Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ содержит много грамматических ошибок и нечетких выражений. Постарайтесь давать более связные и понятные предложения, избегая бессмысленных фраз. Используйте простые и точные слова, чтобы описать свои чувства к цветам.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they are colorful and have a pleasant scent. One of my favorite flowers is the Alstroemeria, which is beautiful and unique.

提案: Ответ хороший, но можно улучшить связность и плавность речи, используя связующие слова. Также стоит добавить более конкретные детали о редком цветке и почему ваша подруга его выращивает.

例: Yes, I know many people who love flowers. In particular, my friend has a garden where she plants flowers almost every day. Moreover, she grows a rare flower that is found only in some parts of the world, which makes her garden very special.

提案: Ваш ответ содержит несколько грамматических ошибок и нечетких выражений. Постарайтесь строить предложения более логично и использовать подходящие слова. Добавьте связующие слова для плавности речи.

例: Yes, there are many flowers in my town, which makes it bright and beautiful. Additionally, our government is planting more flowers every day, which makes people happy when they see them.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие фразы. Постарайтесь использовать полные предложения и избегать повторений. Добавьте связующие слова для улучшения связности.

例: Yes, I take photos of flowers every day because they make me feel happy. My mother has planted many beautiful flowers at home, and I enjoy capturing their beauty in pictures.

提案: Ваш ответ содержит несколько неясных и грамматически неправильных предложений. Постарайтесь выражать мысли более ясно и использовать связующие слова для логичности.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to their family members and friends. They do this to make others happy and to share the beauty of nature.

× Yes, I love flowers since they are colorful and have distinctive scanned to illustrate.

✓ Yes, I love flowers since they are colorful and have distinctive scents to illustrate.

The word 'scanned' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'scents' which means smells. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar error, but it affects sentence clarity.

× I concede Alatos which is one of my favorite flowers.

✓ I consider Alatos to be one of my favorite flowers.

The verb 'concede' is incorrectly used here. The correct verb is 'consider' to express preference. This is a sentence structure and word choice error.

× To be an fabulous.

✓ It is a fabulous flower.

The original sentence fragment lacks a subject and verb, making it incomplete. The correction provides a complete sentence.

× Incredible flower.

✓ It is an incredible flower.

This is a sentence fragment missing a subject and verb. Adding 'It is' completes the sentence.

× We. Sweet.

✓ It is sweet.

The original is fragmented and unclear. The correction forms a complete sentence.

× She has a garden where she plants flowers almost everyday.

✓ She has a garden where she plants flowers almost every day.

The phrase 'everyday' is an adjective meaning common or normal; the correct adverbial phrase is 'every day' meaning each day.

× She even has a rare flower which is found in some parts of the world.

✓ She even has a rare flower that is found in some parts of the world.

Using 'which' in restrictive clauses is less common in spoken English; 'that' is preferred here. This is a style suggestion.

× Yes, there are numerous of flowers in my town which makes it more.

✓ Yes, there are numerous flowers in my town which makes it more beautiful.

The phrase 'numerous of' is incorrect; 'numerous' should be used without 'of'. Also, the sentence is incomplete; adding 'beautiful' completes the thought.

× Brighton and extraordinary Our government is planting more and more flowers day by day.

✓ Brighton is extraordinary. Our government is planting more and more flowers day by day.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Splitting into two sentences clarifies meaning.

× It makes people enjoy and happy when they look at them.

✓ It makes people enjoy and feel happy when they look at them.

The adjective 'happy' needs a verb like 'feel' to be used correctly here.

× There are numerous of flowers planted in my house by my mom which.

✓ There are numerous flowers planted in my house by my mom which

The phrase 'numerous of' is incorrect; 'numerous' should be used without 'of'. The sentence is incomplete but corrected for quantifier usage.

× Are really extraordinary and I take their photos almost everyday.

✓ They are really extraordinary and I take their photos almost every day.

The sentence fragment lacks a subject; adding 'They' completes the sentence. Also, 'everyday' should be 'every day' as explained before.

× Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others, such as a world household or their friends.

✓ Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others, such as a whole household or their friends.

The phrase 'a world household' is incorrect; likely intended 'a whole household' meaning an entire family.

× They try to please and make happy other people that they allow.

✓ They try to please and make other people happy.

The phrase 'that they allow' is unnecessary and confusing; removing it clarifies the sentence.

× They want to appreciate nature's beauty. And share it with other friends.

✓ They want to appreciate nature's beauty and share it with other friends.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal and can be combined with the previous sentence for better flow.