Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is enthusiastic but has grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to use plural form 'flowers' and avoid repeating 'love' unnecessarily. Also, organize your ideas clearly with linking words.

例: Yes, I love flowers very much. I enjoy their colors, scents, and unique shapes. For example, roses, lilies, and sunflowers are my favorites. I especially appreciate it when someone gives me flowers as a gift because it feels special.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has some repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and complete your thoughts clearly.

例: Yes, my mother loves flowers a lot. She has planted many varieties like roses, lilies, and sunflowers in our garden. Because of her passion, our garden is full of beautiful flowers. I also hope to develop a similar love for flowers in the future.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and some unclear phrases. Avoid repetition and use linking words to make your answer coherent and clear.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live because my mother has a large garden. It contains various flowers such as roses and lilies. I enjoy being there because of the beautiful colors and pleasant scents of the flowers.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use complete sentences and link your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers because I enjoy capturing aesthetic images. Flowers help me create beautiful pictures, which I sometimes share on my Instagram story.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Use correct prepositions and sentence structures, and avoid unnecessary repetition.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others, especially on Valentine's Day. Couples usually give roses to their partners to make them feel special. Flowers are also commonly given during birthday celebrations for the same reason.

× I love flower.

✓ I love flowers.

The noun 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' because the speaker is talking about flowers in general, not a single flower. In English, when referring to things in general, the plural form is used.

× I love everything about flower an I love it when somebody gives me flower as a present or as a gift.

✓ I love everything about flowers and I love it when somebody gives me flowers as a present or as a gift.

The noun 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' in both cases because the speaker refers to flowers in general and multiple flowers as gifts. Also, 'an' should be 'and' to connect the two clauses.

× I love love so much like roses, Lily and sunflowers are.

✓ I love flowers so much, like roses, lilies, and sunflowers.

The phrase 'I love love so much' is incorrect; it should be 'I love flowers so much'. Also, 'Lily' should be plural 'lilies' to match the other plural flower names. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× She is really into flowers and in our garden she has literally put so many flowers like roses, lilies and sunflowers.

✓ She is really into flowers and in our garden she has literally planted so many flowers like roses, lilies, and sunflowers.

The verb 'put' is not the best choice here; 'planted' is more appropriate for flowers. The plural forms 'roses', 'lilies', and 'sunflowers' are correct.

× Our full garden is full of flowers 'cause she loves flowers so much.

✓ Our whole garden is full of flowers because she loves flowers so much.

The phrase 'Our full garden' is incorrect; it should be 'Our whole garden'. 'Cause' is informal; 'because' is more appropriate in this context.

× So she's the someone who loves flowers so much and I would like to.

✓ So she's the one who loves flowers so much and I would like to.

The phrase 'the someone' is incorrect; it should be 'the one' to refer to a specific person.

× As as I said, my mom is very passionate about flowers so she has a big garden with your are so many varieties of flowers, roses, lilies and flowers.

✓ As I said, my mom is very passionate about flowers so she has a big garden with so many varieties of flowers, roses, lilies, and sunflowers.

The phrase 'your are' is incorrect; it should be 'there are'. Also, 'flowers' at the end is vague; specifying 'sunflowers' matches previous mentions. The repeated 'As as' is corrected to 'As'.

× So yeah, there is a lot of flowers when I leave an I love being here.

✓ So yeah, there are a lot of flowers where I live and I love being here.

The phrase 'there is a lot of flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'there are a lot of flowers' because 'flowers' is plural. 'When I leave' should be 'where I live' to make sense.

× They smell of the flowers, the colors, the shape and I just love.

✓ I love the smell of the flowers, their colors, and their shapes.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. The corrected sentence clearly expresses the speaker's appreciation of the flowers' smell, colors, and shapes.

× Yeah, I do take pictures of flowers, 'cause. I wanna take I am into taking aesthetic.

✓ Yeah, I do take pictures of flowers because I want to. I am into taking aesthetic pictures.

The sentence was fragmented and informal. 'Wanna' is informal; 'want to' is more appropriate. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Pictures and the flowers helps me to get aesthetic pictures and I even take photos of flowers to post on my Instagram story as well.

✓ Pictures and the flowers help me to get aesthetic pictures and I even take photos of flowers to post on my Instagram story as well.

The verb 'helps' should be 'help' to agree with the plural subject 'pictures and the flowers'.

× So yeah it do take.

✓ So yeah, I do take them.

The phrase 'it do take' is incorrect. It should be 'I do take them' to correctly express the action and subject.

× Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others specially in Valentine Day.

✓ Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others, especially on Valentine's Day.

'Specially' should be 'especially'. 'Valentine Day' should be 'Valentine's Day'. Preposition 'on' is used with days.

× So in Valentine Day mostly couples in each other roses to their partners and make them feel special.

✓ So on Valentine's Day, mostly couples give each other roses to make their partners feel special.

'In each other' is incorrect; it should be 'give each other'. The verb 'make' is corrected to agree with the plural subject 'couples'. Preposition 'on' is used with days.

× And the another location would be birthday parties and birthday also they sent flowers and make them feel special.

✓ Another occasion would be birthday parties; people also send flowers to make others feel special.

'The another' is incorrect; it should be 'another'. 'Birthday' is repeated unnecessarily. 'Sent' should be 'send' to match present tense. The sentence is restructured for clarity.