Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and complete answer with proper sentence structure. Avoid short, fragmented sentences and explain your ideas more naturally and fluently. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I love flowers very much because in Indian culture, it is a long-standing tradition to wear flowers in the hair, especially at the back of the head. This practice is very common and holds cultural significance.

提案: Make sure to use correct grammar and complete sentences. Also, try to be more specific and clear in your response, and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: I do not personally know anyone who loves flowers very much, but I believe that most women in India prefer to wear flowers as part of their cultural traditions.

提案: Avoid breaking your sentences into fragments. Try to speak in full sentences and add linking words to make your answer more natural and coherent.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. At my home, my mother loves to plant flowers in the garden, especially roses and hibiscus, so we have a beautiful variety of flowers.

提案: Try to complete your sentences and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas and explain your thoughts clearly and naturally.

例: No, I do not usually take photos of flowers in my daily life, but I enjoy observing their beauty and growth whenever I see them.

提案: Avoid repeating words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to make your answer more fluent and provide specific examples to support your answer.

例: Yes, in my country, people often exchange flowers during special occasions. For example, flowers are commonly used during festivals and celebrations as a symbol of goodwill and happiness.

× We used to keep flowers.

✓ We used to keep flowers in our hair.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'in our hair' clarifies the meaning and completes the sentence structure.

× On backside of a head.

✓ On the backside of the head.

The phrase lacks an article and a subject. Adding 'the' and connecting it properly forms a complete phrase.

× And this is all very. Very long tradition followed up in India.

✓ And this is a very long tradition followed in India.

The original sentence is fragmented and awkward. Combining the parts and correcting 'followed up' to 'followed' improves clarity and grammar.

× I do not know someone who love flowers so much, but I think most women in India prefer.

✓ I do not know anyone who loves flowers so much, but I think most women in India prefer it.

'Someone' should be 'anyone' in negative sentences, and 'love' should be 'loves' to agree with 'anyone'. Also, the sentence is incomplete without an object after 'prefer'.

× Uhm, having flowers when they are in. Indian Culture.

✓ Uhm, having flowers when they are in Indian culture.

The sentence is fragmented with an unnecessary period. Removing the period connects the sentence properly.

× There are a lot of flowers. At my home, my mother. Loves. To plant. Plans in in the garden and she loves roses a lot, so we have a lot of roses and hibiscus.

✓ There are a lot of flowers at my home. My mother loves to plant plants in the garden, and she loves roses a lot, so we have a lot of roses and hibiscus.

The original sentences are fragmented and have repeated words ('plans in in'). Combining and correcting these fragments improves readability and grammar.

× No, I do not take any photo of flowers in my everyday life, but I observe seeing the beauty of flowers, how they have grown and I also. I also get a try.

✓ No, I do not take any photos of flowers in my everyday life, but I observe the beauty of flowers, how they have grown, and I also try to take photos.

'Photo' should be plural 'photos' when referring to multiple instances. The phrase 'observe seeing' is redundant; 'observe' suffices. The last part is incomplete and unclear; rephrasing clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, in my country people do exchange flowers during special occasions. Most commonly, flowers are used during festival times in our culture and and.

✓ Yes, in my country, people exchange flowers during special occasions. Most commonly, flowers are used during festival times in our culture.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and and'. Removing the extra conjunction and correcting punctuation improves clarity.