Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Sua resposta precisa ser mais clara e natural. Evite frases incompletas e erros gramaticais. Use uma estrutura simples: uma frase principal seguida de detalhes específicos, conectados por palavras de ligação.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they can transform any space into something more cheerful and colorful. I think flowers are a beautiful expression of nature that brightens our environment.

提案: Sua resposta tem erros de gramática e vocabulário confuso. Use frases completas e vocabulário adequado para descrever as flores e a ação de plantar. Use conectores para melhorar a fluidez.

例: Yes, my mom loves flowers and she usually plants many types in her garden, such as roses and other colorful flowers. I enjoy seeing how much she cares for her yard.

提案: Sua resposta contém erros de vocabulário e gramática, além de ser confusa. Use frases claras e conectores para explicar por que há muitas flores onde você mora.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live because I live in the countryside of Canada. People in my neighborhood take good care of their gardens, so the area is colorful and cheerful.

提案: Sua resposta está incompleta e contém repetições. Use frases completas e conectores para explicar por que você gosta de tirar fotos de flores.

例: Yes, I do. I usually take photos of flowers in my neighborhood because my neighbors have wonderful gardens with many different kinds of flowers. I enjoy learning about them and sharing the pictures.

提案: Sua resposta está incompleta e contém erros gramaticais. Use frases completas e conectores para explicar em que ocasiões as pessoas enviam flores.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to friends or family on special occasions such as weddings, birthdays, and graduations.

× I love flowers because they can. Transforming any space in something more cheerful, colorful and I think the flowers are expression of nature that I.

✓ I love flowers because they can transform any space into something more cheerful and colorful, and I think flowers are an expression of nature.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure. 'Transforming' should be connected to the previous clause as a verb, and 'expression of nature that I' is incomplete. The correction combines the ideas into a coherent sentence with proper verb usage and article placement.

× my mom loves flowers so she usually plant in her garden many types of flowers such as some flowers curviness, owners roses and I love to see how she likes yard.

✓ My mom loves flowers, so she usually plants many types of flowers in her garden, such as some curvy flowers and roses, and I love to see how she likes her yard.

The preposition 'in' was misplaced; it should come after 'plants many types of flowers'. Also, 'plant' should be 'plants' to agree with third person singular. The phrase 'owners roses' is unclear and likely meant 'roses'. The sentence needed reordering for clarity and correct preposition use.

× Yes, there are alot flowers where I leave because I live in counter inside of Canada, so in my CD the neighborhood usually take care a lot of their garden so the CD is colorful and cheerful.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of flowers where I live because I live in a country inside Canada, so in my city the neighborhood usually takes care of their gardens, so the city is colorful and cheerful.

'Alot' should be 'a lot of'. 'Leave' is incorrect; it should be 'live'. 'Counter' should be 'country'. 'CD' likely means 'city'. 'Neighborhood' is singular and should be followed by 'takes' (third person singular). 'Garden' should be plural 'gardens' to match 'their'. Prepositions 'of' and 'in' were corrected for proper usage.

× I usually take photos in my neighborhood because my neighbor my neighbors have a wonderful garden with different kind of flowers. So I love to learn about it and put the pictures in my.

✓ I usually take photos in my neighborhood because my neighbors have wonderful gardens with different kinds of flowers. So I love to learn about them and put the pictures in my collection.

The phrase 'my neighbor my neighbors' is redundant; corrected to 'my neighbors'. 'Different kind of flowers' should be 'different kinds of flowers' for plural agreement. 'Put the pictures in my' is incomplete; added 'collection' for clarity. Prepositions and plural forms were corrected.

× Yes they do uh, they usually send flowers for friends or family when we have a special celebrate such as marry or birthday are. Graduation, so the.

✓ Yes, they do. They usually send flowers to friends or family when we have a special celebration such as a marriage, birthday, or graduation.

The sentence was fragmented and contained incorrect word forms: 'celebrate' should be 'celebration', 'marry' should be 'marriage'. 'Send flowers for' should be 'send flowers to'. The sentence was restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.