正确的顺序是“always”放在“can”之后，且“also”在此句中多余，应去掉。

× my mom and I always went to the park to see the exhibition of different candle flowers.

✓ my mom and I always went to the park to see the exhibition of different candle flowers.

此句时态正确，无需修改。

× she always. Planted a lot of flowers in our garden and when I was young I sometimes helps her to do some gardening and I had a really good memories there.

✓ she always planted a lot of flowers in our garden and when I was young I sometimes helped her to do some gardening and I had really good memories there.

句中“always.”后多余的句号应去掉；“helps”应改为过去式“helped”以保持时态一致；“a really good memories”中“memories”为复数，前面不应加不定冠词“a”，应改为“really good memories”。

× I had a really good memories there.

✓ I had really good memories there.

“memories”为复数名词，前面不应加不定冠词“a”，应去掉。

× I sometimes helps her to do some gardening

✓ I sometimes help her to do some gardening

主语“I”后动词应为原形“help”，而非第三人称单数形式“helps”。

× there are different kinds of flowers like roses and so on.

✓ there are different kinds of flowers like roses and so on.

此句无语法错误，复数使用正确。

× So during the weekend my parents and I will go to those parks to see those flowers.

✓ So during the weekend my parents and I will go to those parks to see those flowers.

此句时态正确，无需修改。

× Well sometimes because I am busy with studying in my daily life so I just take the bus everyday to my school and I haven't seen many flowers on my way home.

✓ Well sometimes because I am busy studying in my daily life, so I just take the bus every day to my school and I don't see many flowers on my way home.

“busy with studying”应简化为“busy studying”；“everyday”是形容词，表示“日常的”，此处应用副词“every day”；“haven't seen”与前文时态不一致，应改为一般现在时“don't see”。

× So if I see some really beautiful flowers and special I will take pictures for them.

✓ So if I see some really beautiful and special flowers, I will take pictures of them.

“beautiful flowers and special”中“special”应修饰“flowers”，应放在“beautiful”后并与之并列；“take pictures for them”应改为“take pictures of them”，介词使用错误。

× So if I see some really beautiful flowers and special I will take pictures for them.

✓ So if I see some really beautiful and special flowers, I will take pictures of them.

“take pictures for them”中的介词“for”用错，正确搭配是“take pictures of something”。

× People in my country like to give flowers to others during some festivals, including the Mother's Day, Father's Day and also the Valentine's Day.

✓ People in my country like to give flowers to others during some festivals, including Mother's Day, Father's Day and also Valentine's Day.

节日名称前不需要加定冠词“the”，应去掉。

× Because the flowers like the roses have a representative of love in the others have some special meanings as well.

✓ Because flowers like roses represent love, and others have some special meanings as well.

“the flowers like the roses”中不应加定冠词“the”；“have a representative of love”表达不当，应改为“represent love”；“in the others”结构错误，应改为“and others”。

× So people give the flowers to others given some special festivals.

✓ So people give flowers to others during some special festivals.

“given some special festivals”结构错误，应改为“during some special festivals”；“the flowers”前的定冠词多余，应去掉。