Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, ví dụ như 'flour' thay vì 'flowers', 'grown' thay vì 'grow'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng sai. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they have vibrant colors and pleasant fragrances. I have a small garden in front of my house where I often grow roses. I like to use these flowers to express my emotions on special occasions.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'that's my. Mom', 'An every morning say always send me a message'. Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ vựng chính xác. Hãy thêm chi tiết cụ thể và dùng liên từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, my mother loves flowers, especially roses. Every morning, she sends me a message along with a picture of roses to brighten my day.

提案: Bạn không nên bỏ qua câu hỏi trong bài thi IELTS. Thay vào đó, hãy cố gắng trả lời ngắn gọn và tự nhiên. Việc tránh trả lời sẽ ảnh hưởng xấu đến điểm số của bạn.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live, especially in parks and gardens. The climate here is suitable for growing various types of flowers.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như 'ours' thay vì 'flowers', 'see our flower photo' thay vì 'send flower photos', 'queen parents' không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, từ vựng chính xác và liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I love taking photos of flowers in my garden. I often send these photos to my family, especially my grandparents. Photography of flowers is a relaxing hobby and helps me improve my skills.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như 'image table' không rõ nghĩa, 'escalate emotions' không phù hợp. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác, câu hoàn chỉnh và liên từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên và rõ ràng hơn.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers as gifts. They are popular for expressing emotions on special occasions such as Valentine's Day, anniversaries, weddings, and other celebrations.

× Yes, that's my. Mom My mom really loved flowers, especially roses.

✓ Yes, that's my mom. My mom really loves flowers, especially roses.

The sentence incorrectly uses a period after 'my' and capitalizes 'Mom' unnecessarily. Also, 'loved' should be 'loves' to match the present tense context. Correct pronoun and verb usage improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× because they're vibrant colors and fragrances

✓ because they have vibrant colors and fragrances

The phrase 'they're vibrant colors and fragrances' incorrectly uses 'they're' (they are) to refer to flowers. It should indicate possession ('have') to correctly express that flowers possess vibrant colors and fragrances.

× and I also have a little garden is in front of my house and I often grown roses and use this flour to form any occasions to S rate my emotions.

✓ and I also have a little garden in front of my house where I often grow roses and use these flowers for various occasions to express my emotions.

The original sentence has multiple structural errors: 'garden is in front' is incorrect; 'grown' should be 'grow'; 'flour' is a misspelling of 'flower'; 'form any occasions to S rate my emotions' is unclear and incorrect. The corrected sentence improves clarity, verb forms, and word choice.

× My mom really loved flowers, especially roses.

✓ My mom really loves flowers, especially roses.

The use of past tense 'loved' is inconsistent with the present context of the conversation. Changing to present tense 'loves' aligns with the ongoing affection for flowers.

× An every morning say always send me a message. With the gift of process.

✓ And every morning she always sends me a message with the gift of roses.

The sentence lacks subject pronouns and has incorrect word usage ('process' instead of 'roses'). Adding 'she' clarifies the subject, and correcting 'process' to 'roses' fixes the meaning.

× I often see our flower photo to my family, especially my queen parents.

✓ I often show flower photos to my family, especially my dear parents.

The phrase 'see our flower photo to my family' is incorrect. 'Show' is the correct verb for presenting photos. 'Queen parents' is likely a mistranslation or typo; 'dear parents' is more appropriate.

× Flowers are the create object for practicing my photography skills and invited to be a relaxing hobby.

✓ Flowers are a great subject for practicing my photography skills and are a relaxing hobby for me.

'Create object' is incorrect; it should be 'great subject'. Also, 'invited to be' is incorrect; 'are' fits better to describe the hobby. The correction improves adjective use and sentence clarity.

× With image table often send their flowers.

✓ In my country, people often send flowers.

'With image table' is nonsensical and likely a mistranslation. Replacing it with 'In my country' corrects the prepositional phrase to fit the context.

× Which are the popular gift to escalate emotions for special occasions, for example, including Valentine Day's anniversary's, weddings and other celebrations?

✓ They are a popular gift to express emotions for special occasions, such as Valentine's Day, anniversaries, weddings, and other celebrations.

The sentence incorrectly starts with 'Which' and misuses possessive forms ('Valentine Day's anniversary's'). Replacing 'Which' with 'They are' and correcting possessives improves grammar and clarity.