Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하며, 중복된 표현을 피해야 합니다. 예를 들어, 'there have a lot of plenty of flowers'는 부자연스럽고 중복된 표현입니다. 문장 연결도 부드럽게 해야 합니다.

例: Yes, I love flowers. I have many flowers at home because I bought them for my mother.

提案: 문장이 부자연스럽고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 'Anne also she gives water every day'는 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 간결하게 하고, 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 답변을 구성하세요.

例: Yes, my mother loves flowers. She enjoys taking care of her plants and waters them every day.

提案: 답변이 단편적이고 문장 연결이 부자연스럽습니다. 문장을 완성형으로 만들고, 연결어를 사용해 자연스럽게 이어가야 합니다. 구체적인 설명도 추가하면 좋습니다.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. Many people grow flowers in their gardens and balconies, so I often see beautiful flowers around.

提案: 문장이 길고 중간에 끊기며 문법 오류가 많습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 만들고, 연결어를 사용해 자연스럽게 이어가야 합니다. 구체적인 이유도 포함시키세요.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers when I walk in the park because their beautiful colors are memorable.

提案: 답변이 매우 불명확하고 문법적으로 틀렸습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 이유를 명확하게 설명하며, 문장을 간결하고 자연스럽게 구성해야 합니다.

例: People in my country usually send flowers on special occasions like celebrations, but nowadays, it is less common because people communicate less often.

× Also, there have a lot of plenty of flowers in my home.

✓ Also, there are a lot of flowers in my home.

'There be' structure requires the verb 'to be' to agree with the subject. 'Flowers' is plural, so 'are' should be used instead of 'have'. Also, 'a lot of plenty of' is redundant; 'a lot of' is sufficient.

× I love flowers and.

✓ I love flowers.

The conjunction 'and' is incorrectly placed at the end of the sentence without connecting to another clause. It should be removed to complete the sentence properly.

× Also. My mother loves flowers.

✓ Also, my mother loves flowers.

A period is incorrectly used after 'Also' instead of a comma. 'Also' is an adverb that should be followed by a comma when starting a sentence.

× Anne also she gives. Water every day.

✓ She also gives water every day.

The sentence has redundant subject pronouns 'she' and 'Anne' and incorrect punctuation. The correct structure is 'She also gives water every day.'

× There are a lot of flowers. In apartments.

✓ There are a lot of flowers in apartments.

The sentence is incorrectly split into two fragments. Combining them into one sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Also, many people grow in the garden.

✓ Also, many people grow flowers in their gardens.

The original sentence lacks an object for the verb 'grow'. Adding 'flowers' and specifying 'in their gardens' clarifies the meaning.

× I take photo of flowers in my daily life when I'm walking through the. Park, I can see a lot of flowers.

✓ I take photos of flowers in my daily life. When I'm walking through the park, I can see a lot of flowers.

'Photo' should be plural 'photos' to match the context. Also, the sentence is split incorrectly; separating into two sentences improves readability.

× And it. They have a so beautiful colors and I want to memorable. About flowers.

✓ They have such beautiful colors, and I want to remember them.

The pronouns 'it' and 'they' are used confusingly. 'A so beautiful colors' is incorrect; 'such beautiful colors' is correct. 'I want to memorable' is incorrect; 'I want to remember' is correct.

× It depends on impressed many people celebrate and gifts of flowers to them, but nowadays many people don't talk each other.

✓ It depends on how impressed people are; many celebrate and give flowers as gifts, but nowadays many people don't talk to each other.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Adding 'how' and restructuring the sentence clarifies the meaning. 'Don't talk each other' should be 'don't talk to each other'.