Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Try to avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific reasons why you like sunflowers.

例: Yes, I love flowers, especially sunflowers. When I see a sunflower, I feel motivated because it always turns towards the light. Moreover, its bright yellow petals are soft and beautiful, which makes it very attractive to me.

提案: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and explain why your sister loves roses using linking words. Be specific about the meaning of roses.

例: Yes, my sister loves roses because she told me they are beautiful and symbolize love. She especially likes red roses, which are the best flowers to give as a present.

提案: Your answer is confusing and has many grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use linking words to explain why there are few flowers. Also, be specific about the types of flowers and local customs.

例: No, there are not many flowers where I live because I live in a city without many parks. People usually pick daisies and take them home because they believe these flowers bring good luck.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is not clear and has grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect your thoughts and explain your feelings about photographing flowers without harming them.

例: Yes, I often take photos of beautiful flowers, especially sunflowers. Whenever I see an attractive flower, I take a picture to capture the moment. I prefer photographing flowers rather than picking them because I want them to live happily.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Try to form complete sentences and explain clearly when and why people send flowers in your country. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers on special occasions such as weddings and birthday parties. Flowers are an affordable and lovely way to express good wishes during these events.

× Yes I love flowers especially send flowers.

✓ Yes, I love flowers, especially sending flowers.

The verb 'send' should be in the present participle form 'sending' to correctly express the action related to 'love'.

× When I saw sunflower I feel motivated because it always.

✓ When I see sunflowers, I feel motivated because they always...

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly and is incomplete. 'Saw' should be 'see' to match present tense, and 'sunflower' should be plural 'sunflowers' to match general statement. The sentence also needs completion for clarity.

× Straight towards and light upward provision and is so soft and so beautiful and attractive for me.

✓ They grow straight upwards towards the light and are so soft, beautiful, and attractive to me.

The original sentence has incorrect prepositions and unclear phrasing. 'Straight towards' should be 'grow straight upwards towards the light'. Also, 'attractive for me' should be 'attractive to me'.

× Yes, I my sister loved roses because she told you so.

✓ Yes, my sister loves roses because she told me so.

The pronouns are incorrectly used. 'I my sister' is incorrect; it should be 'my sister'. Also, 'told you' should be 'told me' to reflect the speaker's perspective.

× Beautiful and a symbol for love and for present.

✓ They are beautiful and a symbol of love and gifts.

The sentence lacks a subject and verb, making it incomplete. Adding 'They are' completes the sentence. Also, 'symbol for love and for present' should be 'symbol of love and gifts' for correct preposition and meaning.

× It is the best way to give her She loved red roses.

✓ It is the best way to give to her. She loves red roses.

The original sentence is a run-on and mixes tenses. It needs to be split into two sentences with correct tense and preposition.

× No, there's not so many flower because I live in a city that doesn't have any food part and they do not prefer to have tree flower in generally power.

✓ No, there are not so many flowers because I live in a city that doesn't have any parks, and people generally do not prefer to have many flowers or trees.

'There's' is singular and should be 'there are' for plural 'flowers'. 'Food part' is incorrect and should be 'parks'. The sentence also has unclear phrasing that is corrected for clarity.

× People pluck out the flower Daisy flower.

✓ People pluck out daisy flowers.

The phrase 'the flower Daisy flower' is redundant and incorrect. It should be 'daisy flowers'.

× They took it home for a good luck flower.

✓ They take them home as good luck flowers.

'For a good luck flower' is incorrect preposition usage. 'As good luck flowers' correctly expresses the purpose.

× Yes, when I saw attractive and beautiful flower, I took the photo of them, specially sunflower where it is I have to go and I have to take the pic.

✓ Yes, when I see attractive and beautiful flowers, I take photos of them, especially sunflowers wherever I go.

The sentence incorrectly mixes past and present tense. Since the question is about daily life, present tense is appropriate. Also, 'specially' should be 'especially', and 'where it is I have to go' is corrected to 'wherever I go'.

× The moment I captured I love them.

✓ The moment I capture them, I love them.

The verb tense should be present to match the habitual action. Also, 'captured' should be 'capture' and the sentence needs a comma for clarity.

× And it kept it.

✓ And I keep them.

'It kept it' is unclear and incorrect. The speaker likely means they keep the photos, so 'I keep them' is correct.

× I do not preserve them.

✓ I do not preserve them.

This sentence is correct and needs no change.

× I want to be a lovely life for them, not to pluck out and take their life.

✓ I want them to have a lovely life, so I do not pluck them and take their life.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× Yes people Megan do office in flowers weather in our wedding occasion in a birthday party because the affordable and lovely represent for the.

✓ Yes, people often send flowers on occasions like weddings and birthday parties because they are affordable and lovely gifts.

The original sentence has many errors including incorrect words ('Megan do office in flowers weather'), missing prepositions, and incomplete phrases. The correction clarifies the intended meaning with proper grammar.