Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of repeating 'I do love flowers' and 'I believe that flowers bring joy to my house', you can combine ideas more naturally and use linking words.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they bring joy to my home, especially when they are gifts from someone I care about.

提案: Focus on clarity and correct vocabulary. Avoid mistakes like 'flag words' instead of 'flowers'. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details.

例: Yes, many people I know love flowers, especially a friend who owns a flower shop. She often talks about different flower types, their prices, and how important they are in our lives.

提案: Improve vocabulary and sentence structure. Use correct words like 'flowers' instead of 'flaggers'. Make sentences clearer and more coherent with linking words.

例: Yes, there are many flowers available where I live. You can buy them at a special spot in the supermarket, which is popular among people, some even buy flowers in large quantities to resell.

提案: Work on vocabulary and sentence clarity. Use correct words like 'flowers' and 'flowers' growth stages. Use linking words to make the answer more coherent and concise.

例: Yes, I take photos of flowers regularly. At my school, we have a flower garden, and we document the growth of the flowers by taking pictures from when they start growing until they bloom. At the end of the term, we review the collection to see how the garden has developed.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples of occasions when flowers are sent.

例: Yes, in my country, it is traditional to send flowers on various occasions such as birthdays, funerals, and to celebrate special achievements. People often send flowers to express sympathy or congratulations.

× I know a lot of people who love flag words, but I will say that especially.

✓ I know a lot of people who love flowers, but I will say especially.

The word 'flag words' is a misspelling of 'flowers'. Also, 'especially' should not be separated by a comma and should be placed correctly in the sentence for clarity.

× One of my friends that she has a flower shop so she's constantly speaking about the types of flowers, prices and the important they are indeed in our lives.

✓ One of my friends has a flower shop, so she's constantly talking about the types of flowers, prices, and how important they are in our lives.

The phrase 'that she has' is redundant after 'One of my friends'. 'Speaking about' is better replaced with 'talking about' for naturalness. 'The important they are indeed' is incorrect; it should be 'how important they are'. Also, commas are needed before 'so' and in the list.

× Where I live at you can find flaggers at the supermarket.

✓ Where I live, you can find flowers at the supermarket.

'Flaggers' is a misspelling of 'flowers'. Also, 'at' after 'Where I live' is unnecessary and incorrect.

× There is especially spot where you can buy them.

✓ There is a special spot where you can buy them.

'Especially' is an adverb and cannot modify 'spot' (a noun). The correct adjective is 'special'. Also, the article 'a' is needed before 'special spot'.

× A lot of peoples go over there.

✓ A lot of people go over there.

'Peoples' is incorrect; the plural of 'people' is 'people' when referring to persons.

× I'm by then if an important quantities even for reselling them.

✓ I'm there by then with an important quantity even for reselling them.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Important quantities' should be singular 'quantity' if referring to an amount. 'I'm by then' is unclear; corrected to 'I'm there by then' for clarity.

× In my school we have an important space of flowers so we keep a little bit of a track by pictures how flag resist are growing up and then when they blow up and then at the end of the course we may have collected flowers to see how the garden is growing up.

✓ In my school, we have an important flower area, so we keep track with pictures of how flowers are growing and blooming, and at the end of the course, we may have collected flowers to see how the garden has grown.

'Space of flowers' is better expressed as 'flower area'. 'Keep a little bit of a track by pictures' is awkward; 'keep track with pictures' is better. 'Flag resist' is a misspelling of 'flowers'. 'Growing up' is incorrect; 'growing' or 'blooming' is appropriate. 'Blow up' is incorrect for flowers; 'bloom' is correct. 'Growing up' at the end should be 'has grown' to indicate completed growth.

× Sometimes people sending like when you have a loss or you have lost someone an if you have received any special achievement sometimes you also receive flowers for that too.

✓ Sometimes people send flowers, like when you have a loss or have lost someone, and if you have received any special achievement, you also receive flowers for that too.

'People sending' is incorrect; it should be 'people send' to match the present tense. The sentence also needs commas for clarity and correct conjunctions.