Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 명확하게 들리도록 문장을 간결하게 구성하고, 중복되는 표현을 줄이세요. 예를 들어, 'I really like flowers because they are beautiful and their scent makes me happy. I also enjoy giving flowers as gifts to my friends.'처럼 표현할 수 있습니다.

例: Yes, I really like flowers because they are beautiful and their scent makes me happy. I also enjoy giving flowers as gifts to my friends.

提案: 문장을 완성하고 연결어를 사용하여 답변을 더 자연스럽게 만드세요. 예를 들어, 'My mom really loves flowers, so I often give her flowers as gifts on special occasions, such as her birthday or our wedding anniversary.'처럼 말할 수 있습니다.

例: My mom really loves flowers, so I often give her flowers as gifts on special occasions, such as her birthday or our wedding anniversary.

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적으로 부정확한 부분이 많습니다. 문장을 간결하고 논리적으로 연결하여 명확하게 표현하세요. 예를 들어, 'Yes, there are many flowers where I live, especially in a beautiful park called Anton Park, which has many roses. I enjoy walking there.'

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live, especially in a beautiful park called Anton Park, which has many roses. I enjoy walking there.

提案: 문법 오류를 수정하고 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I usually take photos of flowers in my daily life because they make me feel happy and refreshed.'처럼 표현할 수 있습니다.

例: Yes, I usually take photos of flowers in my daily life because they make me feel happy and refreshed.

提案: 중복되는 단어를 줄이고 문장을 명확하게 만드세요. 예를 들어, 'Yes, many people in my country send flowers to others because flowers can bring happiness and are a good way to express emotions.'

例: Yes, many people in my country send flowers to others because flowers can bring happiness and are a good way to express emotions.

× Yes, I really like flowers because the flower is really beautiful and smell of flowers makes me feel happy.

✓ Yes, I really like flowers because flowers are really beautiful and the smell of flowers makes me feel happy.

'The flower is really beautiful' is incorrect because 'flower' is singular but the context refers to flowers in general, so plural 'flowers are' is appropriate. Also, 'smell of flowers' needs the definite article 'the' to specify the smell.

× And also I like to.

✓ And also I like to.

This sentence is incomplete and unclear. It should be completed or connected to the next sentence for clarity, but since it does not contain a grammar problem from the list, no correction is made.

× I like to give flowers as a gift to my friends.

✓ I like to give flowers as gifts to my friends.

'A gift' should be plural 'gifts' because it refers to giving flowers to multiple friends, implying multiple gifts.

× My mom really loves flowers, so I. Give my mother flowers as a gift, especially on a special day on for example her birthday. Birthday. Or wedding anniversary.

✓ My mom really loves flowers, so I give my mother flowers as a gift, especially on special days, for example, her birthday or wedding anniversary.

The original sentence is fragmented and has punctuation errors. It should be combined into a complete sentence with proper punctuation and word order.

× Yes, there are a lot of flowers where are live especially.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of flowers where I live, especially.

'Where are live' is incorrect; it should be 'where I live' to correctly indicate location.

× The kind of hunting river called some long term.

✓ There is a kind of hunting river called Som Long Term.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb, making it incomplete. Adding 'There is' forms a complete sentence.

× Is a beautiful park which is. Which has a lot of roses, so I really like to go walk on this tool. Anton Park.

✓ It is a beautiful park which has a lot of roses, so I really like to go for a walk in this park called Anton Park.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs proper subject, verb, and clearer phrasing.

× so I really like to go walk on this tool. Anton Park.

✓ so I really like to go for a walk in this park called Anton Park.

The phrase 'go walk on this tool' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'go for a walk in this park'.

× Yes, in my daily life I usually take photos of flowers because the photos are flower.

✓ Yes, in my daily life I usually take photos of flowers because the photos of flowers

The phrase 'the photos are flower' is incorrect; it should be 'the photos of flowers' to correctly describe the photos.

× Flowers makes me feel really happy, an refresh.

✓ Flowers make me feel really happy and refreshed.

'Flowers' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes'. Also, 'an refresh' is incorrect; it should be 'and refreshed'.

× So I often take the photos of flowers.

✓ So I often take photos of flowers.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'photos of flowers' in this context.

× Yes, I think in my country a lot of people send flowers to others because flowers means flowers can give people hapiness and flowers can be uh.

✓ Yes, I think in my country a lot of people send flowers to others because flowers mean flowers can give people happiness and flowers can be uh.

'Flowers' is plural, so the verb should be 'mean' not 'means'. Also, 'hapiness' is a spelling error corrected to 'happiness'.

× A good way to express emotion.

✓ A good way to express emotion.

This is a sentence fragment. It should be connected to the previous sentence or rephrased to be a complete sentence, but since it does not contain a grammar problem from the list, no correction is made.