Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，影响了表达的自然性和有效性。建议简化句子结构，直接表达观点，并用具体细节支持。例如，避免使用不正确的词汇如“two vulnerable”，改为更准确的描述。

例: Actually, I don't love flowers because they are quite fragile. For example, I once bought some cut flowers, but their colors faded quickly and they died after a few days.

提案: 回答中出现了不连贯和不准确的表达，导致内容难以理解。建议使用清晰的句子结构，避免无关或错误的信息，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, my girlfriend loves flowers, especially sunflowers. She likes them because of their bright color and the positive feelings they bring.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不准确，且内容不够具体。建议直接回答问题，并用具体原因支持，同时使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: No, there are not many flowers where I live. I think this is because people here don't pay much attention to flowers, and the area is mostly covered with trees and grass.

提案: 回答较为重复且语法有误。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: No, I don't take photos of flowers because there are few flowers around where I live, so I rarely see them on the streets.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题，影响了表达的清晰度。建议完整表达观点，使用正确的语法，并提供具体例子。

例: No, people in China usually send flowers only on special occasions like Valentine's Day or the New Year. Apart from these events, sending flowers is not very common.

× Well, actually I don't because I think there are two vulnerable.

✓ Well, actually I don't because I think they are too vulnerable.

这里的'two vulnerable'是错误的表达，应该是'too vulnerable'，表示“太脆弱”。'two'表示数字2，与句意不符。

× I still remember that once time I buy some followed flowers home, there are colors are fading quickly and after a few days they died.

✓ I still remember that once I bought some flowers home, their colors faded quickly and after a few days they died.

这里动词时态错误，'buy'应为过去式'bought'，因为描述的是过去的事情。'are fading'应改为过去式'fade'的过去式'faded'，'are'多余。'followed flowers'错误，应为'flowers'。

× My change history likes flowers very much, especially the sunflower because this stems from the song which was the same some of the spiders.

✓ My grandmother likes flowers very much, especially sunflowers because this stems from a song which was the same as some of the spiders.

'change history'显然是错误的词，应为'grandmother'。'the sunflower'应为复数'sunflowers'，因为泛指。'the same some of the spiders'结构混乱，应为'the same as some of the spiders'。

× So she really likes it and and it has a very bright color.

✓ So she really likes it and it has a very bright color.

句中重复了'and'，应删除多余的一个。

× No. One of the reasons that I think is that Chinese people don't prove much emphasize on the importance of flowers.

✓ No. One of the reasons I think is that Chinese people don't place much emphasis on the importance of flowers.

'prove much emphasize on'用法错误，应改为'place much emphasis on'，表示“重视”。

× And there are many trees and the grass near where I leave. Yes.

✓ And there are many trees and grass near where I live. Yes.

'the grass'前不需要定冠词'the'，'leave'应为'live'，表示“居住”。

× As I said, near the place where I leave there is not much.

✓ As I said, near the place where I live there are not many flowers.

'leave'应为'live'，'not much'后应具体说明名词，且flowers为可数名词，故用'not many flowers'。

× There are not much flowers so I rarely see them on the road or on the street, so I seldom take photos.

✓ There are not many flowers so I rarely see them on the road or on the street, so I seldom take photos.

'much'用于不可数名词，flowers是可数名词，故应使用'many'。

× No, I don't think so. Because people are China, they send flowers to others, especially on some important events like the Valentine's Day or the GNU years.

✓ No, I don't think so. Because people in China send flowers to others, especially on some important events like Valentine's Day or the New Year.

'people are China'错误，应为'people in China'。'the Valentine's Day'和'the GNU years'中定冠词'the'不必要，且'GNU years'应为'New Year'。

× Except from that, they seldom send flowers because.

✓ Except for that, they seldom send flowers.

'Except from that'应为'Except for that'，且句子末尾不应有不完整的'because'，应删去。