Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use correct tense. For example, say "Yes, I love flowers because they bring positive energy and inspire people to stay happy."

例: Yes, I love flowers because they bring positive energy and inspire people to stay happy and smile.

提案: Your answer is unclear and confusing. Focus on giving a direct response with simple, clear sentences. For example, "Yes, many people in my family love flowers, especially one of my siblings."

例: Yes, many people in my family love flowers, especially one of my siblings.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear words and incomplete sentences. Try to give a clear, complete answer with specific details. For example, "Yes, there are many gardens in my area that have a variety of flowers."

例: Yes, there are many gardens in my area that have a variety of flowers.

提案: Your answer is quite long and has some repetition and grammar mistakes. Try to be concise and clear, using linking words to connect ideas. For example, "Yes, I enjoy taking photos of flowers when I visit new places because it makes me happy."

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of flowers when I visit new places because it makes me happy.

提案: Your answer is unclear and confusing. Focus on giving a direct and simple response with relevant details. For example, "Yes, people in my country often send flowers to family and loved ones on special occasions or when visiting."

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to family and loved ones on special occasions or when visiting.

× Yes I did.

✓ Yes, I do.

The question is in the present tense 'Do you love flowers?', so the answer should also be in the present tense. 'Yes I did' is past tense and incorrect here. Use 'Yes, I do' to agree in present tense.

× Yes I love love is because flowers can give positive energy towards it and they always, they always inspire people to stay positive and smile.

✓ Yes, I love flowers because they can give positive energy and always inspire people to stay positive and smile.

The original sentence is repetitive and awkwardly structured. 'Love love is because' is incorrect. Simplify to 'I love flowers because they can give positive energy and always inspire people to stay positive and smile.'

× Well, in my family, everyone likes to let everyone loves flowers about the merger was a Billings, one of my siblings with who loved.

✓ Well, in my family, everyone loves flowers. One of my siblings especially loves them.

The original sentence is confusing and contains incorrect pronoun use and unclear phrases like 'merger was a Billings'. Simplify and clarify the sentence to express that everyone loves flowers, especially one sibling.

× Yes, in my hand down there a lot of Ganeri Andermann, there many gardens and which provide two different types of flowers and.

✓ Yes, in my hometown, there are many gardens which provide different types of flowers.

The original sentence has singular/plural errors and unclear words like 'Ganeri Andermann'. Correct the subject-verb agreement with 'there are many gardens' and clarify the location as 'my hometown'.

× Yes, I love to take photos of lover whenever I visit to whenever I visit new places and I can see new types of writings, I take a lot of photos of that.

✓ Yes, I love to take photos of flowers whenever I visit new places and see new types of flowers; I take a lot of photos of them.

The original sentence misuses 'lover' instead of 'flowers' and incorrectly uses 'visit to'. Also, 'writings' is incorrect; it should be 'flowers'. Correct prepositions and word choice improve clarity.

× And I think it's a it's a pleasure to me take photos of flowers and I always feel happy whenever I take photos of love.

✓ I think it's a pleasure for me to take photos of flowers, and I always feel happy when I do so.

The original sentence is awkward and repetitive. Correct the structure to 'it's a pleasure for me to take photos' and avoid repeating 'photos of love' (should be 'flowers').

× Yes, in my country whenever people visit to India where their family, their new ones there love ones whenever they will still limits after many after after so many times or whenever they tried they whenever they built a patient to enforce, but will they carry flows with them?

✓ Yes, in my country, whenever people visit their family or loved ones in India, they often bring flowers with them.

The original sentence is very unclear with incorrect prepositions and word choices like 'visit to India where their family' and 'will still limits'. Simplify and correct prepositions to express the intended meaning clearly.