Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'such as'는 예시를 들 때 사용되는데, 여기서는 'because of'가 더 적절합니다. 또한 'So I put on my room'은 어색하며, 'So I put them in my room'으로 수정해야 합니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I love flowers because of their bright colors and pleasant smells. They make any room look better, so I often put them in my room.

提案: 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'my mom also love'는 'my mom also loves'로 수정해야 하며, 'spends a lot of time to take caring of them'은 'spends a lot of time taking care of them'이 자연스럽습니다. 'It's one of her hobby'는 'It's one of her hobbies'로 복수형을 사용해야 합니다.

例: Yes, my mom also loves flowers. She has a garden and spends a lot of time taking care of them. It's one of her hobbies.

提案: 문장이 다소 어색하고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'plant or flowers'는 'plant flowers'로 수정해야 하며, 'flowers festivals'는 'flower festivals'가 맞습니다. 문장을 더 자연스럽고 명확하게 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. There are several parks and gardens full of flowers. Also, many people plant flowers in their yards. In addition, flower festivals are popular and enjoyable to visit.

提案: 몇 가지 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'take photo'는 'take photos'로 복수형을 사용해야 하며, 'capture beauty of flowers'는 'capture the beauty of flowers'가 자연스럽습니다. 또한 'I can feel relaxing'은 'I feel relaxed'로 수정하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: Yes, I like to take photos of flowers in my daily life. I enjoy capturing the beauty of flowers. It makes me feel relaxed, and I often share the pictures on social media.

提案: 문법과 표현에 많은 오류가 있습니다. 'is specially special occasions'는 'especially on special occasions'로 수정해야 하며, 'birthday readings'는 'birthdays'가 맞습니다. 'many people sends'는 'many people send'로 복수형 동사 사용에 주의해야 합니다. 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others, especially on special occasions like birthdays. For example, many people send me flowers when I finish a performance.

× So I put on my room.

✓ So I put them in my room.

The phrase 'put on my room' is incorrect because 'put on' is not the right phrasal verb here. The correct phrase is 'put them in my room' to indicate placing flowers inside the room. Also, the object 'them' (flowers) is necessary to clarify what is being put.

× Yes, my mom also love flowers.

✓ Yes, my mom also loves flowers.

The verb 'love' must agree with the third person singular subject 'my mom'. Therefore, it should be 'loves' instead of 'love'.

× she spends a lot of time to take caring of them.

✓ she spends a lot of time taking care of them.

The correct expression is 'spend time doing something', so 'taking care' is the gerund form needed here. Also, 'take caring' is incorrect; it should be 'taking care'.

× It's one of her hobby.

✓ It's one of her hobbies.

The phrase 'one of her hobby' is incorrect because 'one of' should be followed by a plural noun. Therefore, 'hobby' should be pluralized to 'hobbies'.

× many people plant or flowers in their yard.

✓ many people plant flowers in their yard.

The word 'or' is incorrectly used here and should be removed to make the sentence grammatically correct.

× it is nice to see flowers especially on flowers festivals.

✓ it is nice to see flowers especially at flower festivals.

The correct preposition for events is 'at', not 'on'. Also, 'flowers festivals' should be 'flower festivals' as a compound noun.

× I like to take photo of flowers in my daily life.

✓ I like to take photos of flowers in my daily life.

The noun 'photo' should be plural 'photos' because it refers to multiple pictures taken regularly.

× I like to capture beauty of flowers.

✓ I like to capture the beauty of flowers.

The phrase 'beauty of flowers' requires the definite article 'the' before 'beauty' to specify the particular beauty being referred to.

× I can feel relaxing and I often share the pictures on social media.

✓ I can feel relaxed and I often share the pictures on social media.

The verb 'feel' should be followed by an adjective describing the subject's state. 'Relaxing' describes something that causes relaxation, while 'relaxed' describes the subject's feeling.

× people in my country often send flowers to others is specially special occasions like birthday readings.

✓ People in my country often send flowers to others on special occasions like birthday celebrations.

The sentence has structural errors: 'is specially special occasions' is incorrect. It should be 'on special occasions'. Also, 'birthday readings' is likely a mistake for 'birthday celebrations' or 'birthday greetings'.

× many people sends flowers to me when I finish performance.

✓ Many people send flowers to me when I finish a performance.

The subject 'many people' is plural, so the verb should be 'send' not 'sends'. Also, 'finish performance' needs an article 'a' before 'performance'.